So I came up with a new concept.

It has the same name as my already-submitted intro, though! I won't have to change the name of my album should I decide to send it instead.
However, I imagine this song having more of a feel good tropical vibe than a folk lullaby type. My new song is definitely catchier! I'm already singing the chorus in my head, and I have been for like 20 minutes.

I'm just not sure if it's lyrically better, though...