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Tournament: PLATINUM HIT 8
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Thank god for my immunity lemme just say
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Originally posted by conatus
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hi lovesong
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Originally posted by Tymps.
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Your average rank is in the Top 10 so let's hope you don't get #18. *eyes*
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Submitted What You Don't Know (Won't Hurt You) 
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I still kinda hate my title tbh. There's not really a clear one for my song at all.
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Quote:
Originally posted by ClarksonSlays
I still kinda hate my title tbh. There's not really a clear one for my song at all.
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Can't be as bad as
Sorrysong
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Alright I submitted. I was actually inspired by the song "Mother" so thank you swiftie13.
 Reshape
The grey force makes way for the verdant
It breathes and expands unrestrained
Taller and wilder, more luscious
My hair that is grown unashamed
The blue depths are once again pure
Flushed of synthetics and spills
By ecstatic tears I have shed
As rivers that roll down the hills
Enveloped by untarnished layers
The gases and clouds are my own
No drills or machines on this surface
In this skin, I am at home
Chorus:
No longer bound by my own creation
No longer chained to the will of man
I now have the power to birth something better
In the pools of where it began
I'll show off my wonders to the old and the new
To creatures that don't understand
Unjudged and unstoppable
I've taken the chance
To reshape my whole being again
In every reaction, in every cell
There is something else that could become
I'll guide evolution and prevent domination
As I dance around my sun
This wilderness will never be commanded
Only nudged by the brush of my winds
And each time the road ends for a species
The journey of another begins
Repeat chorus
I have no purpose
I have no guide
I don't know if I what I do is right
I have no beginning
No ending, no name
But no era is ever the same
Repeat chorus
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Hoy voy a seducirte sin darme cuenta, sin darme cuenta
Te robare un suspiro aunque sea el motivo de mi delirio
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Member Since: 1/13/2012
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Quote:
Originally posted by Kworb
Alright I submitted. I was actually inspired by the song "Mother" so thank you swiftie13.
Reshape
The grey force makes way for the verdant
It breathes and expands unrestrained
Taller and wilder, more luscious
My hair that is grown unashamed
The blue depths are once again pure
Flushed of synthetics and spills
By ecstatic tears I have shed
As rivers that roll down the hills
Enveloped by untarnished layers
The gases and clouds are my own
No drills or machines on this surface
In this skin, I am at home
Chorus:
No longer bound by my own creation
No longer chained to the will of man
I now have the power to birth something better
In the pools of where it began
I'll show off my wonders to the old and the new
To creatures that don't understand
Unjudged and unstoppable
I've taken the chance
To reshape my whole being again
In every reaction, in every cell
There is something else that could become
I'll guide evolution and prevent domination
As I dance around my sun
This wilderness will never be commanded
Only nudged by the brush of my winds
And each time the road ends for a species
The journey of another begins
Repeat chorus
I have no purpose
I have no guide
I don't know if I what I do is right
I have no beginning
No ending, no name
But no era is ever the same
Repeat chorus
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 this is so perfect.
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Okay. I finished my song for the most part. Can I send it to someone to review? It's for Desire but works for Guilt, too, so
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Originally posted by Moonchild
Okay. I finished my song for the most part. Can I send it to someone to review? It's for Desire but works for Guilt, too, so |
No spots left for Guilt
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Just submitted 
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Member Since: 2/18/2012
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Quote:
Originally posted by Jack!
Here's my entry if anyone wants a read/wants to critique.
Jack Lees - Night Night
VERSE
I bare my troubles in an empty room
Inside my head, the walls are gloom
The fire below at my feet feels so cold
There’s nothing I feel, I’m not alive anymore
CHORUS
“Come, take my hand” said the devil in my head
“And I’ll lay you down in your cold and lonely bed
Ignore the voices of the ones who will help
Or I’ll block your ears, cut them off and leave you deaf”
VERSE
I can’t escape this never-ending maze
Permanently gagged, there’s no mouth to scream
The darkness blinds me day after day
There’s nothing to see, there’s no part left of me
CHORUS
“Come, take my hand” said the devil in my head
“And I’ll lay you down in your cold and lonely bed
Ignore the voices of the ones who will help
Or I’ll block your ears, cut them off and leave you deaf”
“You’ll be alright” said the stranger in the dark
“I’m here to help you, now it’s time to leave your mark
No one will care when you take your last breath
You and I both know you’d be better off dead”
BRIDGE
I watch the hand on the clock tick backwards
They all told me to change, they all had the answers
I count the last hour, live in the end of time
Maybe things would be different, had I lived a different life
CHORUS
“Come, take my hand” said the devil in my head
“And I’ll lay you down in your cold and lonely bed
Ignore the voices of the ones who will help
Or I’ll block your ears, cut them off and leave you deaf”
“You’ll be alright” said the stranger in the dark
“I’m here to help you, now it’s time to leave your mark
No one will care when you take your last breath
You and I both know you’d be better off dead”
“Don’t be afraid” said the demon in my mind
“They’ll forget all about you in a matter of time
There’s nothing to fear, I’m right by your side
Close your eyes, turn off the light, it’s time to say night night”. |
Bumping if anyone cares. 👀
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So Moonchild just snatched me
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Read it Fat
Quote:
Verse
Cityscapes and summer rain
Our love and laughter gone astray
War of words all through the night
If only I had God’s foresight
Sunrise behind the city foreground
When you took the train downtown
No kisses on our soft morning cheeks
When life before us suddenly went bleak
Chorus
The time has passed but this pain remains
The lack of your heartbeat beside me each day
September’s a blur, I shouldn’t have lied
And told you I hated you
Your last night alive
Verse
Midnight smoke and kerosene
Sirens drowning muffled screams
I prayed for you to come home
Soon I realized I was alone
I drove you into horror and flame
This hole in my heart, filled up with shame
Seeing rubble replaced with a tower
Just a reminder of what used to be ours
Chorus
The time has passed but this pain remains
The lack of your heartbeat beside me each day
September’s a blur, I shouldn’t have lied
And told you I hated you
Your last night alive
Bridge
There’s so much I wish that you could know
How I still smell your shirt, and wear your green coat
Between the nightmares and despair, I wonder at night
What your life's like amongst the stars of the sky
But here on the earth I’m still buried deep
Beneath your memories as heavy as concrete
There are moments I see light and think Hell will end
But it always dims out and I’m trapped with my sins
Chorus
The time has passed but this pain remains
The lack of your heartbeat beside me each day
September’s a blur, I shouldn’t have lied
And told you I hated you your last night alive
The time has passed but this pain remains
The lack of your heartbeat beside me each day
September’s a blur, I shouldn’t have lied
And told you I hated you your last night alive
Outro
When you took your last breath
And fell from the sky
Did you forgive me
For our last September night?
