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Originally posted by Jackson
You just had two great top 10's, chill
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Did I? It never really felt like it…
I haven't once felt like my effort mattered in this competition…
It's just what I used to love about this game seems to have disappeared…
I'm not used to not receiving some kind of encouragement at this point…
Now it feels like "dude, you aren't giving your all and we see it! Why keep going?" and it's like "Damn, why do I even try?"
I shouldn't feel that way with this competition…
Now it feels like my career choice, my life's work, it doesn't even matter…
Like I made the absolute wrong choice in following my passion…
And that's how I've been feeling this entire competition…
I always thought I was making the right choices in my life, but now, thanks to these last three seasons, I feel, for the first time in my life, stuck…
What do I do if I'm not good at songwriting?
It was the only thing that kept me happy…
Now it's depressing me… over and over again…
I'm sorry, you really didn't warrant all of that… none of you guys did…
You're gonna make it thru the rain
PLEASE. That line can be mediocre at best. If you think, "I just broke up with my ex" is an amazing lyric, I need to quit this game.
This was a very nice entry, I think this had more flaws than your last entry, but that's hardly saying much. I thought that this was ripe with emotion, and the chorus was EXCELLENT. It was just the pre-chorus and bridge that I had issues with. For the pre-chorus, the "Speed of light / Sight" rhyme was a poor rhyme amplified by a cliche image choice, and the "Show / Know" rhyme was in a similar boat but I thought that the way it led into the chorus made it work better. For the bridge, I didn't get "I'm sorry if those days started taking their toll", you KNOW those days took their toll, so why say "If"? The "Me/ Insecurities" rhyme was shakey, as was the first line of the last stanza (Demi Lovato should sue for the "Don't Forgetsus" rip-off!). FInally, I would've re-written "But I miss the days when we were close / The person in my life who I admired the most" as "But I miss the days when I was close / To the person in my life I admired the most". You're on a roll, keep it up!
Damn me for not writing the line I bolded. Seems so obvious now 