I should probably actually write something so I could post it in here, though! Well for now, only people in Platinum Hit have seen where my sig comes from, so...
Autumns Tears
Autumn’s tears fell upon Winter’s grave
She knew the seasons would surely change
Though she’d hoped that Spring would come again
Eternal night had dawned instead
Once the Summer skies were dazzling hues
Full of sparkling golds and stunning blues
Now the days of old have long since past
And the memories a distant ash
So Autumn cried
Not ready to say goodbye
Not ready to face the night
To let the snowflakes settle in
And Autumn’s tears
Came to be when all her fears
Were realized by the passing years
She felt the Winter closing in
She looked around for a hint of sun
But Winter doesn’t wait for anyone
Autumn’s tears crashed down on the sand
The grains of time slipped through her hands
She hoped the sun would come to rise again
Though lonely stars formed overhead
Once the Summer skies so welcoming
Now mysterious and beckoning
She felt cold coming ever close
And what left her was the sense of hope
So Autumn cried
Not ready to say goodbye
Not ready to face the night
To let the snowflakes settle in
And Autumn’s tears
Came to be when all her fears
Were realized by the passing years
She felt the Winter closing in
She looked around for a hint of sun
But Winter doesn’t wait for anyone
It's about facing mortality, and the realization of your own death by seeing those around you die, as well as not being ready to die and having regrets. It's told through the metaphor of seasons and stages of your life. I'm really proud that I was able to pull off the concept I had in my head for this song well!
Honestly, this is one of the most beautiful things I've ever read on this site and you've made me wanna make an attempt at songwriting/poetry again.
I'm interested by your choice of Autumn in particular though. The way I looked at it was that Autumn is synonymous with leaves falling from trees, thus leaving the trees 'bare'. Is this sense of vulnerability and everything being stripped back/peeled away/broken down being streamlined into the song to reflect the finality of the person's life and how it's all sorta come down to this final moment of bareness and rawness??
Honestly, this is one of the most beautiful things I've ever read on this site and you've made me wanna make an attempt at songwriting/poetry again.
I'm interested by your choice of Autumn in particular though. The way I looked at it was that Autumn is synonymous with leaves falling from trees, thus leaving the trees 'bare'. Is this sense of vulnerability and everything being stripped back/peeled away/broken down being streamlined into the song to reflect the finality of the person's life and how it's all sorta come down to this final moment of bareness and rawness??
Anyways, amazing job!!
Omg I actually choose Autumn for a much more simple reason, being that it's symbolizes that the end of a year is near, and with the song comparing seasons to stages of life, I thought it was fitting. I absolutely ADORE your interpretation of it, though, and it adds something I never even saw in my song myself. Thank you, by the way! It really means so much to me to think people actually thought I wrote something good.
If you do decide to take up writing again, Platinum Hit 9 should be happening sometime early next year! It's a great way to write with some fellow writers and gain some good advice and experience.
I miss writing. I can't even seem to tap into anything lately as I'm constantly writing horrid things like this:
I'm still standing here alone, distressed
No words could even manifest
The last glimpse of you was leaving
The darkness of the room still creeping
Seeping deeper into my soul
I could no longer control
The fire burning out
As the wave comes crashing down
First Verse:
You let your mind cloud your heart
Took one hard stab at me to tear me apart
But you knew I was there by your side
Couldn’t face me head on to protect your pride
You sold me out for fame
Thought that I would take the blame
And leave it where it lied
You ought to be ashamed
You should know I made this game
So, don’t act so surprised
Pre-Chorus:
Let’s not make matters worse than they already are
You’re not doing yourself the favor
Let’s not make rash mistakes we’ll regret tomorrow
‘Cause then no one’s gonna save you
Chorus:
Someone ring the alarm
I’m getting tired of your ****
If you don’t stop and call it quits
I’ll do something you won’t forget
Someone ring the alarm
You need to get up off of me
‘Cause I don’t know what I am gonna do
Second Verse:
Want me now, here’s your chance
I won’t pull a second glance
Let you see what you’ve done
Now I’m not the only one
You should take one hard look
Read your judgements by the book
Then you’ll see what I’ve known
You’re no better than before
Pre-Chorus:
Let’s not make matters worse than they already are
You’re not doing yourself the favor
Let’s not make rash mistakes we’ll regret tomorrow
‘Cause then no one’s gonna save you
Rap:
You got exactly what you wanted, but you couldn’t pay the price
Tell me was it really worth it, are you more than satisfied?
