I didn't even realise it claimed Jack! and Euphorian too.
Now I'm torn whether to keep them in the game or not for fear of "breaking site rules" and getting the whole game shut down. And lovesong can't read and score the entries properly. This whole thing is just a mess and I have a lot to say about it but let me keep it cute.
lovesong copied all of the songs and saved them. He told us who were in Tinychat that, anyway. I think he might be sending you his judgments via Twitter somehow.
As for keeping Euph and Jack! in the game...just delay anything until they get back if you're really worried about it. There isn't much they could have done about getting banned, so yeah...I don't think it'd be fair to eliminate them like that.
Oh, and guys...I'm not even being mean at all for these critiques, mostly because I don't think my limited knowledge on a lot of these albums should be held against you.
I don't understand why everyone got banned from that Halloween game?
In Drag Race, when we had judges banned, the remaining judges would be the only ones with scores counting and they would just resume their spot on the panel when they were unbanned.
For the players, continue on the normal timeline for this game and if we get to the next challenge's submission deadline and they are still banned, they can be eliminated then. No sense in doing it now.
Everyone will be unbanned by Monday at the latest. Probably sometime during the weekend. I get why lovesong's ban is an issue, because he needs to get his judging done, but the contestants will still be able to see the results + the next challenge when it's posted... unless it involves sign ups again, I don't think there's a problem.
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@Jake nnn Idk that's just what I for out of Sams quote. Cause the people who got banned signed up for ATRL Halloween, they knew what they were getting theirselves into, no? So I thought it didn't apply to them
1. Girlicious – The New Classic, Iggy Azalea
I could actually imagine Iggy on this, and I was reading the song with her voice in my head. The fact that this could be an Iggy song isn’t the best thing for your score probably, but you met the challenge criteria perfectly. My biggest problem was with the last two lines of the second verse that don’t really make sense or fit in with the rest of the song.
2. conatus – Yours Truly, Ariana Grande
I’m a bit disappointed with this. This is probably the most generic entry I’ve read from you yet in the past two seasons. It wasn’t overwhelmingly Ariana perhaps other than the repetitive chorus, but that was also one of my least favorite sections of the song. I think the “putting pen to paper” line in the chorus was a bit too wordy and awkward in the chorus.
3. inuborg – Riot!, Paramore
I feel like this was just an OK song that fit the challenge OK. I’m not a huge fan of the line “we have our swords, we have our pens” in a rock-ish type song. This song is a good example of how meter and flow differ. Your song had excellent meter, but the flow was still off. Make sure you look at syllable stressing as well as syllable count in the future.
4. jpow – Prism, Katy Perry
You captured the theme of the album perfectly! I can hear this as almost a mix between Double Rainbow and Unconditionally. I love how you incorporated the natural imagery of the album’s booklet and performances into the song as well. The language you used was beautiful and soothing. The only line here I didn’t like was “when the lights go out/you make me feel brand new”. It just felt a bit forced. Other than that, fantastic job this week.
5. Nait Phoenix – Unapologetic, Rihanna
This was a much weaker entry than your previous two. This felt a bit too sweet to be a Rihanna track in my opinion. There were a ton of forced rhymes and awkward lines here as well, such as “I just go crazy over you/whenever we combine” and “I’m not actually permissive”.
6. Jaxswim – Beauty Behind the Madness, The Weeknd
I’m glad you came back from last week’s misstep (I know all the other judges liked your entry last week but I wasn’t a huge fan ). The verses are beautifully written. I did find a few awkwardly phrased lines, but they can be looked over. I think your main mistake this week was trying too hard to fit the title into your song. It seemed like you were just throwing in a few half-assed rhymes in the chorus until you could put the title in.
7. Kunst – Badlands, Halsey
Who told you you were allowed to slay this hard . This song fits Halsey perfectly, and the imagery here is so beautifully twisted and dark and strong. You had a huge amount of standout lines as well. Two of my favorites were “come here to live your present, come here to kill your past” and “I can taste a little Brooklyn on your lips”. The first verse did start off a little rocky in its phrasing, but you gained your footing pretty fast.
8. ausdaniel – 1000 Forms of Fear, Sia
The verses were solid, although nothing particularly stood out to me. I think your chorus was a bit too wordy, and the words you chose to use didn’t add much to the song. I could see Sia singing this, although her style is so broad that I could see practically anyone else singing it too.
9. Dylobs – In The Zone, Britney Spears
The “see” line in the first verse felt a bit too forced. I’m not quite sure what you were getting at with the garden metaphor but I’m not sure if I really want to know . A few lines in the second verse were also awkwardly phrased. Other than that, it seems like a classic Britney song more along the lines of Toxic, which is a good thing. I wish you had kept the final chorus throughout the song because I’m not really a fan of the bone line.
