Prometheus. I'm sorry to say that this is the end of the road for you. This week was not a strong week for you, and it's really sad to see you go… But, with ★★★★★★ (6 stars) you will not be going platinum this season. But, never give up your journey!
I have this strange strange inkling that the moment I try to write an "actual" song it'll end up sounding too generic, and will ultimately be my downfall, but I hope that's not true at all.
I'll definitely make more of an effort to stray away from giving off too many "lyric-y" vibes as that seems to be my main point of criticism
Btw sometimes it's kinda hard to convey what I'm trying to get across. In terms of concept, flow, imagery etc. Having said that, I have no room to make such a statement since everybody has their own interpretation and of course it'll make sense to me since I'm the artist but oh well ahaha at least I've made it through this week. Barely.
I have this strange strange inkling that the moment I try to write an "actual" song it'll end up sounding too generic, and will ultimately be my downfall, but I hope that's not true at all.
I'll definitely make more of an effort to stray away from giving off too many "lyric-y" vibes as that seems to be my main point of criticism
Btw sometimes it's kinda hard to convey what I'm trying to get across. In terms of concept, flow, imagery etc. Having said that, I have no room to make such a statement since everybody has their own interpretation and of course it'll make sense to me since I'm the artist but oh well ahaha at least I've made it through this week. Barely.
Yeah, songwriting is definitely NOT as easy as the ATRLers think…
Yeah, songwriting is definitely NOT as easy as the ATRLers think…
Exactly.
You want it to be deep, catchy yet not meaningless, attention-grabbing yet not too in-your-face, a nice climax, simple but not too simple, detailed but not too detailed etc etc ALL at the same damn time. It's simply a mess.
I feel as though I just need to find a nice balance and that would be a starting point for much improvement.
You want it to be deep, catchy yet not meaningless, attention-grabbing yet not too in-your-face, a nice climax, simple but not too simple, detailed but not too detailed etc etc ALL at the same damn time. It's simply a mess.
I feel as though I just need to find a nice balance and that would be a starting point for much improvement.
Personally, I think you're doing well in the competition. Pretty average and you're not even a songwriter… that's pretty good!
Lemme post my entry whilst we wait for the next episode, if anybody's curious
The Ancient Stowaway
VERSE #1
Why am I still waiting here?
There’s no reason for me to live
Without you near
Then I realised (oh, how time flies)
There’s nothing I could change
Cause after a short while (like a butterfly)
Everything stayed the same
CHORUS
An ancient stowaway
Who will rarely ever leave my heart
Fooling myself that we’d never ever be apart
You didn’t choose this
Then what made you run in fear?
I still can’t believe it
Through these masked tears
Why am I still waiting here?
We’ve long gone run outta time
An ancient (stowaway) inside
Taken away from me
With swift flight
VERSE #2
Within this limbo
Caught between the middle of life and death
Like your last breath
One lingering limbo of past memories
An epiphany
That you’re never ever never never ever gonna reach your demise (and eventually die)
That's not happening
I'm in denial
Cause if I live and give the rest of my life
With you in mind
You may come back in due time
Keep keep keeping on and moving on
I may tear up and break down and cry
That doesn’t mean
I cannot say goodbye
CHORUS
An ancient stowaway
Who will rarely ever leave my heart
Fooling myself that we’d never ever be apart
You didn’t choose this
Then what made you escape in fear?
I still can’t believe it
Through these masked tears
Why am I still waiting here?
We’ve long gone run outta time
An ancient (stowaway) inside
Taken away from me
With swift flight
MIDDLE SECTION
The ancient-
Found it hard to believe
That you weren't beside me (anymore)
My ancient stowaway
Wasted time and a few regretted lies
It had not yet struck me until I lost you
Feigning a grave feeling that you left me while with 'the blues'
Please forgive me like I forgave you
When you cast me aside
Like I meant nothing that you knew
Another promise: 'I'll join you soon'
An ancient-
Like an ancient stow-
Just an ancient-
Salvation
This ancient stowaway, away, away, may fly away
Hyperventilating
Flying away
Ease the pain
Chest – beating with a burning sensation
Release the pain
Please pain go away
Just for today
Like the ancient stowaway
Why am I still waiting here?
CLOSING
An ancient stowaway
Who will rarely ever leave my heart
Fooling myself that we’d never ever be apart
You vowed a certain forsaken empty-promised start
‘I’ll come back once the ship has sailed beneath these longing parts’
Sailed, failed, bailed, paled amidst the stale candlelight wind of tales
Entailing and enduring
An eternity-filled life-long suffering
Capsized unto a nail-marked death bed
Of thorns and roses
An ancient stowaway
Who will rarely ever leave my heart
Fooling myself that we’d never ever be apart
You didn’t choose this
Then what made you chase yourself in fear?
I still can’t believe it
Through these masked tears
Why am I still waiting here?
We’ve long gone run outta time
An ancient (stowaway) inside
Taken away from me
With swift flight
Why am I still waiting here?
WHY AM I STILL WAITING HERE?!
