doodledot13
Good job! I must say I’m impressed and I could see this being used. I don’t think the middle four lines are very necessary however. I like how the lyrics are obviously aimed at Crayola’s demographic of young children. Simple word choice, talking about fairy tales and imagination… it all sells the idea of Crayola. Good job.
Remember
Okay what the **** at that Nook/Kindle Fire “diss”. Barnes & Noble would never want to use that in a jingle. Book stores are a dying business, they don’t want to insult the future, improved (in some people’s opinion) generation of exactly what they do. The rest was okay. I could see the last line becoming “Sleepys… for the rest of your life”-esque iconic.
ImARudeBoy
It’s always really awkward when people try to give actual situations in jingles; I know from trying to write jingles and doing that. It just sounds awkward. The second half is great, however. It sounds sleek and cool, the exact type of thoughts Versace would want to give people on their products. It works really well and your entry would’ve placed higher if you submitted just that. Good work.
Hustler
The brandy reference
The typos
This doesn’t sound like a jingle, it sounds more like lyrics to a regular song. First of all of course Snickers are “fresh as candy”, they are candy
Second of all saying “tasty as brandy” will make people think it tastes LIKE brandy
Thirdly this song didn’t feel like it was about Snickers but rather like it was about a sexual encounter, otherwise known as coitus.
VDK
I won’t get mad at you for going over the line limit since it wasn’t in the original challenge post. As I said to IARB, giving actual situations in jingles just sounds weird and hokey. So I’ll just talk about the last six lines, which were the heart of the lyrics. They were pretty good, they’re getting across the point of KFC. However, some rhyming could’ve helped the last three lines. p.s. I like the line “the big old man”. Very clever.
EatmeZayn
I can see some of your poetic style poking through this, which usually is GREAT but for this it’s bad. Jingles should stay pretty basic and simple so that no consumer has to analyze the lyrics at all (not even a bit!) to get what they’re saying. This was just an okay entry. If I heard this jingle on the radio I probably wouldn’t remember anything about it.
Midnight
As I said to EMZ, this got a tad too poetic for a jingle. Jingles need to be overly straightforward. Also, wonder/ponder don’t rhyme
I like that you repeated the name of the company twice. After all, the more times you hear something the easier to remember / harder to forget it is. Obviously jingles are not your strong point, and you were out of your comfort zone. I wouldn’t say spend a bunch of time writing jingles every day but just think about how your lyrics can fit other styles.