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Originally posted by Jackson
I'm not sure if I explained this enough in my review, but the main problem I had with your song was the lack of foreshadowing and explanation regarding the plot twist. It seemed like it was just there for shock value, and there's no explanation as to why he's suddenly killing his lover and burying her. Even if you had hinted to problems in the relationship or some sort of mental struggle on his end in the verses it would have greatly helped  |
I basically used the same format as Wild Roses Grow, the song it's paying homage too.
All the verses seem like a love song, except the last two, which is the murder.
The chorus is a little hint, "I see people walk above me" as to being buried, but can still seem ambiguous.
Like in Roses, the chorus is "They call me the wild rose, but my name was Elisa Day, why they call me that I do not know, for my name was Elisa Day". It seems innocent enough, until the last verse when you realize she was murdered where the roses grow.
I know our transitions weren't the best, and that was a struggle for us. 
But thanks for not scalping us bald. 
