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Tournament: PLΔTINUM HIT • season six
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Originally posted by GotSkill
Im about to send the score breakdowns to Sam Jay, quote this if you want me to add you to the recipient list
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Originally posted by GotSkill
Im about to send the score breakdowns to Sam Jay, quote this if you want me to add you to the recipient list
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Originally posted by GotSkill
Im about to send the score breakdowns to Sam Jay, quote this if you want me to add you to the recipient list
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Here is the song I wrote for this round, if anybody's interested that is 
 Chillin In The Parking Lot
BREAK
Would you like some pot? Ow!
VERSE #1
Somewhere around the bend
We were once the greatest friends
Hangin’ out downtown looking for a way
To make every day count instead
They never saw our hidden paradise
It didn’t seem like much to the cool kids we fight
Amazed by what we found beyond the lights
The darkness that gave us the comfort we despise
PRE-CHORUS
The things we do, it’s not enough to lose
What I realise now and yet I still won’t choose
‘No regrets’ they say, but I don’t complain
In fear of what we’re heading to
CHORUS
Chillin’ in the parking lot
(We’ve made it so far)
Tonight in this place of ours
We’re making sense of what we are, babe
Pretending that we’re a-okay
But don’t leave me here, chillin’ near the parking lot
We’re just too young to die, I threw away my life
Cause I’m still chillin’ in the parking lot
In the parking lot
RAP VERSE
Are we only chi-chi-children in this board game?
It’s like we have no shame, everywhere I turn to
Is nothing but a wall I can’t climb over, it’s over
And I’m over this fresh new start you promised us
Chillin’ but we ain’t feelin’ the evil that we’re dealin’ with
With everything we left behind is what we should missin’, I live
Straight from the heart, that’s our real parking lot
Don’t be afraid of what’s gonna happen when we stop
PRE-CHORUS
The things we do, it’s not enough to lose
What I realise now and yet I still won’t choose
‘No regrets’ they say, but I don’t complain
In fear of what we’re heading to
CHORUS
Chillin’ in the parking lot
(We’ve made it so far)
Tonight in this place of ours
We’re making sense of what we are, babe
Pretending that we’re a-okay
But don’t leave me here, chillin’ near the parking lot
We’re just too young to die, I threw away my life
Cause I’m still chillin’ in the parking lot
In the parking lot
BRIDGE
Flames keep raining in the pits of our hearts
Livin’ like the world doesn’t really care about us
Going with the flow, I’m really on my own
Where nothing and something means everything is wasted
But I don’t wanna be where you’re not baby
(We try, we cry, we buy our time)
‘Til the sunrise
BREAK
Would you like some pot? Ow!
CLOSING CHORUS
Chillin’ in the parking lot
(We’ve made it so far)
Tonight in this place of ours
We’re making sense of what we are, babe
Pretending that we’re a-okay
But don’t leave me here, chillin’ near the parking lot
We’re just too young to die, I threw away my life
Cause we're chillin' in the in the waking moment
Oh-uh-of when we believe we can finally breathe apart
We can now finally see the stars, it chills our hearts
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Originally posted by GotSkill
Im about to send the score breakdowns to Sam Jay, quote this if you want me to add you to the recipient list
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Oh I notice fefe and Huga are here,
If you don't mind, could you please tell me one thing I tend to do that bugs you in my songwriting, something I should get rid of, or something you like and want me to include more of. I need to improve, I wanna stay for a while  I've been through my comments many times but I feel like I just need one target objective that can elevate my scores in your books.
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Originally posted by Element
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 I read Fefe's critique for somebody else and he really liked how they had one-liners which made their song distinct, so...
The song is called Chillin' In The Parking Lot for a reason
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"Would you like some pot? Ow!" is iconic. I kind of envision it with a british accent, idk why. Let me steal that for my second single, cause Matty already reserved the lead 
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Originally posted by GotSkill
Im about to send the score breakdowns to Sam Jay, quote this if you want me to add you to the recipient list
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don't remember if I already quoted it
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Originally posted by EuphorianSea
I read Fefe's critique for somebody else and he really liked how they had one-liners which made their song distinct, so...
The song is called Chillin' In The Parking Lot for a reason |
I like how it stands out! I was just not expecting it when I opened the collapse!
