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Originally posted by FatHor
1. Hugamari - Yozakura
This slayed me the second time around. Okay, but how did you nail the Last Airbender song-style so well? Your entry is quite beautiful even if out of the box. I, for one, was more impressed by the emotion than the actual language used (a reverse 8th experience). Your flow was impeccable as well. Some of the language is contrived as hell, however, such as the fuchsia skies line which I don't like at all, even if it does hold some meaning (pink seems to be important here?). Anyway, congratulations on another strong entry.
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Okay, I'm not defending myself here (since this was a VERY POSITIVE review), but when I was doing research on my topic, one of the articles I was reading mentioned the trees being like clouds, so I ran with it and made the verse describe blossoms blowing out of the trees like rain. It was an image I knew I wanted to my song, so you can definitely say it was contrived to force it in there.
Glad you felt there was emotion to it, as well! I always worry about the imagery drowning the emotion, but it seems that's not something I should be too worried about.
Oh, and thank you for the positive review! I was nervous when I woke up and logged on to see your comments were posted for batch 1. Relieved to say the least!
I'm not really sure how you got "quickly put together" from my lyrics but alright!