[8thPrince]

Fifty-One is my moody/trippy piece, I hope the next challenge enables me to write something hype

[ceremonials]

And me we better tug at batch 1s weave a bit.

[Hugamari]

Originally posted by Achilles.

Well, there goes my plan to write an electronic song called "Apple of My Eye" about consumerism and brand loyalty.




Anyways, I just submitted. Looks like Prince and I will be together in batch 3.

I mean, a 10 if you drag Apple.

[Corsola]

Honestly though Apple is trash and I'm never going back.

I bought a Macbook in 2010 and used it for a few years and phew the HORRIBLE chargers. Not only are the Macbooks themselves overpriced but then they make the chargers with such awful material so that it breaks easily and then you have to pay for another one which costs 6x the amount of a normal computer charger for NO REASON. And iPhones are overpriced of course etc. Apple is just SCAMMERS and highway robbery.

[ceremonials]

Idk how to make tables so let me just list my entries

#? No Sun on the Horizon
#8 Unholy Night f/ Buyonce1814
#8 Anchor
#13 Madness Ends
#15 False Prophet
#16 Ceremonials

I don't claim the others/I don't know where they placed.

I hope this song will be slightly above Anchor and Unholy Night, but I think that will be difficult since it's the first round. Praying everyone else flops

[ceremonials]

I kinda miss my iPhone so let me not drag

[Hugamari]

Originally posted by Corsola

Honestly though Apple is trash and I'm never going back.

I bought a Macbook in 2010 and used it for a few years and phew the HORRIBLE chargers. Not only are the Macbooks themselves overpriced but then they make the chargers with such awful material so that it breaks easily and then you have to pay for another one which costs 6x the amount of a normal computer charger for NO REASON. And iPhones are overpriced of course etc. Apple is just SCAMMERS and highway robbery.

Omg drag

[Aurora]

Originally posted by Temporal

Score Distributions for Batch Two
10 - 0
9 - 0
8 - 1
7 - 3
6 - 1
5 - 0
4 - 1
3 - 1
2 - 1
1 - 1
Avg - 5.366

I think I'm the 6 tbh.

Wow @ you pandering to me...pathetic.

I think you’re capable of more.

I think you’re a good writer, but this wasn’t the right format or genre.

I feel like any of these could be about mine but it's most likely the first one.

[Aurora]

Originally posted by keshaspearsxo

have u seen some of these concepts though the girls will be like "okay my song is about a couple getting a divorce but it isn't mentioned anywhere in the song its actually represented by a window and the plot twist is it isn't actually a window its a bowl and the writer is actually a goldfish who in a past life was a human and the song is all about this goldfish's memories of it's past life as a human when he had a heart attack after he found out he was getting a divorce. i'm shocked y'all didn't realise, it was so clear"

is this shade

[Uneek]

"I think you’re a good writer, but this wasn’t the right format or genre."

This is me. I guarantee it.

[Moonchild]

Tbh, songs (or any writing) should be able to stand on their own with no explanation or very little. Singers may elaborate a little in their interviews, but they don't have five-minute spoken word tracks in their albums explaining each song. You should say what you wanna say in the writing itself. If your explanation isn't easily supported by the lyrics, it's not part of the song.

[Hugamari]

Originally posted by Moonchild

Tbh, songs (or any writing) should be able to stand on their own with no explanation or very little. Singers may elaborate a little in their interviews, but they don't have five-minute spoken word tracks in their albums explaining each song. You should say what you wanna say in the writing itself. If your explanation isn't easily supported by the lyrics, it's not part of the song.

I agree. That's why I do not take explanations into consideration UNLESS I completely do not get the song at all. If that's the case, though, an explanation may take a song from like..a 2 to a 3 or 4, so you're not in a good state if I need an explanation.

[keshaspearsxo]

Oh at 10 notifications

[keshaspearsxo]

Originally posted by Aurora

is this shade

Haven't read your entry, so no

Also low key I feel like judges has said things before and then not spoke up when somebody has asked if its about them, but I think you know I'd legit tell you if something I posted was about your song. It's just a general observation over the my time in the season's I've been a part of. I think simplicity really has a place in this game that people generally overlook, but judging by the few things I've read from this challenge, there are some nice examples.