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I sent the scores, if you still want them you'll have to ask one of the people I sent them to
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Here's my entry for this week 
Back In Your Bed
Verse 1
Broken hearts, cold hands let go, I know I’ll come back to you someday
Your demons will always chase me down, but that’s a price I’ll pay
Chorus
I just wanna get back to you
Is that so wrong of me to do?
Can't get your love out of my head
I just wanna get out of your bed
I think I’d rather be in his instead.
Think I may get a plane ticket tonight
Cause I really wanna make things right
And get back to your bed
Back in your head
Get him outta my head
back in your bed
Verse 2
Those were the days, I never thought everything would change
When your bed was safe, before I went my own way
Chorus
I just wanna get back to you
Is that so wrong of me to do?
Can't get your love out of my head
I just wanna get out of your bed
I think I’d rather be in his instead.
Think I may get a plane ticket tonight
Cause I really wanna make things right
And get back to your bed
Back in your head
Get him outta my head
back in your bed
Bridge
Breaking down, crying right here
Remembering all that we saw
Beneath the sheets, you and me, climbing mountain peaks.
But I gave up and I got out, I was so wrong, why did I ever let you go.
Chorus
I just wanna get back to you
Is that so wrong of me to do?
Can't get your love out of my head
I just wanna get out of your bed
I think I’d rather be in his instead.
Think I may get a plane ticket tonight
Cause I really wanna make things right
And get back to your bed
Back in your head
Get him outta my head
back in your bed
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
"Would you like some pot? Ow!" is iconic. I kind of envision it with a british accent, idk why. Let me steal that for my second single, cause Matty already reserved the lead |
Wouldn't it sound amazing with Britney's british accent in Scream & Shout?
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Originally posted by Element
I like how it stands out! I was just not expecting it when I opened the collapse!
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Aw thanks  I decided to include it at the last minute cause I felt like the beginning wasn't strong enough.
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A 9.5 from GotSkill 
The highest score of the round from Fefe
Then Hugamari ranks me lower than two of the three eliminated competitors 
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Originally posted by Element
A 9.5 from GotSkill
The highest score of the round from Fefe
Then Hugamari ranks me lower than two of the three eliminated competitors |
Whew, I bet I was the one who was still lower 
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These scores are VERY interesting, to say the least. 
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Originally posted by MattyTacos
Here's my entry for this week
Back In Your Bed
Verse 1
Broken hearts, cold hands let go, I know I’ll come back to you someday
Your demons will always chase me down, but that’s a price I’ll pay
Chorus
I just wanna get back to you
Is that so wrong of me to do?
Can't get your love out of my head
I just wanna get out of your bed
I think I’d rather be in his instead.
Think I may get a plane ticket tonight
Cause I really wanna make things right
And get back to your bed
Back in your head
Get him outta my head
back in your bed
Verse 2
Those were the days, I never thought everything would change
When your bed was safe, before I went my own way
Chorus
I just wanna get back to you
Is that so wrong of me to do?
Can't get your love out of my head
I just wanna get out of your bed
I think I’d rather be in his instead.
Think I may get a plane ticket tonight
Cause I really wanna make things right
And get back to your bed
Back in your head
Get him outta my head
back in your bed
Bridge
Breaking down, crying right here
Remembering all that we saw
Beneath the sheets, you and me, climbing mountain peaks.
But I gave up and I got out, I was so wrong, why did I ever let you go.
Chorus
I just wanna get back to you
Is that so wrong of me to do?
Can't get your love out of my head
I just wanna get out of your bed
I think I’d rather be in his instead.
Think I may get a plane ticket tonight
Cause I really wanna make things right
And get back to your bed
Back in your head
Get him outta my head
back in your bed
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I read this a while back and I have to say it's phenomenal 
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Originally posted by keshaspearsxo
Whew, I bet I was the one who was still lower |
You weren't, actually!
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Yes Hugamari, yes
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I'm kinda glad that the judges were, more or less, on the same wavelength...it makes me feel less guilty
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Originally posted by Element
You weren't, actually!
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anyway I truly flopped this round
1 - 8 - 5 - gone
whew.
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Originally posted by keshaspearsxo
anyway I truly flopped this round
1 - 8 - 5 - gone
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You were #1 in the first round?  Poor Pears ha decline
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