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Discussion: was cinderella gay?
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i have always wanted to be a writer and was recently tasked, as part of a writing exercise, with putting a spin on a classic fairytale. i chose cinderella... here is the start to my story. let me know what you think! 
"cinder fella"
by julian velasquez
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preface
we’ve all heard the story of cinderella: girl’s father dies, she grows up slaving away for her wicked stepmother and terrible stepsisters, some singing mice and birds as well as a fairy god mother make her dreams come true, and when midnight strikes the illusion is broken... until the prince finds her by trying her glass slipper on the foot of every woman in the area. of course, the shoe only fits cinderella and they live happily ever after. right? wrong…
there has been a major oversight from the original story this “fairytale” is based on. in fact, cinderella wasn’t even named cinderella… she was named “cinder.” and “she” wasn’t even a she! she was a he! that is where this story begins.
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part one
cinder was just 9-years-old when his father went away to serve as a general in the war. up until that point they’d been very close. his father was a caring man. he always encouraged cinder to follow his dreams and not let what other people said deter him. three years later, when cinder was 12, the family received news that his father had been killed in action. cinder took this much harder than his stepmother, lillith, and his stepsisters, gretchen and lisa.
before his death, cinder’s father owned a lot of valuable land in their township. they were among the richest of families, but they kept mostly to themselves in order to avoid being taken advantage of or swindled out of their money. after the loss, lillith was the sole beneficiary of 80% of the family fortune. having only had her eyes on the money from the start, she considered sending cinder away to an orphanage. however, as part of her husband’s will she was required to make sure cinder was taken care of until the age of 18, when he would receive the remaining 20% of the money that had been set aside from his father’s fortune.
because the family had kept to themselves for so long, nobody really knew cinder had been the general’s son. they didn’t even know the general had any children apart from his stepdaughters, who had often been seen buying fabric from the local market. as far as the town was concerned, cinder did not exist.
now 16-years-old, cinder had a dark secret only he knew… he was gay. it had dawned on him at 14 when his stepmother received a visit from the king and his son, prince jacob. jacob was a year older than cinder and had short dark brown hair and green eyes. he wasn’t a particularly intellectual boy, but instead proved himself in the sport of rugby, which gave him an incredibly toned physique that stirred something up in cinder the first time he met him.
he was so embarrassed that he wasn’t able to respond when jacob greeted him, and upon the king’s questioning of who the boy was, lillith quickly brushed him aside and explained that he was an orphan she’d taken in to help maintain the household in exchange for room and board. still in awe of the situation, cinder didn’t respond in protest. he was no orphan, but he’d been serving the household since his father’s death.
as a result of all the physical labor, cinder was pretty muscular himself. something in jacob’s eyes the day they met awoke something in him, and he spent many a night dreaming of the king’s son. he didn’t dare tell anyone, however, as homosexuality was shunned by the predominantly puritan town.
with jacob now 17-years-old the kingdom was holding a ball in his honor, during which they’d hope to find him a suitable wife. cinder didn’t like the idea, of course… he secretly wanted to be with him instead. little did he know, prince jacob had a secret of his own…
[to be continued...]
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Originally posted by Konichiwa
Shouldn't this be a blog?
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i didn't intend for it to be a blog entry, necessarily. so no? 
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Ooh, I can't wait to read the rest of this.
I love when people reimagine fairytales to fit other genres and scenarios. 
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Omg it's so interesting! Any more!!????
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 seems good it needs to make it to logo
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Originally posted by Ømega
seems good it needs to make it to logo |
Sis, I'd definitely watch! 
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Originally posted by Midnight
Sis, I'd definitely watch! |
Hell i would to it would be so dramatic and cute 
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Love what you wrote so far. I really want to read more!
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If the movie shows the hot sex, I'd be the first to watch it in the movies, rated X and all
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This reminded me of King & King. 
Can't wait for the rest.
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I'm guessing this will continue after the wedding and into the bedroom. 
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Originally posted by RatedG²
If the movie shows the hot sex, I'd be the first to watch it in the movies, rated X and all |
Oh my god! The prince and cinder!!! Can't wait for the hot sex scene to show
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Originally posted by RatedG²
If the movie shows the hot sex, I'd be the first to watch it in the movies, rated X and all |
How will the sex scene fit in? after 12?
it wont be sex cuz the movie will end at the weeding
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I wish she was a ****. 
