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Discussion: ATRL Songwriter's Thread | Jacktrus gain dual #1
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Originally posted by Eros
You sound JUST like Brendon Urie! Very similar tone and inflection in your voice. I feel like your music would be right up his alley too. You should try to submit some of your songs to his team!
I'm much more partial to these lyrics than Supernova, its not as contrived. The melody is so simple yet still resonates! The chorus is super catchy too.
But yeah this whole song gave me strong Panic! vibes. I'm really into it. The ending tho, not as much. I'd rework that if I were you.
I'd hella sign you out of anyone else in this thread if I had a label tho.
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OMG thank you I love this comment 
I'm a fan of Panic! although I've never noticed that before but I could see it and I love that comparison. That sound is exactly what I'm going for; something with a rock edge but still with good hooks and lyrics that mean something. And that last part means a lot, especially with all these people with actual produced songs 
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Member Since: 8/28/2012
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Originally posted by Jezang Looz
Ok I wrote this song last Saturday and Nait did the vocals and productions. It sounds AMAZING and I thought I'd share it with you guys. Literally top 40 perfection ugh. The lyrics aren't finished but it was just something that came to me in 10 minutes during a drunken night so enjoy! 
SILENCE OF THE NIGHT
LYRICS
[Verse 1]
I’ve been waiting for this all my life (all my life)
I’ve been staring at you for a while (for a while)
I didn’t think that you would come through (you would come through)
But you know there’s something I see in you (I see in you)
[Verse 2]
When the stars begin to fall and the sun begins to fade
You know my love can wait (love can wait)
And if the moon disappears, your love is all it takes
Your love is all it takes to make the pain go away
[Chorus] x2
And in the silence of the night
I hear your voice in mine
It says to hold on tight
And in the silence of the day
You take my breath away
Oh how you complete me |
This sounds so great now, Nait did a wonderful job 
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Originally posted by Karma Chameleon
This sounds so great now, Nait did a wonderful job |
Yes he did! Can't wait for him to get songs charting on Itunes and BBH100 soon  I can smell how close we are to the industry it's ridiculous. Just a few more months of grinding and networking and the right door will open.
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I'll be charting on the Bubbling Under, HeatSeekers, and Dance Charts 
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I just wanna make sure to remind everyone here to please register your songs! ASCAP, BMI, SESAC, which ever just sign up & register them.
It's free, look into it.
Whether you think your stuff is worth stealing or not, do it as a precaution!
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Bruh, I had a dream that my A&R was YELLING at the producers and myself, saying that my song sucked and to re-do it all over again. Maybe this is a sign. Thank God I haven't sent him ANY of my songs yet. 
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Originally posted by Eros
I just wanna make sure to remind everyone here to please register your songs! ASCAP, BMI, SESAC, which ever just sign up & register them.
It's free, look into it.
Whether you think your stuff is worth stealing or not, do it as a precaution!
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Thanks for this reminder, I'll do it now. 
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Never posted here, just found out because of another thread, "Most peaceful thread in ATRL" lol. I'm a very passionate songwriter, I've written hundreds of lyrics. Right now, however, I'm fighting through a writers block  Here are two lines from two different concepts for two different songs that I'm trying to pull out:
Line 1
I'm a wild bird
but you're the sky I can't conquer
Line 2
Would you swim in the river,
if you knew it's made of my tears?
If you knew how much it burned to cry them,
would you still leave me and disappear?
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Member Since: 10/18/2010
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Originally posted by Kunst
Never posted here, just found out because of another thread, "Most peaceful thread in ATRL" lol. I'm a very passionate songwriter, I've written hundreds of lyrics. Right now, however, I'm fighting through a writers block Here are two lines from two different concepts for two different songs that I'm trying to pull out:
Line 1
I'm a wild bird
but you're the sky I can't conquer
Line 2
Would you swim in the river,
if you knew it's made of my tears?
If you knew how much it burned to cry them,
would you still leave me and disappear? |
I love that first line! That line speaks to me in ways I couldn't imagine.
I love the imagery for the second line. Great stuff! You should try out for Platinum Hit when it happens!
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Originally posted by Kunst
Would you swim in the river,
if you knew it's made of my tears?
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Well damn.
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
I love that first line! That line speaks to me in ways I couldn't imagine.
I love the imagery for the second line. Great stuff! You should try out for Platinum Hit when it happens!
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Thanks! It really means a lot to me because since I've got my block, I've doubted my own work so much, but it's nice to know someone liked it 
Is Platinum Hits a sort of contest? OMG, I sooo wanna try then
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Originally posted by Tymps.
Well damn.
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So you like that line?
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Originally posted by Kunst
Thanks! It really means a lot to me because since I've got my block, I've doubted my own work so much, but it's nice to know someone liked it
Is Platinum Hits a sort of contest? OMG, I sooo wanna try then |
Platinum Hit is a songwriting competition we have in the Games section. Every week you have to write a song (lyrics only) based off of an assigned challenge. As someone who's been a contestant, a judge and a host, it's really fun, you improve a lot and you get to talk to lots of songwriters more intimately than you would in this thread. The next season, hosted by Truth Teller, is starting soon.