Strangling inhibitions
Linking chained arms of self-harmed addiction
An addiction to lost and lustful answers
Yet I still wait here
For my own sake
Lemme post my entry whilst we wait for the next episode, if anybody's curious
The Ancient Stowaway
VERSE #1
Why am I still waiting here?
There’s no reason for me to live
Without you near
Then I realised (oh, how time flies)
There’s nothing I could change
Cause after a short while (like a butterfly)
Everything stayed the same
CHORUS
An ancient stowaway
Who will rarely ever leave my heart
Fooling myself that we’d never ever be apart
You didn’t choose this
Then what made you run in fear?
I still can’t believe it
Through these masked tears
Why am I still waiting here?
We’ve long gone run outta time
An ancient (stowaway) inside
Taken away from me
With swift flight
VERSE #2
Within this limbo
Caught between the middle of life and death
Like your last breath
One lingering limbo of past memories
An epiphany
That you’re never ever never never ever gonna reach your demise (and eventually die)
That's not happening
I'm in denial
Cause if I live and give the rest of my life
With you in mind
You may come back in due time
Keep keep keeping on and moving on
I may tear up and break down and cry
That doesn’t mean
I cannot say goodbye
CHORUS
An ancient stowaway
Who will rarely ever leave my heart
Fooling myself that we’d never ever be apart
You didn’t choose this
Then what made you escape in fear?
I still can’t believe it
Through these masked tears
Why am I still waiting here?
We’ve long gone run outta time
An ancient (stowaway) inside
Taken away from me
With swift flight
MIDDLE SECTION
The ancient-
Found it hard to believe
That you weren't beside me (anymore)
My ancient stowaway
Wasted time and a few regretted lies
It had not yet struck me until I lost you
Feigning a grave feeling that you left me while with 'the blues'
Please forgive me like I forgave you
When you cast me aside
Like I meant nothing that you knew
Another promise: 'I'll join you soon'
An ancient-
Like an ancient stow-
Just an ancient-
Salvation
This ancient stowaway, away, away, may fly away
Hyperventilating
Flying away
Ease the pain
Chest – beating with a burning sensation
Release the pain
Please pain go away
Just for today
Like the ancient stowaway
Why am I still waiting here?
CLOSING
An ancient stowaway
Who will rarely ever leave my heart
Fooling myself that we’d never ever be apart
You vowed a certain forsaken empty-promised start
‘I’ll come back once the ship has sailed beneath these longing parts’
Sailed, failed, bailed, paled amidst the stale candlelight wind of tales
Entailing and enduring
An eternity-filled life-long suffering
Capsized unto a nail-marked death bed
Of thorns and roses
An ancient stowaway
Who will rarely ever leave my heart
Fooling myself that we’d never ever be apart
You didn’t choose this
Then what made you chase yourself in fear?
I still can’t believe it
Through these masked tears
Why am I still waiting here?
We’ve long gone run outta time
An ancient (stowaway) inside
Taken away from me
With swift flight
Why am I still waiting here?
WHY AM I STILL WAITING HERE?!
Strangling inhibitions
Linking chained arms of self-harmed addiction
An addiction to lost and lustful answers
Yet I still wait here
For my own sake
I feel like I'd really struggle with songwriting if it didn't come naturally to me.
Wow Danny. I felt like you'd ride your way into the finals, so this is a shock. I feel like maybe you just lost a spark somewhere in the comp. Did something really big happen recently? Anyway, I am hoping you can find the balance again.
That's the EXACT atmosphere I had going for "The Ancient Stowaway.
Btw I absolutely love CYB
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Originally posted by Hug
I feel like I'd really struggle with songwriting if it didn't come naturally to me.
Wow Danny. I felt like you'd ride your way into the finals, so this is a shock. I feel like maybe you just lost a spark somewhere in the comp. Did something really big happen recently? Anyway, I am hoping you can find the balance again.
Yeah, I kinda write lyrics that I feel sound good together instead of just noting down thoughts which would be a better technique imo.
MTE. He was one of the clear frontrunners but you never know where your fate may ultimately lead you.
Welp, I think the judges should know this was finals week for me and then immediately after my last final I was whisked off to my grandparent's house so that's why my song was a bit tragic this week. I wrote it in ten minutes.
Being a songwriter also means taking risks with writing. One very big risk is including different languages in your song. Maybe it's because you're bilingual or trilingual, maybe it's because you want to appease to your heritage, or maybe it's because you feel the song needed that "edge" and sound universal. Either way, it's not terribly uncommon to add non-English phrases to a song, so here's your challenge.
You are given freedom to write whatever song you feel is appropriate for this challenge, but the kicker is that you MUST include and incorporate ONE non-English phrase. That means, I don't want random non-English phrases thrown into the fray; they have to make sense conceptually and literally. The song DOES NOT need to be named after your non-English phrases; it just needs to include them.
Our top writer this week and the winner of immunity is…
CONGRATULATIONS 
I felt like you'd ride your way into the finals, so this is a shock. 
