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I never thought I'd actually read the word fat or any of its variations in a song. The fatter/matter rhyme was so bad BUT this piece overall touched my heart. It did take a while (until the bridge) but I got the utterly confessional vibe and I dig it. Although peppered with easy rhymes and an unexceptional pre-chorus that could have been done without, your message is very easy to relate to. This particular entry reminded me of something Madonna would write during her early 2000s artistic peak, so this is definitely something Hor Records would be looking for! Try not to use as many of those rhymes anymore, however. While they may help with the flow, it often cheapens the piece as a whole.
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Better than I anticipated.
I knew the fatter/matter lines wouldn't be received well, but I was too pressed for time to try to come up with a better way to get the point of those lines across.
And I agree that the pre-chorus is one of the song's weaker points.
I wasn't expecting this 
