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Aurora – Snowflake Secrets
[DISCLAIMER: You are free to take what you want from this/completely ignore whatever I say.] Well sorry @ your explanation, but I’m just gonna imagine that this song is from the viewpoint of the annoying ass boyfriend in those gay teen love stories that always goes back and forth between “I’M NOT GAY!!!” and wanting to rip the virginity out of the other one’s ass. In this way, it makes for an interesting idea for a song. I really liked the imagery in this song, even if I couldn’t have even guessed what the song was about until I read the beginning of the explanation. You have an obvious grasp on writing, so I can’t really nag your for technical things (except @ you using like a 6-syllable word, girl wyd), and you kept your theme and imagery consistent, BUT I think you let yourself drown in your metaphors and it doesn’t have an emotional punch, so that’s what I would try to avoid next time.
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At least all the judges have pretty much the same opinions.
Didn't like that they couldn't get the subject without the explanation, didn't like the unnecessarily big words and thought the metaphor was a bit of a miss / got lost in translation I suppose. Thanks.
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Originally posted by Dylobs
Aurora in a nutshell
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I'll rip the virginity out of YOUR ass if you don't SHUT UP right now bitch!
