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Discussion: ATRL Songwriter's Thread | Jacktrus gain dual #1
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Wow, where was this before? I've never seen it. I write songs since I was 16 and at 18 I started to write in English too (I'm chilean, so, I used to write only in Spanish). Now that I'm 21 I write only in English because it feels more comfortable.
Here's the last song I wrote, it's called "Green Eyes", if it had music, it would be a piano ballad.
Green Eyes
[Verse 1]
Long nights trying to catch your attention
Other nights seems like you're with me
I really enjoy when you teach me how to play
Hot spring, we will be together
Far away from home, so it's the moment
To tell you how important you are for me
[CHORUS]
I love you with your beautiful green eyes
I know your rosy lips want to kiss me now
And I want to kiss them too, so
Say my name loud and I'll run to you
I love you with your beautiful green eyes
I'll be here for you if you want me too
In the nights, my bed has a place for you
So, say my name loud and I'll go to you
[VERSE 2]
Always so far way from me
I don't know what you really like
Can you give me chance to know more about you?
If you know me, I can be your friend
'Cause I really wanna be in your life
You're a living poem, a created masterpiece
[CHORUS]
I love you with your beautiful green eyes
I know your rosy lips want to kiss me now
And I want to kiss them too, so
Say my name loud and I'll run to you
I love you with your beautiful green eyes
I'll be here for you if you want me too
In the nights, my bed has a place for you
So, say my name loud and I'll go to you
A living poem, created masterpiece
I'll be your poet if you're my Joseph
A living poem,such a good masterpiece
I'll be your sad singer if you're my happy Joseph
[CHORUS]
I love you with your beautiful green eyes
I know your rosy lips want to kiss me now
And I want to kiss them too, so
Say my name loud and I'll run to you
I love you with your beautiful green eyes
I'll be here for you if you want me too
In the nights, my bed has a place for you
I promise you that I will never go
Without you, without you
Say my name loud and I'll run to you
Without you, without you
Say my name loud and I'll run to you
Without you, without you
Say my name loud and I'll run to you
Without you, without you
Say my name loud and I'll go to you
Run to you
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Quote:
Originally posted by EpicSongFan
I have quite a few songs written tbh. Most of it were written from Mariah Carey's perspective although most of them are quite personal  I think Nightfall's lyrics are my personal best tbh
Fragile
You stole my heart with just one gaze
Now I am stuck in this huge maze
Never thought it would come to this
Now you are the one that I miss
I stood there alone as I cried
All you did was apologized
Who knew you would tear me apart
Now I'm left with an aching heart
[Chorus]
Baby I'm so fragile
Baby I'm volatile
Won't you stay with me?
And comfort me?
[Verse 2]
You knew I'm like a china vase
Just something you could replace
You had it all but did not know
And you just had to let me go
If I could recapture
I would go back to that chapter
The times when we first fall in love
A love sent from heaven above
[Chorus]
Baby I'm so fragile
Baby I'm volatile
Won't you stay with me?
And comfort me?
[Bridge]
Why our love is nothing but a distant memory?
Why did you have to abandon me and just leave it be?
Why can't you just stop for a while and see?
Why do you need to focus on others when you have me?
[Chorus]
Baby I'm so fragile
Baby I'm volatile
Won't you stay with me?
And comfort me?
Nightfall
Who knew you would leave me in despair
Let the darkness overcome me
Have me trapped by your snare
And let me struggle to break free
[Prechorus]
Now you've created a monster inside of me
Now it's struggling to break free
And it's time for my revenge
Finally time for revenge
Cause...
[Chorus]
You've destroyed my heart
Now I'll destroy yours
Tear your soul apart
And leave you in remorse
Within the nightfall
Nightfall
Now I'm on a mission
Releasing my inhibition
Don't care if it's a transgression
Now I'm loading my ammunition
It's time to extirpate
My turn to annihilate
This pain won't dissipate
Until you're left alone
Within the nightfall
Nightfall
[Verse 2]
You've already committed a sin
When you left me in the ruins
I'll be searching for your tracks
Cause' it's time for me to payback
[Prechorus]
You created a monster inside of me
Now it's struggling to break free
And it's time for my revenge
Finally time for revenge
Cause...