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If anyone is interested, I just finished The Jungle!
Quote:
Originally posted by swiftie13
Kingdom Bells (Interlude)
Kingdom bells
ring over the city
Reminding us of
our wasted time
We will remain
singing of melancholy
Until the day we die
These poorly paved streets
Know where we've been
They've seen the struggles
endured by our feet
The ache in our bones
is nothing new
Caused by the distant
happiness we try to pursue
The empty drums
only play one song
It won't be long, they assure
It won't be long
Mother
I took a train to paradise
and I landed in outer space
It was when I looked outside
that I saw our wicked ways
The earth had turned a sickly red
as we began to exhaust her lands
Never has another creature
bitten at such helpful hands
Heaven on earth longer exists
We threw her life into the abyss
Look at what we have done
Look what earth has become
So I am leaving to give her some peace
Floating aimlessly all throughout space
Believing in our privilege
We destroyed at our own leisure
She gave life to petulant children
Fell victim to our pretend brilliance
From far I saw she was weeping
Her dry tears revealed she was needing
Fertile fields, no longer yielding
I'm part of her pain, I too, have been greedy
Heaven on earth longer exists
Our departure would be a gift
Look at what we have done
Look what earth has become
So I am leaving to give her some peace
Floating aimlessly all throughout space
Look at what we have done
Look what earth has become
Heaven on earth longer exists
Earth no longer exists
Look at what we have done
Look what earth has become
So I am leaving to give her some peace
Floating aimlessly all throughout space
Confessions on a Dance Floor
Selfish actions, lies, seduction
I have been so self indulgent
One night stands and countless lovers
Wasted time I can't recover
These two hands have come together
A thousand times to say a prayer
I'm on my knees in reverence
But I live life without regrets
Yet to get to where I am today
I've had to make many mistakes
You'll never know what's on my mind
As you watch me step in time
Chorus
My feet bleed to perform penance
I'm dancing for a second chance
Follow me into forgiveness
As I sweat away my sins
I hear the audience scream my name
As I get rid of secret shame
The crowds keep saying they want more
As I confess on the dance floor
Cameras found me enticing
They fed into my vanity
Nobody knows just who I am
Only what came out of my sins
You'd like to know my sacrifices
I keep them hidden in my eyes
I'm protected by magazines
My truth consists of fantasies
They'll never know what I won't tell them
They'll never get why I'm still dancing
Chorus
No amount of Hail Mary's
No amount of Our Fathers
are daunting as the blood and tears
that I have shed through all these years
To make myself look like a fool
For not playing by the rules
To be someone who inspired
A catalyst that sparked a fire
I was young and sometimes wrong
But I will never admit it
I've seen the light, opened my eyes
Won't let my feet forget it
Chorus
Have you confessed yet?
The Jungle
Every step that you take towards me
Is graceful choreography
A complicated language
Pure enchantment
Carnal thoughts flood my imagination
Your beauty must have come from heaven
Attracting my senses
I'm captivated
Reminiscent of sweet adolescence
This impulse is testing my patience
The tension is rising
Within my body
Tell me that you feel it, too
Is fire burning inside of you?
Chorus
The hunger within me is bestial
Brave, bold, territorial
There is no use in resisting you
I'm lured in by your gravity
I'm your willing prey
Your helpless victim
Come inside, explore my nature
Confide in me your deepest fantasies
Show me your unguarded fragility
Borrow my untamed heart
Feel me in the dark
Release this angst that has a hold on me
With your touch, bring me back to sanity
Forgive my straightforwardness
Blame primitive instincts
Bathe in my lonely waters
We'll sink or swim together
Chorus
The hunger within me is bestial
Brave, bold, territorial
There is no use in resisting you
I'm lured in by your gravity
I'm your willing prey
Your helpless victim
Come inside, explore my nature
Can you feel my subtle invitations?
Can you sense my hidden motivations?
Keep walking my way
I'll meet you halfway
I promise to keep you safe in my arms
Make my body the place you call home
Chorus
The hunger within me is bestial
Brave, bold, territorial
There is no use in resisting you
I'm lured in by your gravity
I'm your willing prey
Your helpless victim
Come inside, explore my nature
I promise to keep you safe in my arms
Make my body the place you call home
Your shelter
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OMG Pain Remains  what even. You killed me in the last line if the chorus. R.I.P. me
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I didn't think it was possible after Moonchild but Swiftie just snatched me again omfg
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Member Since: 1/13/2012
Posts: 13,577
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Quote:
Originally posted by Jack!
Bumping if anyone cares. 👀
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This is that macabre sh*t that I love!
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