14. UFO – Awakened (an earthquake, alveary)
This is a silently beautiful song. There’s no huge punch or hook, and it still lacks the typical language we associate with you, but it works really well here. There’s absolutely no errors to be found here. There’s a perfect amount of repetition throughout the prechorus and chorus, and the subtle imagery throughout the verses is extremely effective. You used your word so naturally it didn’t even feel like part of the challenge. I’m ready for your next Nighthawks tbh.
15. Dylobs – I'm Prepared (a spiritual awakening, isagogic)
Basically my review for you is the same as Euphorian. Your song was beautifully simplistic. It never tried too hard, but it never failed to deliver. I would be more careful with the insecurity/desperately/divinity/epiphany rhymes, but you barely managed to pull them off here. It can often be a risk to include long words that don’t quite rhyme at the ends of lines so just watch for that in the future.
Thank you But could you explain the bolded part cause I'm not quite sure what you mean?
03. TheCheetahwings – Rose (a graveyard, securiform)
I’ve noticed your songs seem to be a melting pot of brilliant and awkward mistakes. On one hand, your prechorus is one of my favorite things I’ve ever read as a judge. The flow is impeccable, and the internal rhyming is extremely well thought out. The bridge is beautiful as well. Past that, parts of the chorus seem clumsy and the first verse takes a while to gain its footing. The story unfolded rather slowly at first, but then hit a twist too fast when suddenly she was killing her father. I liked how you described her relationship with her mother, but the father bit was too much in my opinion. You fulfilled the challenge adequately, but you could have used your theme and word better.
I'm glad you liked some parts of it at least But I hope in future rounds (If I make it through ) I can manage to eliminate the awkward mistakes/bad sections of the song.
Thanks for the extensive feedback GotSkill i can understand all your points thoroughly. I'll keep what you said in mind about keeping the storytelling and language in mind while trying to make the message less confusing (and long) Thanks again!
You first have to find the like to dislike ratio, divide it by the previous video, then flip the order of the rankings and multiply the ratio by This Is How We Do's view count on the same day the twins' video was released to YouTube.
But could you explain the bolded part cause I'm not quite sure what you mean?
) I can manage to eliminate the awkward mistakes/bad sections of the song.
i can understand all your points thoroughly. I'll keep what you said in mind about keeping the storytelling and language in mind while trying to make the message less confusing (and long) Thanks again!
