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Originally posted by Cupid
PhreshDiamond - What's the significance of a red wig? I don't get it? "Hetero heels clack on the pavement, I’m Diamond certification. " okay that made me cackle good job.
The rest of the verse is very basic. The chorus is okay, the some-what rhymes kind of work in this genre.
"what’s your name isn’t Pauline?" this part doesn't make sense.
Funnily enough, I don't hate this, but it does feel very rushed. I think if you're going to do this style of song, you can afford to be a little crazier, make it personal, bring in a few names and disses.
Try and fit the rhymes together, so they connect and aren't so random.
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very personal, so I think thats why you don't get the red wig or the pauline lines
I'm known to have a fetish for a sickening red wig, Paul is the name of a pokemonster who i used to forget the name of all the time hence that line, the job line is in reference to accid (another pokemonster) who is very lazy at his job. The vanilla line is in reference to those pokemonsters who don't really stand out or have big personalities.
I can 100% understand why all this would be non sense to the judges that don't frequent the pokemon thread though, so thanks for the comments!
Glad at least one line made you cackle which was the goal.
Let me go find what else I missed.
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batch 3 stays winning >
maybe because a large number didn't submit you will be allowed to