From what it looks like, the judges were okay with my song.
Hugamari though: the whole point of me making the prequel and dialogue and everything was for you to be able to know what my song was about - me being in rehab after trying to commit suicide.
Quote:
You're a twisted, demented, little soul, aren't you?
Sent my scores to Nait. Not a bad round, I liked a lot of the entries! Some people still need to up their game though. It's the same people getting high marks each week - you need to not be sitting averagely if you wanna do really well int he competition. Getting through each week =/= winning.
From what it looks like, the judges were okay with my song.
Hugamari though: the whole point of me making the prequel and dialogue and everything was for you to be able to know what my song was about - me being in rehab after trying to commit suicide.
Such a great compliment
You shouldn't have put it in collapse tags. I try not to click those unless I feel like it'd needed.
Without Jack's feedback I assume I fall somewhere in the middle?
And huga, sis, your feedback for almost everyone is "I don't know what to say" You don't have any thoughts on structure/rhyme scene/rhythm/word choice/the title or anything?
I did enjoy this round as a whole. I don't know if you selected the people with the paintings on purpose but mine was really perfect for me even though I had some writer's block to work through (which is why it took that hook to get me back on track I guess)
Yes, both of you have made it through. Wondering why? Anyone notice that FattMatt is missing? Two days ago, FattMatt asked for a day advance on his song. I'll repeat that: he asked for a day advance on his song two days ago. Haven't seen head or tail of him and no confirmation or messages… I'm not even sure if he's banned or not… Anways… without him, that leaves a nice eleven left in the standing. Hopefully, both of you will try harder next round…
Congrats Euphorae and feelslikeadream! (Funny how last time you beat me to first by 1/3 of a star and now I beat you by that exact same amount, Enrico.)
What can I do not to be "safe", this last song is basically all about the painting and tried stuff I haven't before yet it's still considered. Like I'm getting so sad and depressed knowing I'll never get a good compliment because it seems I can't do anything to make you happy. There's people songs I read and give advice to on what to fix and you're praising them and it seems like you're enjoying picking on me.
I feel like writing something sexual. So if that's not something I can do next challenge there might be some weird stuff in my lyrics. Random but I felt like I needed to say that
What can I do not to be "safe", this last song is basically all about the painting and tried stuff I haven't before yet it's still considered. Like I'm getting so sad and depressed knowing I'll never get a good compliment because it seems I can't do anything to make you happy. There's people songs I read and give advice to on what to fix and you're praising them and it seems like you're enjoying picking on me.
Okay…
1. We are NOT picking on you. If you get almost a whole paragraph from me, it's because I want you to try harder. I don't say what I say to be mean, I say it to show interest.
2. The safe comment only comes out when I feel the lyrics don't really stand out or they lack any kind of je ne sais quoi to them. You need to look at the lyrics you write and think, "can I make it more poetic?", "is there a different way to interpret that?", "if this was me (or if it is you), is this what I would say/how I would feel?", and it should just be/feel natural.
3. If you want to not be "safe" next round, then you have to not be afraid to make a mistake. If you write something that you question at first, but lean into it, you may actually get some really amazing ideas. I mean, songwriting is already a risk, you have to make it more of a risk for it to get noticed…
I really hope you understand. I really want you in this competition. I wouldn't have asked you to join if I thought otherwise…
1. We are NOT picking on you. If you get almost a whole paragraph from me, it's because I want you to try harder. I don't say what I say to be mean, I say it to show interest.
2. The safe comment only comes out when I feel the lyrics don't really stand out or they lack any kind of je ne sais quoi to them. You need to look at the lyrics you write and think, "can I make it more poetic?", "is there a different way to interpret that?", "if this was me (or if it is you), is this what I would say/how I would feel?", and it should just be/feel natural.
3. If you want to not be "safe" next round, then you have to not be afraid to make a mistake. If you write something that you question at first, but lean into it, you may actually get some really amazing ideas. I mean, songwriting is already a risk, you have to make it more of a risk for it to get noticed…
I really hope you understand. I really want you in this competition. I wouldn't have asked you to join if I thought otherwise…
Is it too much to get a compliment though, or hear what I'm doing right? Going through the whole competition without a single compliment makes it hard, especially seeing the others get compliments left right and center.
Is it too much to get a compliment though, or hear what I'm doing right? Going through the whole competition without a single compliment makes it hard, especially seeing the others get compliments left right and center.
Okay, here's your compliment:
Sugar, you are probably one of the strongest writers in this whole competition. You have potential to be better than everybody here. I've seen it ever since you shared your first song with me: you are incredibly brave and talented. And I wouldn't let what we say or what anyone else says get you down and make you forget how great of a writer, fighter, and person you really are.
Now, with all that said, you have to unlock that potential on your own. Just because you don't get the feedback you want doesn't mean we don't have faith in your abilities. If you feel you are as strong as I believe you are, then you know to use what we say against us and prove us wrong. Okay…?
Okay, this one is a toughie, but I believe in all of you. You know how Twitter only allows you to type 140 characters? Well, now you have to…
HAHA, J/K Actually, you have to make a song of your own design in 140 words or less… This is all about making every single word of yours count: getting rid of the nitty-gritty and just sticking with what needs to be said. Simple(-ish), right!?
There are some guidelines to help you out and keep you on-track:
I don't count "First Verse" or "Chorus" or "Bridge", that would be stupid.
Repeating words in your chorus? Guess what!? Every word, no matter how many times its said, gets counted.
If you do repeat certain verses, just put "repeat [insert corresponding verse here]" and none of the words have to be counted again. Yes, if it's there twice, I count it twice.
And finally, any stuttering lyrics, for example: "Rah Rah Ah-ah-ah-ah" or "Blow-oh-oh-oh-oh-oh", does not change the fact that it is six syllabic moments and will be counted as six words. If twitter counts periods, I count what each of those dashes are connecting. So try to use what's only necessary as much as possible.
Another finally, descriptions don't count as part of the word count. How unfair would it be if you used 100 of your words to describe your song and you only had forty to make it with…
the whole point of me making the prequel and dialogue and everything was for you to be able to know what my song was about - me being in rehab after trying to commit suicide. 
I try not to click those unless I feel like it'd needed. 
Our top writer this week and the winner of immunity is…
CONGRATULATIONS 
Wow, thanks so much, judges!
