I think Musickid, Nait, and I are probably the bottom 3 overall.
Citrus clearly scored another #1, yas queen.
All three reviews of my song definitely make sense, and even sort of touch upon the reality of the situation. I didn't write this song start to finish; I came up with a skeleton of the chorus, wrote the verses quatrain by quatrain, went back to finish the chorus, and then wrote the bridge once the rest was complete. So I ended up with four quatrains that I really liked individually, but they didn't work together as verses much at all. It occurred to me last night that the song probably would've been a lot stronger if I had deleted the "black belt" and
maybe the "purple heart" quatrains and either left the verses at four lines each, or added to the "paint the blues" and "green thumb" quatrains to give them more context or whatever. But anyways, Temp was right to call it "disjointed," because it was.
pears, "cactoid" is a real word. I checked before using it.
Jacks, would you think the color thing was any less contrived if I told you that I actually do I have a black belt and a green thumb (and lots of cacti, hence "cacti dreams"), and the "purple heart" quatrain was about being in the closet?
The "green thumb" quatrain is one of my favorite things I've ever written. I shocked myself.
Nobody has commented on the fact that the lines "use a rainbow of colors / by which I can be defined" are a gay reference.
Seems like she got the point that the song was supposed to be a bit sinister in tone. All those Scorpio traits together (passionate, possessive, resourceful, etc.) made me think of that concept and I think it fit the challenge well, tho I already said a while back that the writing wasn't super creative this time around.
The sooner the better.