I don't really have an opinion or preference in simple vs extravagant, either. I'd say I'm really open to different styles of writing. But my post was moreso me trying to explain that i think, at times, people in this game kind of bite off more than they can chew in trying to go for some big "concepts" that they worry them self endlessly over

[keshaspearsxo]

Originally posted by Moonchild

Tbh, songs (or any writing) should be able to stand on their own with no explanation or very little. Singers may elaborate a little in their interviews, but they don't have five-minute spoken word tracks in their albums explaining each song. You should say what you wanna say in the writing itself. If your explanation isn't easily supported by the lyrics, it's not part of the song.

Judging from this post then, I guess I shouldn't click any of the hyperlink explanations of references in your entry and let the song speak for itself instead?

[Hugamari]

Originally posted by keshaspearsxo

Judging from this post then, I guess I shouldn't click any of the hyperlink explanations of references in your entry and let the song speak for itself instead?

Unfortunately for her, that's what I did.

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Sorry I haven't even started on you Batch 2 girls. I have a belated Thanksgiving with my uncle tomorrow (or later today, I suppose) and I am also a contestant in another game and I haven't started my entry. I will still try to give you all fair and helpful critiques, but if you notice I put more into writing for the Batch 1 girls...it's because things just caught up to me so quickly.

[Aurora]

I think I fixed my song for y'all.

Snowflake Secrets (Kidz Bop Version)

Verse I
You’re the gayest straight that I’ve ever known
A homo pretending to be a hetero
Clouding up my mind with sexcrazed fantasies
And dreams of being your one and only

Pre-Chorus
I know you’re gay
But you won’t admit it to me
Why won’t you admit it to me?

Chorus
I’m attracted to you
And I think you’re really unique
I pick up on hints that you might be gay
From the way to move to the things you say
But you try your best to hide them
Heteronormativity takes control
Your feminine ways, they go away
Replaced by a straight-acting bro

Verse II
Share with me your struggles, not your false smiles
Tell me ‘bout the troubles in your mind
But please don’t try to tell me you’re not gay again
As I can see right through your stupid lies

Pre-Chorus
I know you’re gay
But you won’t admit it to me
Why won’t you admit it to me?

Chorus
I’m attracted to you
And I think you’re really unique
I pick up on hints that you might be gay
From the way to move to the things you say
But you try your best to hide them
Heteronormativity takes control
Your feminine ways, they go away
Replaced by a straight-acting bro

Bridge
Hope’s literally all ****ing gone
You’ve pissed me off too much
You’re leaving soon anyway, so bye bitch
You’re all alone, you could have had me

Chorus
I’m attracted to you
And I think you’re really unique
I pick up on hints that you might be gay
From the way to move to the things you say
But you try your best to hide them
Heteronormativity takes control
Your feminine ways, they go away
Replaced by a straight-acting bro

[Buyonce1814]

Originally posted by Aurora

I think I fixed my song for y'all.

Snowflake Secrets (Kidz Bop Version)

Verse I
You’re the gayest straight that I’ve ever known
A homo pretending to be a hetero
Clouding up my mind with sexcrazed fantasies
And dreams of being your one and only

Pre-Chorus
I know you’re gay
But you won’t admit it to me
Why won’t you admit it to me?

Chorus
I’m attracted to you
And I think you’re really unique
I pick up on hints that you might be gay
From the way to move to the things you say
But you try your best to hide them
Heteronormativity takes control
Your feminine ways, they go away
Replaced by a straight-acting bro

Verse II
Share with me your struggles, not your false smiles
Tell me ‘bout the troubles in your mind
But please don’t try to tell me you’re not gay again
As I can see right through your stupid lies

Pre-Chorus
I know you’re gay
But you won’t admit it to me
Why won’t you admit it to me?

Chorus
I’m attracted to you
And I think you’re really unique
I pick up on hints that you might be gay
From the way to move to the things you say
But you try your best to hide them
Heteronormativity takes control
Your feminine ways, they go away
Replaced by a straight-acting bro

Bridge
Hope’s literally all ****ing gone
You’ve pissed me off too much
You’re leaving soon anyway, so bye bitch
You’re all alone, you could have had me

Chorus
I’m attracted to you
And I think you’re really unique
I pick up on hints that you might be gay
From the way to move to the things you say
But you try your best to hide them
Heteronormativity takes control
Your feminine ways, they go away
Replaced by a straight-acting bro

Is this a prequel to my iconic song Gay? .

The heteronormativity line . Poor others.

[Aurora]

Originally posted by Buyonce1814

Is this a prequel to my iconic song Gay? .

The heteronormativity line . Poor others.

Sure, why not! It can be on the compilation album with "Dark Side" and "Pony". Iconic songs only.

[keshaspearsxo]

Nobody is saying be banal tho