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Originally posted by Ømega
How will the sex scene fit in? after 12?
it wont be sex cuz the movie will end at the weeding |
Unless some stuff was altered and the ball was a masquerade instead. They could have sex with the masks on and it'd be that much more rewarding once the prince finds Cinder with the glass shoe.
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Originally posted by Midnight
Ooh, I can't wait to read the rest of this.
I love when people reimagine fairytales to fit other genres and scenarios. |
it was definitely a great idea for an exercise! i'll let you know when i write the next part!!!
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Originally posted by esteee12
Omg it's so interesting! Any more!!????
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i just wrote this part today! maybe i'll put out a new part every week until it's finished!
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Originally posted by Ømega
seems good it needs to make it to logo |
that would be awesome! haha.
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Originally posted by ghettojeans
Love what you wrote so far. I really want to read more!
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thanks! it started out as just a fun exercise, but there will be more!
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Originally posted by RatedG²
If the movie shows the hot sex, I'd be the first to watch it in the movies, rated X and all |
lmao! not sure it'd be allowed in regular theaters...
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Originally posted by D/X
This reminded me of King & King.
Can't wait for the rest. |
i'll be sure to let you know when the next part goes up!
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Originally posted by brIt-()nstar
I'm guessing this will continue after the wedding and into the bedroom. |
into the bedroom? perhaps... lol! but cinder needs to address his feelings for the prince first. and we don't even know what the prince's secret is... or that he only has one... he may have more than one... 
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Originally posted by esteee12
Oh my god! The prince and cinder!!! Can't wait for the hot sex scene to show
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lmao!
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Originally posted by Ømega
How will the sex scene fit in? after 12?
it wont be sex cuz the movie will end at the weeding |
guess we'll have to wait and see...
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Originally posted by Venus
I wish she was a ****. |
death @ the atrl censorship blocking whatever you wrote... 
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Originally posted by Midnight
Unless some stuff was altered and the ball was a masquerade instead. They could have sex with the masks on and it'd be that much more rewarding once the prince finds Cinder with the glass shoe. |
the masquerade part is an awesome idea! wrote that down! if i use it i'll credit you.
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Eh.
It's too brief. You give little detail into his background besides the already known story, as if to jump to the whole 'gay' theme quicker. And that part was as laughably cliche as they come.
Had this been a prologue, I guess it could have been acceptable, but as a chapter it falls flat, and by a lot.
Also, the lack of capitals it annoying. Is it your new [quirk] on ATRL?
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Originally posted by Immaculate_Lamb
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the story will definitely be continued.
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Originally posted by Erik
Eh.
It's too brief. You give little detail into his background besides the already known story, as if to jump to the whole 'gay' theme quicker. And that part was as laughably cliche as they come.
Had this been a prologue, I guess it could have been acceptable, but as a chapter it falls flat, and by a lot.
Also, the lack of capitals it annoying. Is it your new [quirk] on ATRL?
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i appreciate the feedback. this was a writing exercise, not a finished work, but i can develop it further if i put my mind to it. the whole point was to put a "twist" on a classic fairytale, regardless of whether it was cliché or not. also, don't be fooled by the label "chapter," that's just what i called it, though i have seen "chapters" in published/successful novels that were even shorter... it's all about the particular writer's preference. probably should have left that label out and made it a prologue.
update: i have re-labeled that section as "part one"
as for the details about cinder, what else would you like to know? i'm open to suggestions on which details you'd love to hear about.
and the lack of capitals? my new quirk on atrl? nope. lol. i've been typing in all lowercase for a long time now both in and outside of atrl. just ask my good sis e.e. cummings (or even author john green in the book "will grayson, will grayson"). i'm not the first and only writer to do that... sorry it annoys you though.
p.s. i haven't stopped using [brackets], lmao. i just don't put EVERYTHING in them. but if you're interested in my new "quirk," peep the sparkling mockingjay pin below...
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So in your version, Cinderella eats the rug after she's done cleaning it?
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