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Originally posted by Hugamari
beatinglikeadrum & RihsusChrist(ATG) - I Am The Wolf
You didn’t have to make it a duet. I suppose you may have known that and went for it anyway? Regardless, I figured I’d mention it. Anyway, since you guys were so courteous as to designate who did what (or I guess, who was supposed to be performing what because I don’t know who wrote what), I’ll separate you guys.
Beatinglikeadrum: Let me start off with the most petty point I can think of: How can you be a king and a prince? That’s not how monarchies work. I’m going to be generous and say that the first verse was highly metaphorical, rather than literal, but I can’t really figure out what the metaphor means (I suppose the explanation is supposed to help?) The second verse was worse than the first verse.
RihsusChrist(ATG): Was this necessary? You really didn’t think to handle this subject with a bit more tact and grace? I’m not going to tell you to not have fun with your entries you submit; after all, this game is what you make of it, but this really just felt like a parody, and considering the topic you decided to tackle, it was tasteless. I suppose I should try and tell you, on a technical level, where I think you went wrong, so here we go. “fine/sigh” was not a good rhyme, because sigh was not a strong enough word to use there. “Oh, we’re in a night club and some crazed maniac is going around killing people? *sigh*” is about as uncaring as you were writing this rap. “Not gonna lie, seeing you suffer, you try to utter, as blood gushes further!” I know you resolve this sentence in the next line, but you used an exclamation mark, which dictates the end of the statement, but this is an incomplete sentence, and you shouldn’t end a line like this regardless. “Beg for forgiveness, but I'm f***ing vicious, your carcass delicious!!” should be “Your carcass is delicious”* or, “Your carcasses are delicious*”, not that carcass was a great word choice to begin with. The swearing was unneeded, as was the howling at the end, and I think that was the most disrespectful part of the whole entry. I wish we could score you guys separately, because beatinglikeadrum didn’t deserve this. 
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Oh the judge, jury, and executioner has arrived...who are you to judge how a person should feel in a situation? 
I'm not getting into another argument with you about what you feel is a legitimate entry or not...I'm not wasting anymore energy arguing with your soulless, droll opinions.
To explain my portion of the song...the Hunters would be the murderers...as in the shooting in the club has already happened, and his mothers final criticism causes him to snap, lose it, go crazy, lose control, go into a rage...you do understand that emotion, if you actually feel emotions that is???
Have you ever listened to a rap song...all the swearing that is in those songs? Must not have if your virgin ears sting from what I wrote!
Now the the thing that really hurts my feelings is that you would even insinuate...INSINUATE that my contribution to the song is in some way an intentional hindrance to my teammate, beatinglikeadrum! 
Judge our entries separately...he worked hard on his and I worked hard on mine. I still stand by our entry in what we were trying to convey, but if my part not being associated with his gets beatinglikeadrum in the next round Im all for that.
I had fun working on that song with him, it was a cool experience. 
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Glad I'm not alone on my Rihsus-Beating review! Great minds think alike  |
Since the great and powerful HUGAMARI has spoken...feel free to pile on.
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Swigie and I had the misfortune of coming up immediately after Citrusson and he still liked it. 
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The cliché of “under the same moon/stars/sun/sky” etc is one that I’ve always adored. I love it so much. This was y'all's first time with the Citrus-y style IIRC, but in comparison to the song before it, given that the format/styles/subject were very similar, this didn’t pack the same punch for me. Obviously, that won’t effect (affect?) your score, but I felt like I needed to note that given the context. This was a good song though, don't get me wrong, just short of a great one though.
- “The hardest thing I’ll ever have to do / But I'd do it again 'cause I love you” this was sappy
- “And I hope it's soon” a bit banal
- “But I always wake up to remember / I don't even have a single picture” this needed a rhyme to punch more
- The first stanza of the bridge bridge was a tad on the sappy side, but was still good
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When Hor first pitched the title my response was "we have to try not to make it too cliche." 
Didn't know it was a favorite of yours. Lemme bookmark that knowledge. 
Do remember and picture not rhyme? They both have the -ER sounding ending, don't they? 
I can take "good song." Probably could've turned it into a "great song" if we'd had more time. But "good" is good.
And how are we defining "Citrus-style" here? 
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Originally posted by RihsusChrist(ATG)
Oh the judge, jury, and executioner has arrived...who are you to judge how a person should feel in a situation?
I'm not getting into another argument with you about what you feel is a legitimate entry or not...I'm not wasting anymore energy arguing with your soulless, droll opinions.
To explain my portion of the song...the Hunters would be the murderers...as in the shooting in the club has already happened, and his mothers final criticism causes him to snap, lose it, go crazy, lose control, go into a rage...you do understand that emotion, if you actually feel emotions that is???
Have you ever listened to a rap song...all the swearing that is in those songs? Must not have if your virgin ears sting from what I wrote!
Now the the thing that really hurts my feelings is that you would even insinuate...INSINUATE that my contribution to the song is in some way an intentional hindrance to my teammate, beatinglikeadrum!
