Discussion: ATRL Songwriter's Thread | Jacktrus gain dual #1 - Page 96

Jackson

JustLuke, I agree that would make a great bridge or even first verse

Lukey

Thank you, I think I'll keep that as a bridge then.

Jackson

In honor of my 18th birthday here's a song I wrote for Platinum Hit about bad birthdays

I'll post another song I wrote in like February about my time as a 17 year old later today with audio

[VERSE 1]
Party like I’m 18
Drink away the years through the bottom of a bottle
Running from fear, pass out into tomorrow

Fighting my own lightning
Trying to find love dancing on a strip pole
Blowing my cash on a blow job in a strip mall

Now I fall down

[CHORUS]
Before my time’s finally up
I guess I should learn to grow up
One more candle lit to try and fill the void
So I fill up a drink
Smoke it off and go to sleep
One more birthday inadvertently destroyed

[VERSE 2]
Fallen, almost forgotten
Stumbling down to the depths of the devil
Living it up, never meant to be careful

Now I fall down

[CHORUS]
Before my time’s finally up
I guess I should learn to grow up
One more candle lit to try and fill the void
So I fill up a drink
Smoke it off and go to sleep
One more birthday inadvertently destroyed

And hold on to these black balloons
Can’t fly alone without these black balloons

[BRIDGE]
Down another cup
Watch the years pile up
Waving my life goodbye
Watch my youth die
Better accept this life
As I watch the cement dry
Put up a good fight
Party all night

I know what I want
But don’t want what I know
Now my past can haunt
The future I had long ago

[CHORUS]
Before my time’s finally up
I guess I should learn to grow up
One more candle lit to try and fill the void
So I fill up a drink
Smoke it off and go to sleep
One more birthday inadvertently destroyed

And hold on to these black balloons
Can’t fly alone without these black balloons

6 Apple St

I need to write a song for an assignment but idk how

Jackson

Quote:

Originally posted by Wonderlust

I need to write a song for an assignment but idk how

I'll write it for you

gagacasanova

I've been in songwriting slumps. My recent one was written about a month and a half ago titled Anger & Violence. I'm currently in the midst of writing a new one and hopefully because of this slump it won't take me eons to finish it as I just figured out its intro and end of chorus

gagacasanova

So I've gone through the papers and calculated how many songs I've written. And in 2011, I've written 7 songs. 2012 - 15 songs. 2013 - 1 song (

). 2014 - 12 (with one I started on the 1st of August and finished today). I calculated and I have written 35 songs exactly.

Nait Phoenix

The current season of Platinum Hit has officially come to a close. You can still comment on the thread for four weeks from now before it is closed. For those who don't know what Platinum Hit is, Platinum Hit was a one-season television show on Bravo hosted by Jewel that obviously didn't make the ground it needed to. But, here, on ATRL, it continues the short legacy as a songwriting competition where the best songwriters on this site battle against one another to become the next Platinum Hit Songwriter of ATRL!

Well, this season I was asked to host. It was so much fun, but I don't plan to be on ATRL for long so it would be impossible for me to host again… So, I plan on passing the torch, but I want to pass it to someone worthy of holding it. So, I had this idea: this honor is not only fun, it's work. In fact, it's just like a job, so what's a job without an interview? Below, there's going to be a host/judging application that will demonstrate whether you'd be a good candidate to be the next host of Platinum Hit. I don't want to give this job to anyone, but I do want to give it to someone fair, but strict, punctual, but lenient, and all-around a lover of songwriting. So where better to find my next host than here in the songwriting thread? I won't choose until about a month from now, but it's never too soon to get your application in!

I really hope to receive some dynamite entries. I want this game to continue and inspire the way it did this season. Do the songwriters on here proud!

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APPLICATION FOR HOST

1. Name (how you'd like to be referred to as) and how long you've been songwriting.

2. Why do you feel you would be a great host for this game?

3. Does life get in the way of you performing any duties on ATRL often?

4. Can you handle pressure well enough to continue the game?

5. Can you manage your time efficiently?

6. Can you communicate with your fellow judges effectively?

7. One sample of your songwriting (verse, chorus, hook, etc.)

8. Below is a song I wrote. Critique it the best you can. Don't hold back.

Losing Game

9. If you were chosen, who would be your co-judges and why?

10. Would you rather compete than host/judge?

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Just PM me your responses. I don't want this to go unnoticed. This is a good opportunity, hosting, competing, judging, watching, whatever, so don't let it go to waste, please…

Jackson

I literally asked about this in the PH thread 3 minutes ago, Nait

EDIT: Oh, you saw that

Karma Chameleon

Quote:

Originally posted by gagacasanova

I've been in songwriting slumps. My recent one was written about a month and a half ago titled Anger & Violence. I'm currently in the midst of writing a new one and hopefully because of this slump it won't take me eons to finish it as I just figured out its intro and end of chorus

I haven't written s song in a while either. Usually when I have a dry spell I then randomly smash out 2/3 songs in a day

gagacasanova

Quote:

Originally posted by Karma Chameleon

I haven't written s song in a while either. Usually when I have a dry spell I then randomly smash out 2/3 songs in a day

Mine usually last months, maybe even a year.

This was my first one since June, and before that, April. So the dry spells this year haven't been so bad, thank god.

