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I Can Be Good - I'd r-ather you n-ot do t-his. Anyway, it's actually a breath of fresh air to see a sexual song in a field of gloom and doom suicide songs, so in that way you stand out! I can also imagine a melody to it (albeit it being "Good For You", but at least I can attach something to it.) I am glad you made it ever so slightly subtle instead of just "*** on my face yesss I'm swallowing your children and opening a nursery in my stomach daddy!" - I think a touch of subtlty is important when doing sexual songs because it leaves more to the imagination, which is always important in a song of this nature imo.
Anyway, although I think this isn't bad, I also don't feel like it's much of an intro. It was more of a regular song.
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It was an interlude...
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24. I Can Be Good (Interlude)
This is kind of a run of the mill sex song. It isn’t bad, but it isn’t that great or even sensual. The rhyme scheme bugs me a bit the way it seems like random lines rhyme at times. I do see some room for growth here, however, so I’m not giving up on you quite yet.
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Since the songs about bottoming for my BF it only seems natural that I reflect that in my score
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24. I Can Be Good (Interlude)
This screamed Revival-era Selena Gomez to me for some reason, like a mixture of Good For You and Me & The Rhythm. Maybe I’ve just been listening to those songs too much lately. But I was actually impressed with most of it; it wasn’t too graphic for a sexy song and left enough up to the imagination. “Load me into your gun” is one of my favourite lyrics this round. My main criticism is that I think it reads a bit too much like an incomplete song rather than an interlude and that did affect your score. But if this were a complete song, with a second verse and bridge, I’d really love it.
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Stan a bit! My bottoming song becoming versatile in reviews slightly
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24. I Can Be Good (Interlude)
I like that you went with a sensual theme but I want you to really take it far. One of the best pieces of advice I got last season was to embody the character that I am writing for and I would impart that on you as well. Really take it all the way and just go for it. At the moment it’s hinting at sexy but not quite getting there, so I think if you push yourself it’ll really help. I would also consider line length, as of right now it’s a bit abrupt in the way the sentences are structured. Using transitional words would be very helpful.
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I didn't think "salty shots on my lips" could be much more blunt
thank you for these! I actually love reading them.
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24. I Can Be Good (Interlude)
the selection met the right criteria and managed to go beyond. Good selection, I enjoyed all of your dynamics. You had very striking word choices, such as “salty shots on my lips,” phrases that you really don’t hear but just stick with you.
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Stan a bit. Not my song going through all the positions
It's not easy judging 53 entries, especially if you've never done it before! I think they aced it for their first time. 
You already know how I feel about the word "scene".
This AND CONFIDENT IN THE SAME DAY HOLY CRAP
Never again.