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Originally posted by RihsusChrist(ATG)
@Temporal
A black mass as in a "cancer"...oh trust me, a cancer can be rabid. 
How hard was it to get the nature/wolf, human/real world metaphors? You don't seem like a dim person. 
What were you expecting with song with that kind of subject matter? Flowers and rainbows? It isn't about some emo kid crying in his closet. The person we wrote about had his beautiful world completely destroyed by a heinous tragedy...and he wants revenge...the profanity is valid, imo. 
Anger sometimes isn't "pretty"...go listen to Ice-T's "Cop Killer". 
Im glad you were offended...it was meant to make you feel an emotion.  |
WHERE did I say that I didn't get the metaphor?
You and beating seem to have misunderstood what I was trying to say: I understood the overall metaphor, especially since you both spelled it out in the PM, but the metaphor with the "black mass" was a reach. THAT is what I was referring to. If I google "Black Mass', nothing cancerously related comes up. Knowing that this is what you were going for, referring to cancer showing up on an ultrasound as "rabid" still doesn't work. That simile was still a reach.
The profanity felt almost comical, that was my problem. Again, I had no problem with the overarching metaphor with the forest and the wolf. I even think if this entry were to be cleaned up, it would be a very good one; but the 3rd verse's complete change in tone and style was just so utterly jarring and unnecessary. I get that the perspective changes, but there's a better way to handle that. I just don't believe that contrast like that was called for there.
I don't believe y'all were trying to be offensive, and I wasn't offended personally, but I can definitely see it being perceived as offensive, which was the biggest danger with this entry.
I'm sorry that you didn't like the review, but I hope this helps to clarify what I was trying to say.
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