[Chorus]
You've destroyed my heart
Now I'll destroy yours
Tear your soul apart
And leave you in remorse
Within the nightfall
Nightfall
Now I'm on a mission
Releasing my inhibition
Don't care if it's a transgression
Now I'm loading my ammunition
It's time to extirpate
My turn to annihilate
This pain won't dissipate
Until you're left alone
Within the nightfall
Nightfall
[Bridge]
You might as well admit your defeat
I've grown stronger, harder to beat
I'm not that naive girl like before
Not someone you can throw and ignore
(Instrumental)
[Chorus]
You've destroyed my heart
Now I'll destroy yours
Tear your soul apart
And leave you in remorse
So now I'm on a mission
Releasing my inhibition
Don't care if it's a transgression
Now I'm loading my ammunition
It's time to extirpate
My turn to annihilate
This pain won't dissipate
Until you're left alone (You'll regret it all)
Within the nightfall (The things you've done)
Nightfall
Within the nightfall (Nightfall)
Nightfall
Nightfall
Denial
From the outside, you seem urbane
Acting all sweet and naive
But in reality, you're insane
Someone no one would perceive
We used to be savage lovers
We were wild and uncontrollable
Thought we could stay like this forever
But now you're just unapproachable
[Pre-chorus]
Can you hear it echoing?
Can you hear it screaming?
The conflict that I'm feeling
Deep down inside of me
[Chorus]
Baby I'm in denial
Why does this feel like a trial
When we used to love each other
Thought that we would be together
Forever (Forever, Forever, Forever.....)
Now I'm picking up the pieces
That you've left behind
Now I'm lost without a cause
Feels like I'm losing my mind
[Hook]
I am in denial right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I feel conflicted right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I am in denial right now
[Verse 2]
I'm tired by your endless talk
But now I'm feeling very lost
From the very pain you've caused
You very well know that...
[Chorus]
Baby I'm in denial
Why does this feel like a trial
When we used to love each other
Thought that we would be together
Forever (Forever, Forever, Forever.....)
Now I'm picking up the pieces
That you've left behind
Now I'm lost without a cause
Feels like I'm losing my mind
[Hook]
I am in denial right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I feel conflicted right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I am in denial right now
[Bridge]
My mind feels addled right now
What path should I choose right here
The thoughts are dragging me down
And I can't see clear anymore
Cause....
[Chorus]
Baby I'm in denial
Why does this feel like a trial
When we used to love each other
Thought that we would be together
Forever (Forever, Forever, Forever.....)
Now I'm picking up the pieces
That you've left behind
Now I'm lost without a cause
Feels like I'm losing my mind
[Hook]
I am in denial right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I feel conflicted right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I am in denial right now
I am in denial right now (Help me now)
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I feel conflicted right now (I'm so conflicted)
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I am in denial right now
Reverberate & The Recovery
Reverberate (The Outro) Lyrics:
[Verse 1]
Am I gonna be forever alone?
All by myself on this forsaken road
Will I continue to be in misery?
Or will I be able to break free?
From all the despair that is binding me
Ohh, Ohh
Ohh, Ohh
(Instrumental plays)
Ohh, Ohh
Ohh, Ohh
Let it reverberate
(Instrumental plays till fades out & transitions into the hidden track)
The Recovery Lyrics:
[Spoken Verse]
I let it reverberate
I left it all to fate
But you guided me
And led me out and be free
[Verse 1]
These endless rain
Falling within my heart
These hidden pain
Embedded within me
What have I gain?
Other than sadness and grief?
[Pre-chorus]
That's when I fell to my knees
Tears fall down as I prayed
Asking why did this happened to me
That's when I heard a voice
Saying to me
That he'll be by my side
Comforting me deep inside
Mend the pieces that were torn apart
And heal my broken heart
That he'll be right there
[Chorus]
That's when I realize
I can't stay like this forever
That's when I recover
That's when I recover
And finally arise
And become someone new
(Piano Instrumental)
[Verse 2]
Lost a part of me
But I'm still standing strong
Finally I'm free
From the pain I've had all along
I have found the key
That have led me to recovery
[Pre-chorus]
Cause I fell down to my knees
Tears fall down as I prayed
Asking why did this happened to me
That's when I heard a voice
Saying to me
That he'll be by my side
Comforting me deep inside
Mend the pieces that were torn apart
And heal my broken heart
That he'll be right there
[Chorus]
That's when I realize
I can't stay like this forever
That's when I recover
That's when I recover
And finally arise
And become someone new
That's when I realize
I can't stay like this forever
That's when I recover
That's when I recover
And finally arise
And become someone new
[Bridge]
You gave me the strength when I was weak
Gave me the comfort that I seeked
That's when I finally recover!
