There's nothing pretentious about that and that song has 10x more emotion than your songs about valleys and plains that somehow goes top 10 despite logic or reason
Some of the imagery feels like a bit too much; do we need both blueberries and raspberries before we hit the chorus? Is this a farmer’s market sis? And wine is def NOT the consistency or color of blood, so it seems like you could be a bit more exact in your metaphoric language if you’re gonna use so much of it. This is def the case for me where it was clear that imagery was being shoehorned in for the sake of imagery instead of for substance. I did like the chorus though; as cliche as ‘in my arms’ language might be, I kind of love it. It reminded me a bit of One Last Time (actually, now that I think of it, this is essentially a OLT rewrite) but I still thought the end of the chorus was so bittersweet :’( The end of the bridge was excellent and you had great rhythm throughout. wtf r cherry-colored nights though? have you ever seen a cherry?
Flow
Imagery
Creativity
Storytelling (it doesn't necessarily have to be narrative but I think each song should tell.some kind of story, not just random unrelated imagery and metaphors that goes nowhere)
Emotion
But each of them have smaller parts like Jackson said. Flow can be broken down into meter, rhyme scheme etc.
