I expected to be out of the competition after swiftie's review, but then that was actually the harshest one
I'm proud that I made it to top 20, I'm looking at the people ahead and below me and a lot of these people have written great songs in past competitions so it's definitely an achievement.
From what I gather, it seems like I'll try to come up with a unique concept then spend more time fleshing it out and tightening up the technique. This round, I had another entry I was working on then this one came to me at literally the last minute (like some hours before deadline) and I feel like had I spent a little more time on it, it would've been a better song. But I'm super happy with how it's done!
Act of Contrition
Oh God, the grievous things I’ve done
Oh God, please hear your faithful son
Whenever he leaves, I scrub away his touch
I never sought contrition for myself so much
I betrayed my love, I let our lips meet
I’ve done wrong, may you never grant me peace
He perverted my mind
He corrupted my heart
I let him ravage my body
I still carry the scars
O lord, I beg for absolution
Please grant my love her retribution
Bestow your mercy on me now
Wretched I am to break my vow
Forgive me for letting another in
I let my lust draw me to sin
Sin, sin, sin
I ready my heart to carry out my penance
But why do I now still crave his presence?
Oh God, the grievous things I’ve done
Oh God, please hear your faithful son