Leaving this pain behind forever!
That's when I finally recover!
Leaving this pain behind forever!
Once again, I fell to my knees
Tears dried up as I prayed
Asking why did this happened to me
That's when I heard someone
Saying to me....
(That I'll be brand new!)
[Chorus]
That's when I realize
I can't stay like this forever
That's when I recover
That's when I recover
And finally arise
And become someone new
That's when I realize
I can't stay like this forever
That's when I recover
That's when I recover
And finally arise
And become someone new
[Outro]
I've escaped tonight
I've finally recovered
I've seen the light
Finally free like a bird
(Piano Instrumental)
[Acapella]
(That's when I recover)
(That's when I recover)
(That's when I recover)
(That's when I recover)
(That's when I recover)
Thank you Lord!
For more info, check out here -> http://createalabel.comyr.com/index....carey-atavism/
Some of the songs are not written by me btw. Whisper, Take A Look, Shangri-La and Run Away were not written by me.
And also, an additional song that I've wrote recently as well.
Hope
[Verse 1]
Baby you're just unfair
Having fun on your own
While I was dumped somewhere
Ohh, I should have known
[Pre-chorus]
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh
I was played around
And I didn't even notice
I was dragged around
Can't believe I used to love it
[Chorus]
I was given a ray of hope
But I was robbed away from it
I do not know how to cope
From all the emptiness I feel
Within
x2
(Instrumental)
[Verse 2]
My heart's just left with dust
My feeling's turned to stone
Don't know anyone I could trust
I'd be better off being alone
[Pre-chorus]
Oooh, Oooh, Oooh
I was played around
And I didn't even notice
I was dragged around
Can't believe I used to love it
[Chorus]
I was given a ray of hope
But I was robbed away from it
I do not know how to cope
From all the emptiness I feel
Within
x2
(Instrumental)
[Bridge]
Took me so long to realize
That I was cheated upon
Can you hear the outcries
Of my aching heart
(Hope)
x8
[Chorus]
I was given a ray of hope
But I was robbed away from it
I do not know how to cope
From all the emptiness I feel
Within
x2
(Instrumental)
[Outro]
Now I'm finally moving on
I'm saying my goodbyes to you
Baby I'll be finally gone
Leaving this barren avenue
I'm creating a new hope in me
I'm leaving and I'm finally free
I'm changing my own course
So that I won't get lost
I finally have hope...
(repeat to fade)
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Hi, I've wrote over 20 songs and basically I write over songs I like, following their melody and structure but the lyrical content/ theme is my own.
For example, I wrote over Halsey's Colors song here. It's about my friends BF who I can't stand.
Hurt You More Than You Think
(Verse 1)
He says he loves you down the phone, but he’s always drunk
He says he never hits the bottle when he’s all alone
You say you miss him, when he’s out there kissing other girls
When the only reason he’s missing you is getting blown
(Pre Chorus)
You’re heading for disaster but you can’t steer right
He’ll stand there and he’ll watch you slowly drown
In your own tears, until the light of day
Draw the crimson from your blood, he’ll cut you deep
(Chorus)
Loving him will hurt, you more, than you’ll think
And you’ll be sorry that you ever let him into your dreams
And it’s true
And it’s true
Loving him will hurt, you more, than you’ll think
And you’ll be so broken down, you don’t know what to believe
And he’ll hurt, you
And he’ll hurt, you
(Verse 2)
He was your colour when his black heart, it haunted you
He saw your weakness when he’d knocked you down, oh so low
He said, “I love you more, than I think you’ll ever know”
And now your hours spent crying, ‘cause he’s not with you
(Pre Chorus)
(Chorus)
(Bridge)
Her soul was too deep to explore by those who always swam in the shallow end
And I’m sorry that I cannot love you like a ghost
But I’ll catch you, when you fall.