Actually, Truth Teller might hate me for this but for anyone who sees this, add your name to this list if you want to be PMed when the game starts.
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Originally posted by Kunst
So you like that line?
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Yes. 
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Originally posted by Tymps.
Platinum Hit is a songwriting competition we have in the Games section. Every week you have to write a song (lyrics only) based off of an assigned challenge. As someone who's been a contestant, a judge and a host, it's really fun, you improve a lot and you get to talk to lots of songwriters more intimately than you would in this thread. The next season, hosted by Truth Teller, is starting soon.
Actually, Truth Teller might hate me for this but for anyone who sees this, add your name to this list if you want to be PMed when the game starts.
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Awesomeee! I'm tots in, thanks for the info! Added myself
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Originally posted by Tymps.
Yes. |
Thanks 
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It's weird, I've been writing so much lately yet not a lot at the same time. (If that makes sense?)
Perhaps I should rephrase that. I've been writing a lot of lyrics lately, whether it be a verse here or there, a bridge or a chorus.. but I have only wrote a few complete songs. It's interesting though because the complete songs I have wrote so far are based off of two recent events in my life: 1) The passing of my nana & 2) My boyfriend I've been dating for the past six months, and all the feelings I feel with him. It's weird how they all sound sonically cohesive though, even though they are all deal with different feelings?
For example I wrote a song the night my nana passed away called 'Legacy'. To me it was what I needed to move on from her death and let the acceptance kick in, and basically it's just about how I will always remember her and keep her spirit/memories alive. Then I wrote two songs called 'The Sweetest Goodbye', wrote it about the feelings I felt at her funeral knowing that was the final moment we'd ever be in the same room again, and 'I Miss You', a song I wrote a few nights ago about the aftermath of her death and how I feel now that it's been a few months.
Then about my boyfriend, dear lawrd I've wrote so many songs about my feelings in this relationship that I am never going to judge an artist again when they write an entire album about one person.  But I have two that I'm proud of 'The Game of Love' which is about the risk you take with a relationship, and basically how love is the luck of the draw when it comes to finding the right person and than I wrote a song called 'Move Along' which is about my insecurities in the relationship but progressing to let them go. 
I know I'm talking too much but writing has helped me so much lately. I feel my most creative when life happens and I love how much I'm able to write right now. 
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Originally posted by Mezik
It's weird, I've been writing so much lately yet not a lot at the same time. (If that makes sense?)
Perhaps I should rephrase that. I've been writing a lot of lyrics lately, whether it be a verse here or there, a bridge or a chorus.. but I have only wrote a few complete songs. It's interesting though because the complete songs I have wrote so far are based off of two recent events in my life: 1) The passing of my nana & 2) My boyfriend I've been dating for the past six months, and all the feelings I feel with him. It's weird how they all sound sonically cohesive though, even though they are all deal with different feelings?
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This is me exactly right now . And all my songs are either about my boyfriend or moving away from home, like those are the only things I can write about right now.
On the bright side I have something really exciting coming soon that an ATRL'er is helping me with
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Originally posted by GotSkill
This is me exactly right now . And all my songs are either about my boyfriend or moving away from home, like those are the only things I can write about right now.
On the bright side I have something really exciting coming soon that an ATRL'er is helping me with |
I've wrote countless verses, but then it gets to the chorus and I can't make anything work. Or I'll start with the bridge or chorus, but can't get verses to flow nicely. 
I had an idea for writing about depression.. (I write depressing songs better than happy songs) after a girl in my Faculty committed suicide. But I'm still trying to recover from depression so I didn't want to go back to that place in my head just to write a song.
That's exciting about the thing you're working on! I've only did one co-write, but it turned out so good... 
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Wrote a new song yesterday, it's about a guy I dated for a few months one summer who was just incredible and made me feel on top of the world but who went away to travel the world on a big adventure with his friends. It's basically saying that although I miss him and would have liked to have had more with him, the thing that captivated most about him was his thirst for life and ambitious nature so ultimately I wouldn't want him to have not wanted to go on his adventure because that's kinda what I loved about him.
Anyway, here it is:
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WILD HEART:
I can still remember the taste of your lips on mine
cheap wine and cigarettes on friday nights
You were 19, I was 18
everyday with you was crazy and new
But I loved that about you boy
don't you ever lose that spark in you
that fire burning is beautiful
CHORUS:
Oh you, yeah you, you got a wild heart
and I knew, I knew all along, right from the start
that nobody could ever hold you back
a heart like yours no one could ever have
cos you, yeah you, you got a wild heart
I can still remember the smell of your aftershave on my skin
it drove me wild everytime, I don't know where to begin
Every touch was like a drug
I flew so high, when you were mine
Now you're gone and I'm here singing this song
but don't you ever lose that spark in you
cos darling what you got is beautiful
CHORUS
We were so young, just chasing the sun
not thinking about tomorrow or the things to come
with every touch I'd come alive
I miss you boy, I miss that fire
CHORUS
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