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Tournament: PLATINUM HIT 8
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Well my song flopped but it's a Top 3 flop!
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Originally posted by ughgabriel
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GotSkill loved my song but Huga hated it 
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My top 3* smash was released on iTunes this past Friday after Thanksgiving. Support the troops and bi it 
*on the holiday charts
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I'm almost finished with my history flashcards thank f***
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History>
I was the biggest nerd in all my history classes, I love it!!
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Originally posted by MattyTacos
GotSkill loved my song but Huga hated it |
I don't necessarily think Huga hated your song, maybe he just felt like it didn't fit with the challenge. GotSkill felt that way about my song, but he liked it after all, don't put your head down!
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is anyone here? mtinychat? i need to get my mind off things
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Originally posted by GotSkill
is anyone here? mtinychat? i need to get my mind off things
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I can join in a biT, I still have 3 flashcards to finish.
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Originally posted by ClarksonSlays
I can join in a biT, I still have 3 flashcards to finish.
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Nvm actually 
Probs tomorrow though, I have the day off
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Originally posted by swiftie13
History>
I was the biggest nerd in all my history classes, I love it!!
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thats me right now
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Originally posted by GotSkill
is anyone here? mtinychat? i need to get my mind off things
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Drag me
But anyway, you sound preoccupied, hopefully you'll feel better (if you aren't)
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Originally posted by MattyTacos
Not surprised to see Huga drag me, who's next to post comments?!
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Same! I was expecting it tbh
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I guess i can share this here. Me and my boyfriend were fighting and then he drove away for ten minutes, but he's back and we're talking and I'm OK now. We never fight so it's weird. He did diss my guitar playing tho (bc he jelly) and I will NOT forgive him for that 
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Timeline updated with GotSkill's and Hugamari's comments. lovesong's coming in a few!
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Originally posted by GotSkill
I guess i can share this here. Me and my boyfriend were fighting and then he drove away for ten minutes, but he's back and we're talking and I'm OK now. We never fight so it's weird. He did diss my guitar playing tho (bc he jelly) and I will NOT forgive him for that |
I'm glad things are okay now. 
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Originally posted by GotSkill
I guess i can share this here. Me and my boyfriend were fighting and then he drove away for ten minutes, but he's back and we're talking and I'm OK now. We never fight so it's weird. He did diss my guitar playing tho (bc he jelly) and I will NOT forgive him for that |
The PH power couple better pull through
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lovesong's Comments
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01. Popsicle – I’m Gonna Rise
I felt like the phrasing and the pacing were awkward at times. There were also a couple of cliché lines that stood out to be in a bad way. I like the idea of it, and it certainly portrays a comeback nicely, but it needed more polishing and attention to detail.
02. KeshasFansRose – Led Me Blind
As a song, it’s okay. I was really hoping for something that would excel or show your growth. To me, this song felt very much like a first round song in that the ideas were great but the way they were organized took away from the impact.
03. DevonRoars – King
This was kind of a cool approach but I really needed more. I wasn’t able to be fully convinced because it was a little too much on the simple side. It needed more substance to really expand on the ideas you set up here.
04. ughgabriel – Portal
This was a pretty creative approach to the challenge, and I like how death was personified. I felt like there were a couple of awkward lines that read strangely – “we never are”, “heading to their route”, “sweet portal”. Overall it was a nice approach though.
05. MattyTacos – Serenity
I was kind of getting Adele teas the whole way through. I like the chorus, and I like the bridge. Both touch upon the revival theme in unique ways. I was starting to get a bit tired of the constant use of questions though. It isn’t just you, but rather it’s used throughout the competition. It can be effective, but it can just as easily be overdone.
06. RihsusChrist(ATG) – The Mountain
A little different which was kind of cool, but I still felt like I needed something. Almost like there was just something missing – maybe you could have expanded on the ideas or twisted things a little? – but it was brave of you to go in a different direction. I’m just not entirely convinced about this song.
07. Witch_Privelege – Set Me Free
This has a really cool concept to it. I like the ideas behind certain sections like your chorus, and how they changed throughout the song, but a little more polishing might have taken it to the next level. Nice use of imagery though.
08. J P O W – Icarus
adlkjf normally I don’t mind an error here and there but *you’re stood out to me right away. Anyways I was excited to read yours, and I can easily see why. Your writing is very polished and comes together nicely, making it easy to read. My only problem was that the imagery in the chorus was kind of weak, I think it needed something to help give it more life.
09. Element – Skyline
nnn. I liked this. You really “came back” with this entry, definitely love the structure and how polished it was. I love the use of language and I was really convinced in terms of it being a comeback song. I was a little skeptical of the imagery in the chorus at times (just bordered on cliché), and I would have maybe liked to see Verse 2 be a little more substantial, but still very good job overall.
10. HausofNiko – Phoenix
What kind of literal rise of the phoenix? I love to see how you’ve taken our feedback to heart and really applied it to your song. However I still had some problems with awkward lines and strange word placement. It just needed a little extra push of polishing to really convince me.
11. wesleywalrus – Shooting Star
A little bit of forced language and rhyming here and there. I like the concept, and it was very unique in terms of the other entries, but something was missing. One thing that was a bit odd for organization was how two completely separate ideas would be paired together in a section. It was like one second we’re talking about a “creature created inside of me” and then we suddenly shift to “power of Mars”? It was all kind of vague and lacked a good flow.
12. Colton Haynes – Bulletproof
My major concern was the use of clichés here. They really took away the impact of your song and your ability as a writer. I did like certain aspects like the bulletproof concepts, I just wish that there was a more creative approach to that.
13. Truffle. – See Those Stars?
This is sweet and I can tell you put a lot into this. I like certain aspects but definitely don’t like others. There were several clichés and awkward lines (“this crown..”, “I will soar”), but at the same time there were nice moments too. It was kind of just, in the middle I guess.
01. swiftie13 – Little Soldier Boy
Really loved this entry, and how much it is you. Very well structured, a very cool concept, just a little emotional. It looked so much like a country song that they’d sing for some benefit around this season dd. I loved the language use, the imagery, and the approach.
02. TheCheetahwings – Lonely Holiday
aldskfj crying. This was beautiful! A little cliché stuff here and there but all the way through it was well written and very tight. The concept came through beautifully through your word choice and rhythm and I loved the bridge so much.
03. ClarksonSlays – Christmas Fun
 Yas.
I am SO glad that you really went there with this challenge. And you definitely did it well. If anything this is as strong as some of your other entries. Again, your writing is so uniquely you that it really gives you a distinct and convicning voice. I love this song and I love that you had fun with your entry.
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DEATH at my reviews so far.
GotSkill: Negative/Mixed
Huga: Mixed
LoveSong: Very Positive
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05. MattyTacos – Serenity
I was kind of getting Adele teas the whole way through. I like the chorus, and I like the bridge. Both touch upon the revival theme in unique ways. I was starting to get a bit tired of the constant use of questions though. It isn’t just you, but rather it’s used throughout the competition. It can be effective, but it can just as easily be overdone.
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Well I'm glad that someone noticed the revival themes, I was trying not to cram it down the judges throats but hint at it just enough that it fits in the category and you're the only one who noticed so far.
But I'm glad you enjoyed my song and rereading it I could see how the questions could be annoying. 
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