(Chorus)
I struggle writing about bad relationships/ break ups since I've only ever been with the same guy for almost 4 years now, so I kinda either make characters up or put myself in different situations. For example, here I thought about how I'd feel if he was dating another guy. Like if I couldn't have him, I wouldn't want anyone else too. This would be a ballad
I Hope You Go
(Verse 1)
Heart, harder than stone
Yet, warmer than mine
You hurt me, now this is my turn
To make you beg, plead and plead
Out of key, with my upper hand
You left me for dead
(Pre Chorus)
Went to you with an open heart
Let me go with a thousand scars
Left you in your promised land
This must be the calm before the storm
(Chorus)
Oh, I hope you gooo
To the same fate as I-I-I
Oh, I hope it falls
With the same grace, twice
With the cry-i-ing
And the be-gging too
And the cha-sing
Oh, I hope you gooo
Oh, I hope you gooo
To the same fate
With the same grace
Oh, I hope you gooo
(Verse 2)
The lies that roll off your tongue
They can’t see it
You’re a player at your heart
You know what I mean
So if time really moves on,
Then why can’t I be free?
Stuck on the same track, open road
With, no room to breathe
(Pre Chorus)
(Chorus)
(Bridge)
Maybe I should watch them
Fall into your bad schemes
Maybe I should help them
Reach in and pull them
Or waaaa-atch them, falllll-alll
As their heart hits the ground
And shatters their earth
As their heart hits the ground
And shatters their earth
Maybe I should watch them
Fall into a bad dream
Wake up, cold in the night
Saying, “You’ve leeeeft me”
“You’ve leeeeft me.”
“Left me to… bleed…”
(Chorus)
Oh, I hope you gooo
To the same fate as I-I-I
Oh, I hope it falls
With the same grace, twice
With the cry-i-ing
And the be-gging too
And the cha-sing
Oh, I hope you gooo
Oh, I hope you gooo
To the same fate
With the same grace
Oh, I hope you goooooooooo
And I hope you knowww
How much it hurt
Oh, I hope you gooooo
Here's a party song I wrote, it's one of the first songs I wrote and one of my favourites, if a little cheesy at times I guess. I wrote it over Kesha's Pretty Lady song, although I changed the bridge melody to suit. It's basically about growing up and when you reach that final summer before you graduate university and everyone has to go into the "real world"
Last Summer
(Verse 1)
O-one-hundred hours
Let’s get wrecked and trashed together
Oh-my-****-ing g-od
Things are gettin’ a little h-o-ot
Let’s go, slumber party
Crash next doors, summer party
Take one, pass it o-o-on
In no time you’ll be moving on
(Pre Chorus)
Weeee lost our ffff-aithhhh
(It ran away!)
Innnn-o-cence dd-iedddd
(With our lies!)
(Chorus)
Anthems, turned up
Cash flow’s, dried up
‘Cause it’s our last ****ing summer!
We move on, we get lost
Sunset, pants down
‘Cause it’s our last ****ing summer!
(Verse 2)
Oh-my-****-ing g-od
This is our, last sum-mer
Of our freedom a-a-a-age
We’ll make our way-ay
In no time we’re gone
Dead and bur-i-i-ied,
Life moves on
So what’s up ne-ext!?
(Pre Chorus)
(Chorus)
(Bridge)
Now what? I kn-ow-ow-owww
I think you’re about to bl-ow-ow-owww…
Chunks, in the poo-oo-ool
And the mini bar, too-oo-oo
Cham-pagne all arou-r-r-round
Just muck around, yeahhhh!
(Chorus)
Hope you enjoy them, please give me some feedback, advice etc. 
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I also have a Song written called "Deadly Nightshade" that I wrote that would feature Kesha and Avril Lavigne. My Till The World Ends Remix is upon us
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Quote:
Originally posted by EpicSongFan
I have quite a few songs written tbh. Most of it were written from Mariah Carey's perspective although most of them are quite personal  I think Nightfall's lyrics are my personal best tbh
Fragile
You stole my heart with just one gaze
Now I am stuck in this huge maze
Never thought it would come to this
Now you are the one that I miss
I stood there alone as I cried
All you did was apologized
Who knew you would tear me apart
Now I'm left with an aching heart
[Chorus]
Baby I'm so fragile
Baby I'm volatile
Won't you stay with me?
And comfort me?
[Verse 2]
You knew I'm like a china vase
Just something you could replace
You had it all but did not know
And you just had to let me go
If I could recapture
I would go back to that chapter
The times when we first fall in love
A love sent from heaven above
[Chorus]
Baby I'm so fragile
Baby I'm volatile
Won't you stay with me?
And comfort me?
[Bridge]
Why our love is nothing but a distant memory?