10. JakeKills – 1989, Taylor Swift
My least favorite part of this were the forced references to songs on the album. A few lines were a bit generic (“emotions start to fly”, etc) but I like the retro theme you set up here. The song is very relatable and radio friendly, which makes sense for Taylor. I wish you had elevated the language a bit more.
11. EuphorianSea – Blackout, Britney Spears
If your name wasn’t attached to this entry I would have never known it was you. For this challenge I find that to be a good thing. Your style is so distinct that I think it’s a great thing that you were able to dumb it down for a Britney track. Still, it read like one of Britney’s stronger tracks and fits the Blackout theme specifically.
12. ceremonials – Ceremonials, Florence and the Machine
The meaning of the song was a bit muddled, but I found that to be the only thing wrong with your song. It was a gorgeous, evocative narrative that would fit perfectly on any Florence album, and honestly I think you pulled it off better than Florence herself could.
13. Vulnicura – In Colour, Jamie xx
I’m not incredibly familiar with this artist or album, so my judgement is based only on the few tracks I just listened to, but you seemed to capture the artist’s intentions well. The lyrics were a bit simple yet incredibly descriptive which I think worked extremely well. I think this is your best entry yet. Still, I wish the chorus would have offered a bit more.
14. Obsession – True Romance, Charli XCX
The first verse started off a bit awkward, but you picked up nicely after a few lines and carried a good flow and theme throughout the rest of the song. As a song, it’s one of my favorites I’ve read from you during the two seasons I’ve judged you. Still, I didn’t think this really fit Charli at all. I get that you were trying to find a contrast to complete the album, but even the writing style was far too different from something Charli would write.
15. Nightingale – Emancipation, Mariah Carey
Some lines in this song were a bit too wordy, and the rhymes in the chorus were slightly forced. The song fit Mariah OK, but not phenomenally. There were a few lines I didn’t like, specifically “but your stickiness didn’t match my liking”.
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@Jake nnn Idk that's just what I for out of Sams quote. Cause the people who got banned signed up for ATRL Halloween, they knew what they were getting theirselves into, no? So I thought it didn't apply to them
Only the treats were revealed, the tricks were all called "Mystery Tricks" in the OP. Nobody knew what they were signing up for (presumably to maximise sign-ups as some people wouldn't join knowing they could get banned for selecting the wrong option).
16. 8thPrince – News of the World, Queen
I really appreciate the internal rhymes in the first verse. I didn’t enjoy some of the antiquated language in the song, although they worked in some contexts to fit in Queen’s style. The theme of triumph worked well with the overall theme of the original album. Your structure here was a little odd and hard to read.
17. Buyonce1814 – Unorthodox Jukebox, Bruno Mars
The verses were the strongest parts of this. They were fun, groovy, and catchy without feeling generic or forced. I found the air guitar line in the chorus to be cute as well. The hook is probably the weakest part of the song, as it breaks all the momentum you had built up to that point in the song. The outro was unnecessary.
18. BlueM – Loud, Rihanna
This felt a bit more Unapologetic or Talk That Talk, but I guess it could also work as an S&M sequel. The first verse was a bit rocky and struggled to find a good flow, but you caught yourself by the chorus. The sexual tension in the chorus and the almost explicit description was fantastic in my opinion. I just wish you had been able to carry that throughout the song.
19. MattyTacos – Daydream, Mariah Carey
Your verses are so beautifully poetic and enthralling . I can only wish the chorus lived up to the verses. I feel like there should be an exploding chorus after the soft, descriptive verses but instead you wrote something too familiar and generic. It works OK as a Mariah track in my opinion.
20. swiftie13 – Confessions on a Dance Floor, Madonna
I like how you took on slightly religious themes to an otherwise energetic dance track. Your flow was impeccable throughout the song, which is always something nice to see on a more electronic song. A few words, such as “penance” were a bit out of place for the themes and artist you chose, however.
21. Jack! – I Am…, Beyoncé
This feels like a typical 2000’s R&B girl power ballad. Basically, you met the criteria well, but there was really no personality here or much of anything to distinguish this between another artist of the period. There was nothing particularly bad here, but I wasn’t impressed either.
22. Tymps. – Frank, Amy Winehouse
I’ve been on a bit of an Amy thing lately, so I’m happy to see someone tackle her writing style. I think you pulled off her personality and spunk perfectly. I didn’t really like the line “but I can’t locate your mind”, but that’s just a small criticism. Of your three entries this season, this is my favorite.
23. keshaspearsxo – Plus, Ed Sheeran
There were a few things in your punctuation, specifically in the first verse and the outro that I thought messed up your flow a bit. I think the second line in the first verse should have been replaced as well. Although the hook was quite repetitive and familiar, I liked it in this context and it worked for an Ed Sheeran song. The bridge was by far my favorite part of this and it was where I could sense your style the best.
