Adam's Comments

EatmeZayn
What the actual **** Did you even look at the challenge this week? Meesa. Not only does the lyrical style and topic not fit with the music at all but it also doesn’t even have the same format There’s a difference between melody matching and matching the instrumental we gave you. How is there a dance break if there was no dance break in the instrumental we gave you? The saddest part is I love these lyrics, but you have to at least put effort into fitting the challenge, otherwise the quality of the lyrics themselves is irrelevant. I’m sorry.

Remember
Okay, so you obviously put effort into not only matching the instrumental but also the melody, which is okay but you didn’t need to go that far I think even if trying to match the melody you went too far to the point where you copied a bit. Like Glow and Blow rhyming, the “Now what? (what)” etc. The lyrics are kinda meh and trite (our favorite word ) but you get a BIT, not a total, pass because of the round’s matter. However, I still would’ve liked to see more originality. Anyone can write songs about shining like a star and showing your heart. And also you really didn’t have to copy-paste sections of the original into your song.

ImARudeBoy
Pretty good job! So obviously not a lyrical masterpiece but it fits the challenge and is intriguing enough. I know this was a really hard challenge not to be generic on but I could’ve gone without some of the triteness. For example, I lovelovelove the “polite” line. It’s not poetic, but it’s not trite either. That’s what I was looking for this round. I started cracking up at the Red Rover line, especially with the mental image it gave me But seriously, good job. See you next week.

Midnight
Clever idea! It’s not a perfect fit for the instrumental but I can see it being used. Not gonna lie, I lost it a bit at the “Digital Laura, analog Mitch” line, along with a couple others. I’m more than glad you carried through with the idea rather than just ditching it halfway through, but sometimes it just went to far. For example? “Laura, your server's getting hot” I’ll be honest, you know I love your style of lyrics but for this challenge you could’ve dumbed it down a bit for us. Versatility is “key”

Hustler
Okay, same thing I said to Remember, there’s a difference between melody matching and semi-plagiarism. For example? About half of that opening stanza is from the original song. The lyrics fit with the instrumental, obviously. Sometimes I’m like “YASSSSSS SIS BUSSY” and other times I’m like “meh hunTy try againT”. I could see “so let’s call a ****in taxi” being iconic like “One second I’m the Koons”. However, the repeating? The generica? Urgh. I mean, this was a really hard challenge not to be trite on, I know, and I can’t say I would’ve done a great job either. However, I have to judge as if I am a flawfree soul who writes perfect lyrics, so sorry

doodledot13
We asked you to match an instrumental, correct? I would’ve preferred if your song’s metaphors and subject weren’t strikingly similar to the original song. While some took a few lines here and there you took the whole idea behind the song. However, your lyrics are both not very trite and fit the instrumental. You got lucky with this instrumental, tbh All jokes aside, I can’t decide how much I should care that you basically stole the meaning of metaphors of E.T. It’s gonna be hard to rank you.

Challenge: Okay, so now actually understanding what your instrumental was, this does fit the challenge well. Theme: The theme's still muddled. It's not bad, but what the song's story tells and how the instrumental is almost doesn't connect. What I'm reading is a mix of happy and sad in both theme and lyrics. Lyrically: It could be better. Most of it feels unconnected and nonsensical. Separate, they're good, but together it's a cluttered mess. Verdict: Your theme is okay, but the whole songs is brought down by it not being up-to-par lyrically.

Challenge: I'll admit to you right now, your piece is exactly why I'm somewhat against this challenge. It would've been so much better had you just written lyrics that didn't follow the original melody to a "T". But, for what it's worth, it matches. Theme: I like that you changed the original perspective of a party song to a more inspirational song. That was good insight. Lyrically: Like I said, I'm not a fan of you copying and pasting the original melody onto your lyrics, but you were kind of on your own with that. However, your lyrics make much more sense than the original and there is much belief in what you say. Verdict: I can't knock you for using "Blow"'s melody, because this was good work. It's really all I have to say.

Challenge: I'll be honest: I kinda wish these were the actually lyrics to this beat. I feel more in-tune to what you were saying than what the original singer was. Theme: Simple. Effective. And fits the beat. It's good. Lyrically: There were some off-putting moments like "Red Rover" and "my body is your wonderland", but aside from those hiccups, it was all-around understandable and fitting. Verdict: You did a fine job with this! I would, however, like for you to push the naughty boy perspective more, but it's a very good job!

Challenge: Well, the lyrics fit with the melody, but not with where the accents are. It was hard to sing the parts that were placed where they were compared to how they are sung in the actual song. So, had it not be written clearly in the crux of the old melody, I would've been okay with trying to make my own melody to the beat. Theme: I don't get it. Really I don't! I mean, so many questions? Who's Laura and Mitch? How does one go about creating a tech noir? And what the hell is a tech noir? I could swear a noir is for a singular person, not for a threesome (trio). Lyrically: It's bad enough I don't already understand the theme, but the lyrics don't clear it up for me in the least. I'm just questioning everything you say. Verdict: It's too confusing, the theme is muddled, and your lyrics make about as much sense as a two-year-old reading a dictionary out loud.

Challenge: It was hard to match any melody to your words, but the rhythm wasn't terribly off-kilter, so I'm sure whatever melody was in your head when you wrote this is fine. Theme: This would've been perfect for a more hip-hop oriented beat, but this being a K-Pop beat, I understand the meaning and reason for the rap. Your theme was too easy. Push out of your bubble a little, you'll be surprised what you can make out of any idea or visual. Lyrically: You're there, but you fall back too easy on same-old metaphors. With something like this, it would've been so much simpler and fitting to do a full-on rap instead of mixing the two. And, also, the rhyme scheme was lost. It just wasn't there. Verdict: It was there, but it didn't go far enough.

I'm not going to go through the sections because I can't count this as an entry. Not because you are late, but because you didn't try. This is a clear rehashing of the original song, and the goal of this challenge was to branch out of the original and make it your own. So, I can't judge this because it's essentially plagiarism. I'm sorry.