Why did you have to abandon me and just leave it be?
Why can't you just stop for a while and see?
Why do you need to focus on others when you have me?
[Chorus]
Baby I'm so fragile
Baby I'm volatile
Won't you stay with me?
And comfort me?
Nightfall
Who knew you would leave me in despair
Let the darkness overcome me
Have me trapped by your snare
And let me struggle to break free
[Prechorus]
Now you've created a monster inside of me
Now it's struggling to break free
And it's time for my revenge
Finally time for revenge
Cause...
[Chorus]
You've destroyed my heart
Now I'll destroy yours
Tear your soul apart
And leave you in remorse
Within the nightfall
Nightfall
Now I'm on a mission
Releasing my inhibition
Don't care if it's a transgression
Now I'm loading my ammunition
It's time to extirpate
My turn to annihilate
This pain won't dissipate
Until you're left alone
Within the nightfall
Nightfall
[Verse 2]
You've already committed a sin
When you left me in the ruins
I'll be searching for your tracks
Cause' it's time for me to payback
[Prechorus]
You created a monster inside of me
Now it's struggling to break free
And it's time for my revenge
Finally time for revenge
Cause...
[Chorus]
You've destroyed my heart
Now I'll destroy yours
Tear your soul apart
And leave you in remorse
Within the nightfall
Nightfall
Now I'm on a mission
Releasing my inhibition
Don't care if it's a transgression
Now I'm loading my ammunition
It's time to extirpate
My turn to annihilate
This pain won't dissipate
Until you're left alone
Within the nightfall
Nightfall
[Bridge]
You might as well admit your defeat
I've grown stronger, harder to beat
I'm not that naive girl like before
Not someone you can throw and ignore
(Instrumental)
[Chorus]
You've destroyed my heart
Now I'll destroy yours
Tear your soul apart
And leave you in remorse
So now I'm on a mission
Releasing my inhibition
Don't care if it's a transgression
Now I'm loading my ammunition
It's time to extirpate
My turn to annihilate
This pain won't dissipate
Until you're left alone (You'll regret it all)
Within the nightfall (The things you've done)
Nightfall
Within the nightfall (Nightfall)
Nightfall
Nightfall
Denial
From the outside, you seem urbane
Acting all sweet and naive
But in reality, you're insane
Someone no one would perceive
We used to be savage lovers
We were wild and uncontrollable
Thought we could stay like this forever
But now you're just unapproachable
[Pre-chorus]
Can you hear it echoing?
Can you hear it screaming?
The conflict that I'm feeling
Deep down inside of me
[Chorus]
Baby I'm in denial
Why does this feel like a trial
When we used to love each other
Thought that we would be together
Forever (Forever, Forever, Forever.....)
Now I'm picking up the pieces
That you've left behind
Now I'm lost without a cause
Feels like I'm losing my mind
[Hook]
I am in denial right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I feel conflicted right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I am in denial right now
[Verse 2]
I'm tired by your endless talk
But now I'm feeling very lost
From the very pain you've caused
You very well know that...
[Chorus]
Baby I'm in denial
Why does this feel like a trial
When we used to love each other
Thought that we would be together
Forever (Forever, Forever, Forever.....)
Now I'm picking up the pieces
That you've left behind
Now I'm lost without a cause
Feels like I'm losing my mind
[Hook]
I am in denial right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I feel conflicted right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I am in denial right now
[Bridge]
My mind feels addled right now
What path should I choose right here
The thoughts are dragging me down
And I can't see clear anymore
Cause....
[Chorus]
Baby I'm in denial
Why does this feel like a trial
When we used to love each other
Thought that we would be together
Forever (Forever, Forever, Forever.....)
Now I'm picking up the pieces
That you've left behind
Now I'm lost without a cause
Feels like I'm losing my mind
[Hook]
I am in denial right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I feel conflicted right now
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I am in denial right now
I am in denial right now (Help me now)
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I feel conflicted right now (I'm so conflicted)
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh (Denial)
I am in denial right now
Reverberate & The Recovery
Reverberate (The Outro) Lyrics:
[Verse 1]
Am I gonna be forever alone?
All by myself on this forsaken road
Will I continue to be in misery?
Or will I be able to break free?