More than gratified to see all the lies you told, the souls you sold
Are worth more than you’ll ever be
Than you’ll see in your lifetime
Carry this down your lifeline
I worked hard to get where your standing
All you did was fill up the space
Claim it was a misunderstanding
But you couldn’t do it to my face
Now the role’s reversed, I’m well-rehearsed
So, I know how the story goes
You’ll do your very worse to make sure I’m hurt
But you're not who's in control
Bridge:
Everyone deserves a second chance, one you already had
You're not doing yourself the favor
I'm sick of being seen as "not a threat", you haven't seen it yet
(Until now, so **** you…) *maniacal laughter*
Chorus:
Someone ring the alarm
I’m getting tired of your ****
If you don’t stop and call it quits
I’ll do something you won’t forget
Someone ring the alarm
You need to get up off of me
‘Cause I don’t know what I am gonna do
Went for a spin
Thought you would turn back
Losing a friend
Why does it hurt so much?
Was this the end?
How you gon’ come back
Tell me again
Why you won’t let me live my life?
I wrote this for Round 2 of PH8. It's simple but I absolutely loved writing it. It is a song about the sadness that one can feel when getting older, realising that you’ve wasted a lot of time for others approval and just want to start over and do things differently.
Bitter Pill
Verse:
Glory days have come and gone
Like the rising sun at dawn
The seasons of my life have spun
As I wonder, what have I done?
Pre-chorus:
I guess I should swallow this bitter pill
Instead of pretending this isn’t real
Chorus:
Oh how I wish I, how I wish I
Could give life another try
Wouldn’t stop for anyone
Won’t pick up no passers-by
I wouldn’t let anyone influence my mind
Oh how I wish I, how I wish I
Could give life another try
Verse:
As the colours change naturally
I’m overcome with jealousy
So I look over my shoulder
Hoping time turns to nostalgia
Pre-chorus
Chorus
Bridge:
Who told me life would be this way?
The hurt, the lies, regrets, and pain
Maybe I should take the blame
I keep on searching through the rain
For a chance to do this all again
I wrote this for Round 2 of PH8. It's simple but I absolutely loved writing it. It is a song about the sadness that one can feel when getting older, realising that you’ve wasted a lot of time for others approval and just want to start over and do things differently.
Bitter Pill
Verse:
Glory days have come and gone
Like the rising sun at dawn
The seasons of my life have spun
As I wonder, what have I done?
Pre-chorus:
I guess I should swallow this bitter pill
Instead of pretending this isn’t real
Chorus:
Oh how I wish I, how I wish I
Could give life another try
Wouldn’t stop for anyone
Won’t pick up no passers-by
I wouldn’t let anyone influence my mind
Oh how I wish I, how I wish I
Could give life another try
Verse:
As the colours change naturally
I’m overcome with jealousy
So I look over my shoulder
Hoping time turns to nostalgia
Pre-chorus
Chorus
Bridge:
Who told me life would be this way?
The hurt, the lies, regrets, and pain
Maybe I should take the blame
I keep on searching through the rain
For a chance to do this all again
Posting this here so that I don't get completely disconnected from this community!
Let me know what you think and suggest a title if you can!