24. Element – Night Visions, Imagine Dragons
I’m glad someone chose to tackle one of my favorite albums of all time, and as the resident Imagine Dragons enthusiast on the panel, I can confirm that this song fit their style well, although A few lines, such as “the midnight oil” were a bit too poetic for Dan’s writing style in my opinion. The flow could be slightly improved in the chorus as well. I think your style and the style of this album fit well together. I love how you even incorporated the album artwork of the boy on the pillar into the chorus.
25. ClarksonSlays – Brand New Eyes, Paramore
Finally you delivered what I’ve been waiting for. Your imagery was on point much like with the first two rounds, but finally I felt like there was some meaning behind the words. The emotions in this song were incredibly strong and almost exploded in the chorus. My favorite line is “my body was painted with blacks and blues”. You get my first 10 of the season.
26. Urban_Fan – Fortune, Chris Brown
This song wasn’t bad, but there was nothing particularly striking about it either. The language was all very familiar, and while it fit Chris pretty well, I wish I could have seen a little more of your own style here. There were no major technical errors here, so I commend you on that.
27. TheCheetahwings – Multiply, Ed Sheeran
This was a bit of a step back compared to your last two entries, but it still wasn’t bad. My major problem with this is in the flow of it, where with this album Ed took on a more groovy style where the flow should be tighter. The language could be a bit more interesting, but honestly I don’t find Ed’s language to be that interesting in the first place so it fits.
28. HausofNiko – Pure Heroine, Lorde
You spelled dose wrong, you wrote this about heroin (as opposed to a heroine), and it was way too sexual for an album written by a 16 year old.
29. Moonchild – Living Proof, Cher
This reminds me of a song I wrote about a year and a half ago, and I imagine myself to be a good songwriter, so I like it . I would work a little more on your emotional draw, but there’s really nothing to criticize here. It fits Cher perfectly as well.
30. Kworb – Dead Petz, Miley Cyrus
From the moment I saw you pick this title it was the song I was anticipating reading the most. Honestly, I didn’t think you’d be able to pull it off. Fortunately you proved me wrong. This fits the themes of the album, specifically on the ballads, perfectly. It wasn’t quite my favorite song of the round, but it’s my favorite I’ve read from you yet and one of the strongest songs this week.
9. Dylobs – In The Zone, Britney Spears
The “see” line in the first verse felt a bit too forced. I’m not quite sure what you were getting at with the garden metaphor but I’m not sure if I really want to know . A few lines in the second verse were also awkwardly phrased. Other than that, it seems like a classic Britney song more along the lines of Toxic, which is a good thing. I wish you had kept the final chorus throughout the song because I’m not really a fan of the bone line.
Knowing that I wrote something "along the lines of Toxic" Makes me very happy, I know Imma be out this round but thank you
Thanks for your comments Jackson! Really appreciate it. Yeah I did feel like the outro was too much and Sam said the same thing. I should have gone with my gut feeling.
Thanks for the comment GotSkill, I will say however that penance is a religious word with a song that has a religious tone to it, I personally thought it wasn't out of place considering it has to do with the Catholic confession system but I appreciate the feedback! (unless of course you meant it was out of place in another way like stylistically or whatever, then I could see it)
Edit: wait your name is Jackson? Such an attractive name. Anyway...
(I know all the other judges liked your entry last week but I wasn’t a huge fan 
). The verses are beautifully written. I did find a few awkwardly phrased lines, but they can be looked over. I think your main mistake this week was trying too hard to fit the title into your song. It seemed like you were just throwing in a few half-assed rhymes in the chorus until you could put the title in.
. This song fits Halsey perfectly, and the imagery here is so beautifully twisted and dark and strong. You had a huge amount of standout lines as well. Two of my favorites were “come here to live your present, come here to kill your past” and “I can taste a little Brooklyn on your lips”. The first verse did start off a little rocky in its phrasing, but you gained your footing pretty fast.
. A few lines in the second verse were also awkwardly phrased. Other than that, it seems like a classic Britney song more along the lines of Toxic, which is a good thing. I wish you had kept the final chorus throughout the song because I’m not really a fan of the bone line.
but that is a huge compliment, 
. I can only wish the chorus lived up to the verses. I feel like there should be an exploding chorus after the soft, descriptive verses but instead you wrote something too familiar and generic. It works OK as a Mariah track in my opinion.
Knowing that I wrote something "along the lines of Toxic" Makes me very happy, I know Imma be out this round but thank you 
(unless of course you meant it was out of place in another way like stylistically or whatever, then I could see it)