From all the despair that is binding me
Ohh, Ohh
Ohh, Ohh
(Instrumental plays)
Ohh, Ohh
Ohh, Ohh
Let it reverberate
(Instrumental plays till fades out & transitions into the hidden track)
The Recovery Lyrics:
[Spoken Verse]
I let it reverberate
I left it all to fate
But you guided me
And led me out and be free
[Verse 1]
These endless rain
Falling within my heart
These hidden pain
Embedded within me
What have I gain?
Other than sadness and grief?
[Pre-chorus]
That's when I fell to my knees
Tears fall down as I prayed
Asking why did this happened to me
That's when I heard a voice
Saying to me
That he'll be by my side
Comforting me deep inside
Mend the pieces that were torn apart
And heal my broken heart
That he'll be right there
[Chorus]
That's when I realize
I can't stay like this forever
That's when I recover
That's when I recover
And finally arise
And become someone new
(Piano Instrumental)
[Verse 2]
Lost a part of me
But I'm still standing strong
Finally I'm free
From the pain I've had all along
I have found the key
That have led me to recovery
[Pre-chorus]
Cause I fell down to my knees
Tears fall down as I prayed
Asking why did this happened to me
That's when I heard a voice
Saying to me
That he'll be by my side
Comforting me deep inside
Mend the pieces that were torn apart
And heal my broken heart
That he'll be right there
[Chorus]
That's when I realize
I can't stay like this forever
That's when I recover
That's when I recover
And finally arise
And become someone new
That's when I realize
I can't stay like this forever
That's when I recover
That's when I recover
And finally arise
And become someone new
[Bridge]
You gave me the strength when I was weak
Gave me the comfort that I seeked
That's when I finally recover!
Leaving this pain behind forever!
That's when I finally recover!
Leaving this pain behind forever!
Once again, I fell to my knees
Tears dried up as I prayed
Asking why did this happened to me
That's when I heard someone
Saying to me....
(That I'll be brand new!)
[Chorus]
That's when I realize
I can't stay like this forever
That's when I recover
That's when I recover
And finally arise
And become someone new
That's when I realize
I can't stay like this forever
That's when I recover
That's when I recover
And finally arise
And become someone new
[Outro]
I've escaped tonight
I've finally recovered
I've seen the light
Finally free like a bird
(Piano Instrumental)
[Acapella]
(That's when I recover)
(That's when I recover)
(That's when I recover)
(That's when I recover)
(That's when I recover)
Thank you Lord!
For more info, check out here -> http://createalabel.comyr.com/index....carey-atavism/
Some of the songs are not written by me btw. Whisper, Take A Look, Shangri-La and Run Away were not written by me.
And also, an additional song that I've wrote recently as well.
Hope
[Verse 1]
Baby you're just unfair
Having fun on your own
While I was dumped somewhere
Ohh, I should have known
[Pre-chorus]
Ohh, Ohh, Ohh
I was played around
And I didn't even notice
I was dragged around
Can't believe I used to love it
[Chorus]
I was given a ray of hope
But I was robbed away from it
I do not know how to cope
From all the emptiness I feel
Within
x2
(Instrumental)
[Verse 2]
My heart's just left with dust
My feeling's turned to stone
Don't know anyone I could trust
I'd be better off being alone
[Pre-chorus]
Oooh, Oooh, Oooh
I was played around
And I didn't even notice
I was dragged around
Can't believe I used to love it
[Chorus]
I was given a ray of hope
But I was robbed away from it
I do not know how to cope
From all the emptiness I feel
Within
x2
(Instrumental)
[Bridge]
Took me so long to realize
That I was cheated upon
Can you hear the outcries
Of my aching heart
(Hope)
x8
[Chorus]
I was given a ray of hope
But I was robbed away from it
I do not know how to cope
From all the emptiness I feel
Within
x2
(Instrumental)
[Outro]
Now I'm finally moving on
I'm saying my goodbyes to you
Baby I'll be finally gone
Leaving this barren avenue
I'm creating a new hope in me
I'm leaving and I'm finally free
I'm changing my own course
So that I won't get lost
I finally have hope...
(repeat to fade)
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I love nightfall! Nice job
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Wow this thread has stayed a bit active. Let me read through all of these.
Some of you are really talented! Make sure to sign up for Platinum Hit 8 when it returns next month!
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Do y'all start with a title and write the song based on that or do you find the title comes last?
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Do y'all start with a title and write the song based on that or do you find the title comes last?