Judge our entries separately...he worked hard on his and I worked hard on mine. I still stand by our entry in what we were trying to convey, but if my part not being associated with his gets beatinglikeadrum in the next round Im all for that.
I had fun working on that song with him, it was a cool experience.
Since the great and powerful HUGAMARI has spoken...feel free to pile on. |
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Love it when people fight
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Are Mégas cancelled now ? 
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Originally posted by RihsusChrist(ATG)
Oh the judge, jury, and executioner has arrived...who are you to judge how a person should feel in a situation? |
You could have wrote the song from the perspective of the Orlando shooter, and gone into what was going through his head as he was doing it. Beatinglikeadrum did this without turning it into what sounds like a bad joke like you did. May I ask why you thought a rap verse was appropriate?
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I'm not getting into another argument with you about what you feel is a legitimate entry or not...I'm not wasting anymore energy arguing with your soulless, droll opinions.
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You know what, I don't think this was a legitimate entry, but I judged you as if I did. I explained why I thought what I did, you know, the thing you originally didn't like me for. I guess my opinion only matters if I love your song? It's not like I even had expressed bias against you, because another judge agreed with me. Your victim complex is so strong for someone who wrote a song from the perspective of a killer.
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To explain my portion of the song...the Hunters would be the murderers...as in the shooting in the club has already happened, and his mothers final criticism causes him to snap, lose it, go crazy, lose control, go into a rage...you do understand that emotion, if you actually feel emotions that is???
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I know emotions well, thank you. I just don't think you know how to express them in writing. I didn't get anger or rage from your entry. I could just imagine you laughing to yourself as you wrote about killing people in a night club.
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Have you ever listened to a rap song...all the swearing that is in those songs? Must not have if your virgin ears sting from what I wrote!
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I have listened to a rap song, but they simply weren't needed in your entry. They didn't serve a purpose that couldn't be made evident using different words, or by simply omitting the words. Word choice is important, and not just in the Twitter challenge.
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Now the the thing that really hurts my feelings is that you would even insinuate...INSINUATE that my contribution to the song is in some way an intentional hindrance to my teammate, beatinglikeadrum!
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"Insinuate"? The only thing I said is that you dragged him down, and spoiler alert: you did, and every judge would agree. I never insinuated you did it on purpose. I don't think you're out to get anyone but me, if we're being honest. You're witch hunting me when no other contestant has had a problem with me, and you can stop flattering yourself; I don't give you special treatment. I judge you like I do every other contestant.
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Judge our entries separately...he worked hard on his and I worked hard on mine. I still stand by our entry in what we were trying to convey, but if my part not being associated with his gets beatinglikeadrum in the next round Im all for that.
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I would if that's what we were supposed to do, but this challenge is about working as a group, so I have to judge you together. Would love for pear to tell me otherwise, though.
I do not have a vendetta against you like you think I do. I DO have a problem with people sending in what you sent and being so damn surprised that it was received negatively that they think the judge has a problem with you personally. You're the one with the problem, hun.
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On mobile taking a break from driving at a McDonalds so am reading things slowly 
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Originally posted by Corsola
Okay well lemme pray for our entry now. I actually really liked limited/free-spirited though and so did someone else who saw the song. At the very least I don't think it was forced.
I can see your point for everything else though, especially round 1. I actually felt the same thing with the transition line you talked about.
Overall I'm shook for this entry now when I was slightly confident before dsfndjag everyone who saw it liked it and when we got critiques from ceremonials I did my best to apply every single one of them to the final draft but I guess it didn't work |
The lies. I told you what would happen if y'all submitted that, maybe next time you'll trust me xo
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SaintWest & Kunst - Home
[pre-reading note: I’m actually really intrigued by this collaboration, because I see great potential in you both.  ]
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This means a lot, thank you! Our entry had its flaws, but we served visuals and had fun, so. 
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Whew, class, talent, grace and kindess WINS kids.
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On mobile taking a break from driving at a McDonalds so am reading things slowly
The lies. I told you what would happen if y'all submitted that, maybe next time you'll trust me xo |
No, you just told me in an extremely condescending manner that our concept would get us eliminated when it was on an old rough draft. Just our concept, nothing else. And coincidentally, since I wrote that, Hug highly praised our concept and said it was creative and he liked our entry for it.
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Furthermore, you laughed at the entry and told me in another condescending tone that I could not write a song about a girl with ptsd who's mentally ill and talking to an imaginary friend because it's just too long to write in a song. Since that conversation, the song changed completely and every single bit of that was included very clearly in just 2 verses.
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the exposes and tea getting squirted around here.
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Originally posted by Achilles.
Swigie and I had the misfortune of coming up immediately after Citrusson and he still liked it.
When Hor first pitched the title my response was "we have to try not to make it too cliche."
Didn't know it was a favorite of yours. Lemme bookmark that knowledge.
Do remember and picture not rhyme? They both have the -ER sounding ending, don't they?
I can take "good song." Probably could've turned it into a "great song" if we'd had more time. But "good" is good.
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They both have the ER sound but the stressing is really different
And it's the emotional style without imagery that Citrus invented with "To"! 
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