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9. Hugamari - Welcome to the World (Intro)
I thought that this conceptually was very cute, and in terms of working as an intro, absolutely perfect. It hits home a bit for me since I had a brother born last month  As for the song itself, the first verse's rhymes were way too predictable as was blow/go in the third. And "froze" should be "frozen," right? Otherwise, I thought this was very nice and really refreshing.
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I knew as SOON as I thought of the line "I see Spring in your eyes" that I just HAD to do this concept for my intro. IT was too good of an idea to pass up. I can definitely see where you're coming from, but I wanted to make sure that the lines conceptually made sense before the rhyme scheme. It's definitely important to have both, though! Also, yeah...it is supposed to be frozen. I didn't want to bother you guys with a re-submission fixing something that minor, though.
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9. Hugamari – Welcome to the World
I loved this  I just realized this is my first time judging you since we’ve always either played together, judged together, or I’ve been judged by you. I wrote a similar song with the same title the day my little brother was born so this definitely has special meaning to me. I could sense the emotion in it even though I know you’re yet to be a father. The line “I see clear and serene skies” would have flowed better without the word “and”, and “it takes you where you need to go” came across as awkward among the other brilliantly simple and direct lines. This is my favorite entry so far, though, and it’s looking to be Hugamari SZN up in this bitch.
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I decided to keep the "and" for the clear and serene skies line because I figured it went better with the "meadows far and wide" part right after. I can see where you're coming from, though! I was so worried about looking like an incompetent **** up, though, so I'm glad that wasn't the case.
Thank you both for your reviews, by the way! I really appreciate it.
