ALSO, I feel like I should trust my instincts more in this game tbh. Like I loved the "I know how many steps it takes to reach your bed from the bedroom door" line from a few weeks back but I thought, "Watch some judge critique the way 'bed' appears twice
" I ultimately liked it so much myself (and it sounded good when sung), so I left it in. Then Clarkson didn't like it.
Then this round I thought the caffeine line was clever since caffeine keeps you awake and the song is all about wanting to be asleep as much as possible. (Plus I like how the verb "giving up" applies to an intangible concept [this dream] and a physical thing [caffeine].) But I still thought a judge might not like the register of the diction, and then Clarkson didn't.
When I think a judge won't like a line in the future (if I make it), I better just leave it out
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Originally posted by swiftie13
3 people using instrumental 4 tells me that songwriters really are just depressed people
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Omg, I didn't realize
Now I want to hear all 3
