Thanks for the comments GS and Huga. I have nothing to say about the forced rhymes. They were pointed out to me by Clarkson but I was too invested in the song to do something about it. If I make it though, I'll take that into consideration.
I'm so tired and barely able to see what in typing lmao
I saw them live in February, Cardiac Arrest was my most played song of 2014 and Language and Perspective was my most played album, so yes.
@vulnicura I saw your comment a few pages back asking about my critique, I'll wall message you tomorrow when I have the opportunity to look at your song again.
I saw them live in February, Cardiac Arrest was my most played song of 2014 and Language and Perspective was my most played album, so yes.
@vulnicura I saw your comment a few pages back asking about my critique, I'll wall message you tomorrow when I have the opportunity to look at your song again.
I never post my songs publicly, but I wanted to share this one because I know there were a lot of reactions to the difficulty of my theme/word. I figure someone might be interested in seeing how I tackled it.
Float Away
"Float Away"
Verse
Just another victim who was taken by time
A shell of who you once were, on these playground slides
The wind rips through you, and tears you apart
Tugs your heartstrings, and impales like darts
Chorus
You hold your red balloon in hand with a smile upon your face
But the tears behind your visage will surely take its place
The colors all turn shades of grey, your innocence begins to fade
Can't hold on no more...Can't hold on no more
You'll let it float away...
Verse
Just a withered shadow who was robbed of its light
Thoughts once full of cotton candy, now give up their fight
Irrelevant as paragoges, your happiness screams
I'm sorry that the world has taken away all your dreams
Chorus
You hold your red balloon in hand with a smile upon your face
But the tears behind your visage will surely take its place
The colors all turn shades of grey, your innocence begins to fade
Can't hold on no more...Can't hold on no more
You'll let it float away...
Bridge
Hold on tight, hold on tight...
But the wind is pulling hard
Held on tight, Held on tight...
But the wind just pulled too hard
Chorus
You held your red balloon in hand with a smile upon your face
But the tears behind your visage have now taken its place
The colors all turned shades of grey, your innocence, it's gone today
Can't hold on no more...
Couldn't hold on anymore...
You let it float away...
It's okay. I like what she tried to do, but she could have gone further with it. I'd be here for her next album having that kind of flair to it though.
Same kind of thing with By The Grace of God. A really good song that could have been even better if it was just a bit more darker and maybe reeled back a bit.
Float Away