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I just choose a line that stands out from the lyrics and that's the title. Sometimes I do come up with the name first though
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Wow this thread has stayed a bit active. Let me read through all of these.
Some of you are really talented! Make sure to sign up for Platinum Hit 8 when it returns next month!
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It's coming next month?? Dafuq 
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Ok I'm not the best at writing lyrics so if anyone wanted to look over this one I'd appreciate it
Lonely Here Alone
The story starts the same
We know it all to well
The story of when love
Turns into hell
The sound of your words
Bruise my heart
I should have seen the end
From the start
Oh where did you go
It's so lonely here alone
Oh where did you go
It's so lonely here alone
As the words fade away
Erasing what we had
I'm left here with nothing
But cuts on my hand
As the night turns to day
And the day turns to night
You left me here alone
Walked out of my life
Oh where did you go
It's so lonely here alone
Oh where did you go
It's so lonely here alone
I should have seen the end
From the start
I should have ran away
Before you broke my heart
And now I'm left alone
Wondering what to do
Cause a little piece of me
Is now always with you
The music for it is very simple piano if that helps
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Wow look at y'all talking and ****. As Sam said, PH will be starting soon! From what I saw, we're in for a really exciting season! 
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How many will be able to enter?
Also, someone rate my songs please 
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I recently just got inspired by Winnie the Pooh. I'm using specific quotes as starting points. 
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Yep. It's a songwriting tournament... well, more accurately, it's a lyric writing tournament. There's a panel of judges, usually between 3-5, and each week there is a new theme or challenge which is designed to test different aspects of your songwriting abilities. The last season actually went on to become the most successful tournament game in ATRL history. Each round a certain amount of contestants are eliminated until there's only one left.
I'm hosting the next season so hopefully there'll be some new writers, as well as those who have played in previous seasons!
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is this truth 
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How many will be able to enter?
Also, someone rate my songs please 
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there is usually no limit
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Can't wait for S8!
Here's a little something-something I came up with:
Tell me softly how much you love me
We're swaying in the light, summer breeze
(You are all I need)
*You said: "sorry, baby don't worry"
I'm left stranded in our memories
(Don't do this to me)
I'll probably edit this line and include more of a story 
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Do y'all start with a title and write the song based on that or do you find the title comes last?
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I usually start with a title and the concept flows from there.
It's hard for me not to write like that 
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The modified tracklist.
Strange Frequencies
1. Out of the Light
2. Prayers and Proclamation
3. Parasomnia
4. Dreamcatcher
5. Landmine
6 Strange Frequencies (interlude)
7. The Flood
8. Empty Planet
9. Anchor
10.Testament
11. Saints and Sacrifice
12. Revelations
I've been screwing around on FL studio and I've discovered my sound and that has refined the concept. The album is devided into five parts: The beginning (Out of the Light and Prayers and Proclamation), The dream (Parasomnia, Dreamcatcher, Landmine), the catalyst (Strange Frequencies), the flood (The Flood, Empty Planet, Anchor) and the testament (Testament, Saints and Sacrifice, Revelations). Each of them in a group don't necessarily sound sonically alike but each song in a group shares a theme or motif. It's also meant to mimic the bible. Do you get that from the tracklist?
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is this truth 
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Yes.
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Recently wrote this, titles and opinions welcome
hi
[VERSE 1]
He calls me a heartthrob
He says I don't let em stop for breath
Yeah, he says it's so wrong
The way I move my hips and toss my head
Picks me up real late
Takes me out and we escape
From the parties straight to the streets
And we'd drive all night, in the summer heat
And I know
I'm a goner, yeah I'm sold
For you baby, and how you sound
From the second you swept me off the ground
[CHORUS]
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With that sweet voice, endless
Leaving me so breathless
I can't handle
Your mental or your physical
It's all too much
I'm bursting at your touch
Yeah, it's all too much
But I can't let go of the clutch
[VERSE 2]
Stolen t-shirts and mad lights
He whispers to me in a smoky haze
All the parties and late nights
I could stay in this world for days
Takes me out of my mind, I
Can’t look away from those green eyes
Staring at the stars, on the boulevard
Drinking whiskey straight, in his 60’s car
And I know
I’m a goner, yeah I’m sold
Fairytales and their lovely plights
Pale compared to these summer nights
[CHORUS]
[Bridge]
*instrumental*
[CHORUS]
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Yes.
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