Jackson

Quote:

Originally posted by Karma Chameleon

I haven't written s song in a while either. Usually when I have a dry spell I then randomly smash out 2/3 songs in a day

I had a bad one from Jnauary-March this year, and then suddenly I wrote 3 really good songs in 3 days. I haven't been writing as much lately but that's more because I've been super busy than anything else.

gagacasanova

K y'all, this is the song I just finished two days ago. It took me 2 days to finish. It was inspired by a show on the Weather Channel, called Tornado Alley. It was an episode about what would happen to DC in a tornado. It shown a part of the Thomas Jefferson statue inside the Jefferson Memorial being blown apart by the fictional tornado.

here we go

Quote:

"Live On"

Honorized, Memorialized
Captivating like fireworks at a 4th of July show
Wonderful like a cherry blossom in the spring

Keep me in the mornin' light
In your mind held so tight
I used to be for one, now I'm for all to see
Build me like a statue and I'll live on

I'll be glorified
Them holding all the smiles
Conserving all the lives
This one has lived

Hold on, the ride's goin' so fast
C'mon, we gotta make this last
This is the future, forget the past

I used to be for one, now I'm for all to see
Build me like an icon and I'll live on

I really believe this one is my best (although I really say that after each one I write), but I feel as though this one takes the cake.

Karma Chameleon

Quote:

Originally posted by GotSkill

I had a bad one from Jnauary-March this year, and then suddenly I wrote 3 really good songs in 3 days. I haven't been writing as much lately but that's more because I've been super busy than anything else.

Sometimes it's just impossible to get inspired. I always have ideas and stuff just when I'm having a dry spell I cannot make even the best idea I've ever had work

But I always record whatever I get and keep it for future reference or write it down because you can go back to it.

One song I'm recording for my EP I started writing 2 years ago and only finished 3 months ago or something.

Karma Chameleon

Just wrote this 3/4 of a song in 10 minutes (ironic since I was complaining about a dry spell earlier haha). It's based on a real person/family I know so it's quite personal and I'd really love to hear your thoughts on it.

Quote:

NICOTINE

She doesn't think about the family she's living behind
The doctor said another cigarette could take her life
Yet she takes another puff of that nicotine
She won't see her youngest son turn 18

Not long now till her eldest son graduates
Just over 3 months but by then it might be too late
She takes another puff of that nicotine
She has given up on everything

CHORUS:
Lived her life addicted to the rush from smoking, smoking
One after another always knowing, knowing
That she was digging herself an early grave but nobody could save her
Cause at the end of the day her only way to cope was to light a smoke

Making the same mistakes as her own mother
She lost her young so she knows how much it hurts
Still she takes another puff of that nicotine
Just one more she says, that's all I need

It's all been said before, it's all just empty words
And just like her mother she's got a habit a patch can't cure
So she takes another puff of that nicotine
A burden for her family but for her a breathe of relief

CHORUS

My thoughts are to have a slow verse kind of thing to end the song because the bit I've got down in the quote is quite quick.
One of the lines I have in mind is "laying on her death she lights her final cigarette"

Jackson

Quote:

Originally posted by Karma Chameleon

Sometimes it's just impossible to get inspired. I always have ideas and stuff just when I'm having a dry spell I cannot make even the best idea I've ever had work

But I always record whatever I get and keep it for future reference or write it down because you can go back to it.

One song I'm recording for my EP I started writing 2 years ago and only finished 3 months ago or something.

I noticed as soon as I started dating my current bf in March is when I was suddenly inspired all the time. It was when I entered my 4th era of songwriting.
I divide my songwriting into eras named after the first song/defining song of that era.
When I started writing it was the Final Battle era
When I took a songwriting class and started writing on the piano more it started the Buried Alive era
Then the longest era, when I started writing songs on the guitar and for the first time took my lyrics deeper, is called the Good Day, America era
My latest era is when I fell in love for the first time and furthered my writing in Platinum Hit, the Forbidden Love era

I think about these things too much

Karma Chameleon

Quote:

Originally posted by GotSkill

I noticed as soon as I started dating my current bf in March is when I was suddenly inspired all the time. It was when I entered my 4th era of songwriting.
I divide my songwriting into eras named after the first song/defining song of that era.
When I started writing it was the Final Battle era
When I took a songwriting class and
started writing on the piano more it started the Buried Alive era
Then the longest era, when I started writing songs on the guitar and for the first time took my lyrics deeper, is called the Good Day, America era
My latest era is when I fell in love for the first time and furthered my writing in Platinum Hit, the Forbidden Love era

I think about these things too much

Do you write more often on guitar or piano? I've only ever written one song on the piano but as an artist sonically my music is quite folky/country so I guess it's natural I would lean towards more guitar based songwriting

Jackson

Quote:

Originally posted by Karma Chameleon

Do you write more often on guitar or piano? I've only ever written one song on the piano but as an artist sonically my music is quite folky/country so I guess it's natural I would lean towards more guitar based songwriting

Now I primarily write on guitar. Maybe 1/5 songs I write are on the piano and usually that's because I know more weird chords on the piano. Guitar suits my voice better I think and a lot of what I write is indie pop/rock/folk, so guitar suits that style better too.

Surfboardt

Am I the only one who creates a melody before writing lyrics to fit? All this is after deciding on my subject matter of course.

Jack!

Quote:

Originally posted by Surfboardt

Am I the only one who creates a melody before writing lyrics to fit? All this is after deciding on my subject matter of course.

I do. I normally sit at the piano and come up with my chords and my melody and fit it around that.