Street Corners
[verse]
Street corners, playgrounds
Hazy weekends downtown
Countless nights under neon lights
Tequila, rum and endless sights
And it’s 4 am in your bed
We got stars locked up in our heads
And dreams so full of ideas
That they might as well be poison
So now it’s coming down to the wire
Lips in tandem, lungs on fire
Hearts so full of hateful lust
That all we do is smoke and ****
I guess we’re like ghosts in the wind
Just dead inside, our skin glistening
And this love’s like a carnival
Always picking up and moving on
The tickets are so overpriced
But we both love these familiar lights
[chorus]
So tell me honey
What is this
Is it heaven or hell or pain or bliss
Is this love based on other drugs
Or are we just too high
And I’ll say time and time again
That your hands are my saving sin
Burn me up and cool me down
And let’s go down…
[verse]
Stone cold skin, closed eyes
Sleeping under crystal skies
Bodies linked up, serpentine
And everything will be alright
And it’s midnight under your sheets
Finding paradise, down your streets
And it’s hard to breathe and hard to see
A future without you and me
So now you know me down to the bones
Souls twisted up, and you’re my home
Hearts so full of love so pure
That all we do is **** for cures
I guess we’re like addicts at our core
Always getting by, but needing more
And this love’s like a hurricane
With its violence and *******ial rains
Hold me close under the eye
So close to the edge and so alive
If this is love and this is life
We must be gods we’ll never die
So baby take a deep breath now
Cause we’re going under, going out
Surface
[verse]
In the quiet night
Your voice came through
Speaking tongues I understood
But I don’t know how I knew
You were a mystery I just couldn’t solve
Until your fingers and your breathing
And my heart got involved
And you’d sit up so slow
Overheating, eyes blown
Picture of a young god
Talking bout how life’s odd
And I don’t know how I survived
Such beauty meant for just my eyes
Felt my whole mind fall apart
And put itself into my heart
[chorus]
Boy, put those lips to every surface
Innocence feels so far away
Whenever I move closer to you
Darkness seems to have its way
Shadows melt into these sounds
As you turn my body inside out
So put those hands to every surface
And take what you have found
[verse]
I remember being on top of you
Thinking “this will haunt me” and guess what baby
I was right, you did me right
And lately I’ve been up every single night
Chanting “please keep going” and oh god baby
I erupt in flames at the thought of your name
And I can’t help but go insane
At the thought that your body isn’t mine to this day
[chorus]
Boy, put those lips to every surface
Innocence feels so far away
Whenever I move closer to you
Darkness seems to have its way
Shadows melt into these sounds
As you turn my body inside out
So put those hands to every surface
And take what you have found
i wish
i wish
i wish
i wish i hadnt farted in front of you
i wish
i wish
i wish i hadnt used that mcdonalds coupon in front of you
i wish
i wish
i wish i hadnt punched you in the gut last night
i wish
i wish
i wish i hadnt kissed your friend cuz thats not right
[V1]
Like the sun in the azure sky
Your presence brings the world to life
Like the hum of a bird in flight
You are the song of paradise
The dawn erupts from royal blue
You light the world, you always do
The darkness tries to dim your shine
But you smile through it every time
[Chorus]
Some are too beautiful for this ugly world
I believe that goes for you
Some will want to steal your heart of gold
Their souls have dulled in hue
And when you crashed down from the sky
You can bet the Heavens cried
But I count all of my blessings
Because I get to call you mine
[V2]
Like the night in aurora blaze
You outshine all the faded grays
Like a sign from a higher place
Your guidance is my saving grace
The clouds collapsed and made a mist
I closed my eyes and made a wish
To find myself and my way through
And fate had brought me here to you
[Chorus]
Some are too beautiful for this ugly world
I believe that goes for you
Some will want to steal your heart of gold
Their souls have dulled in hue
And when you crashed down from the sky
You can bet the Heavens cried
But I count all of my blessings
Because I get to call you mine
Not anywhere as dark as Autumn's Tears, it's just about someone who is essentially too good for this world (as in they're too kind, caring, etc.) But I finally got over not wanting to write something because I liked my last song too much.
Well for now, only people in Platinum Hit have seen where my sig comes from, so...
Autumns Tears
. It's the 2nd time in PH history I actually personally connected to the song.
