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Originally posted by Jackson
Stressing does change a LITTLE with region/nationality/accent, etc, but the same rules of English still apply. You can't just throw something completely out the window that completely changes the way a song is read. If you're forcing me to read words as the English language doesn't intend I'm going to call you out on it. I judge flow as about 1/3 of a song, and stressing as 1/3 of that, so if you can't handle 1/9 of your song being judges on your song being read naturally maybe this isn't for you. As someone that writes songs to be sung I realize even moreso that stressing is extremely important in the crafting of a melody (see: Unconditionally as an example of stressing done wrong). You're all asking us to just completely disregard incredibly important aspects of songwriting because you think your song's the best thing that's ever been written and rules don't apply to you.
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No one is saying to "throw it completely out of the window." In talking about stress in the first place, I was specifically referring to your review of Matty, in which you
created a stressing problem in his lyrics where
there was none. I'm not saying to disregard stress/flow, of course, but I'm saying that the nitpicking that you do to make yourself seem more qualified is both incorrect and unfair to contestants. You can pretend it doesn't impact scores too much, but most of your feedback is about stuff like this.
The second issue is that you said my song had a weird verse structure because of the line lengths (which, naturally, are artificial given that I chose to break after 3 syllables) and the last two lines didn't rhyme. Y'all talk ALL the time about changing up structure, playing with rhyme scheme, etc., and then if someone doesn't write a song with 8-syllable lines and a predictable rhyme scheme, it's a problem. So what is the truth?
Let's look at one of the greatest songs ever written, Joni Mitchell's "A Case Of You":
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V1:
Just before our love got lost you said
I am as constant as a northern star and I said
Constantly in the darkness
Where's that at?
If you want me I'll be in the bar
V2:
Oh I am a lonely painter
I live in a box of paints
I'm frightened by the devil
And I'm drawn to those ones that ain't afraid
I remember that time that you told me, you said
Love is touching souls
Surely you touched mine 'cause
Part of you pours out of me
In these lines from time to time
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My problem here is that I'm 95% certain that you would DRAG the hell out of the structure in this song (NO consistent meter, NO consistent stress pattern, a desultory rhyme scheme) when critics/fans/people with ears can agree it's one of the greatest songs ever written. No one here is Joni Mitchell or has half her genius, but all I'm trying to say here is that the content/concept should be the focus of a songwriting competition, not whether your ear picked up on stress or if you noticed a variation in syllable count. New writers especially need to hear this type of feedback more.
And for the most part, this has nothing to do with my song. I don't think DNA is the best song ever written, the best song
I've ever written, or my favorite song from this season of PH. You didn't even address stress in your review much. I was just speaking about a larger issue that many other members have brought up either in here or in personal correspondence with me. Because they're afraid to make judges mad tho, they don't say anything, leaving me and pears to voice concerns. I'm doing that partially on their behalf, because it seems kinda off when someone is asking me for feedback about their word choice/emotion/concept because they mostly got feedback about their slant rhymes or confusing meter stuff they don't understand.
Anyway, I'm glad to hear about your score breakdown, though that doesn't seem accurate when your review says that you loved my concept and the story progression and it was executed "fairly good [sic] apart from a few technical issues" and that ends up as a 6.5, but slay.
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Sorry I couldn't validate your superiority complex this week, enjoy your 6.5 /endfeud
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Hearing "superiority complex" come from you is just
i like you
