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 Black Swan (Buyonce1814)The song starts off on a very high note, the great lyricism, my favorite line being “Shackles clipping my angelic wings”. While I do think the cliche line was shaky, as it didn’t click well with me, the rest of the verse was great. As for the pre-chorus, it was short but sweet to lead into the chorus, but I’m confused who their is supposed to be. I thought the chorus was solid, it didn’t exactly wow me but it definitely got the point of the song across. I thought the second verse was much better than the first, and probably my favorite part of the whole song. While the Mirror, Mirror line is a bit overused in songs, re: Xtina’s Vanity (hihi TT) I think it still works fine. Wait, scratch that, my favorite part is easily the bridge, it’s so well written. The outro is such a nice ending to the song.
Club Games (Eros)
That Fifth Harmony reign just won’t let up at the reference of Worth It in the chorus. The final line, the dude one, made me cringe only because I don’t like the word dude being used in a song at all. The first verse was way better than the chorus, despite one or two lines here that didn’t just work at all. The dick line in the second verse was pretty awkward, and the second verse didn’t really live up to the first. Which, I think was the best part of the song
Dancing With The Ghosts (ClarksonSlays)
First off, this reminds me of Blown Away, but I can’t exactly put my finger on why it does. Not that it’s a bad thing or anything. The first verse started off with a bang, and you know I love my storytelling lyrics, so I was instantly into the song. The pre-chorus was short, but effective. The chorus was great, I do wish you added a little more instead of repeating the line 4 times though. I liked the second verse, it really developed the story of the song about why you two went your own ways. The moon/heart comparison was great too. The reference to the bump in the night line was really cute. This is my favorite song of yours.
Dummy (8thPrince)
I’m really mixed about the chorus, I liked what you were going for but the first line and the last line felt so out of place that it made the chorus seem awkwardly written. The first verse is way better than the chorus. My favorite line is “We’re mannequins in the window of a café. The people outside that pass our display, they think we’re perfect”. Actually, both verses were the best part of the song and I really liked them.
Garden Full Of Roses (Era)
First off, just wanted to say I really liked the single cover you made, it was cute. I didn’t really like the bridge line in the first verse, but I liked the rest of it. I didn’t like the second line in the pre-chorus, and I was a bit confused what you were going for with it. The chorus was great, and easily the best part of the song. The second verse was great, and the highlight of the song for me, the blue eyes line, and the highs were great. The bridge was pretty simple and didn’t really do much for me.
Hold Your Hand (keshaspearsxo)
I thought that this was a pretty relatable song. I thought the first verse was good, it didn’t exactly blow me away, but it was a great start to the song. I thought the first pre-chorus was far better. The chorus is the highest point of the song, and really packed a punch and was the best part of the song, in my opinion. I thought the flower/bee line in the bridge was kinda awkward and didn’t really work for me.
Its Just A Game (Hugamari)
This lowkey reminds me of Madison Beer’s Unbreakable (which is you can purchase on iTunes right now), not the meaning of the song or anything but the melody in a way. I really liked the first verse, But, the pre-chorus was a bit of a letdown and really didn’t do anything for me. The chorus was great though, and a lot better and developed the idea you were going for in the pre-chorus. The second verse was pretty simple but effective, especially the “we do it because we’re bored” line, which I thought was well written. My problem with the bridge is the use of the word scar, not that I had a problem with it, I just don’t like the word and think it’s awkward in songs, not yours, just in general.
Left Hollow (BlueM)
I liked the heaven/hell contrast in the first verse, it was very well done. I do think that the animal line has been a bit overused, but it still works considering the meaning behind your song and all. I’m not sure how exactly I feel about the chorus, on one hand I think the concept is well handled but on the other I’m not sure if I liked how it was put into words. I didn’t really like the second verse, I don’t think it was as good as the first, it just reads a little awkward to me. My favorite part was the bridge and had great lyricism.
Love Is A Gamble (JustLuke)
Is that a Cinderella reference I spot in the first two lines? It randomly reminded me of it for some reason. The pre-chorus is a bop though, I could get into this. I already read the chorus when Golden promoted it and tried to get me to stan by saying he could see Ariana singing it. A mess at ClarksonSucks exposing her enuicatation. The chorus is really good though. I’m mixed on the second verse, I liked it but it didn’t really add anything to the song and is the weakest link
Monster (dwuw)
I liked the first verse, but I thought the injected line was pretty awkward and I didn’t really like it at all. Great lyricism in the final part of the first verse though, telling or showing how the guy (tbh) uses you. The pre-chorus is short and effective, it says just enough and leaves a great impression. The first part of the chorus is amazing and is some of your best lyrics. I thought the second part was kinda awkward though. One of the first second verse I’ve seen this round I actually liked tbh.
Regret (lovesong)
The first verse was cute, my favorite part of it was the catalyst line. Definitely the strongest part. I didn’t really like the repetitiveness of using brought in the chorus, it just sounded awkward. Otherwise, the rest of the chorus was good. The second verse is a step up and my favorite part of the song, the balance line is great. The outro is kinda awkward though, and can easily be cut.
ruins (Gotskill)
I had to reread the smile line a couple times because I had no clue what you meant by it, it seemed a little unclear at first, or maybe I’m just stupid. The second half of the first verse was amazing though, it really hit home honestly. Wait, that chorus destroyed me in it’s wake. It’s so powerful. The bridge is really great, but my personal problem is I just don’t like the use of scar in a song unless your name is Miley Cyrus.
Set Sail (Sam)
Wait, the first verse is really good (not surprised since your songs are always usually good). I liked the storytelling feel of it, lending a hand to this new lover. The compass line in the pre-chorus is amazing and one of my favorite lines off the song. I thought the kiss your reflection line was kinda awkward though. The chorus was pretty good and was a good high point of the song. I see your vocabulary expanding at the use of effervescent. The flag line in the second verse is my favorite line though. The bridge is my favorite part of the whole song, love the anchor line.
Tender (conatus)
I thought that the creek line was pretty awkward. The first verse was pretty shaky, it was simple and I feel like you could’ve started on a much higher and better note. I liked the idea of the picking at the meat lyric you had going, but it read a bit awkward. The second verse is much stronger than the first. The bridge is easily the best part of the song, but I’m a little confused at the father comparisons.
When They Cry (EuphorianSea)
I thought the first verse was shaky, but you seemed to find your footing by the third line or so, where the song/story really develops and becomes interesting. The pre-chorus is amazing, the vulture line especially. I thought the first half of the chorus was awkward, mainly the tuning out line, it just doesn’t click for me. But, the post-chorus is a step up and is far better. The second verse is amazing, and I do not have a single problem with it unlike your first verse. The bridge is great, except the the road line which is just a weird line, I just don’t really like the word crooked much.
Wicked Entropy (inuborg)
Wicked Entropy (inuborg)I think you had a really great concept, and were great at displaying your emotions on the concept but there were a couple lines here and there that just didn’t really click with me. For instance, the final line in the first verse where you said you got the call, it was just awkward since it seemed like you brushed it off with the damn. The chorus is good but I prefer the verses. The verses are much better and your storytelling is pretty much on point, despite a couple lines that could use a second glance and a quick edit.
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I thought that the creek line was pretty awkward. The first verse was pretty shaky, it was simple and I feel like you could’ve started on a much higher and better note. I liked the idea of the picking at the meat lyric you had going, but it read a bit awkward. The second verse is much stronger than the first. The bridge is easily the best part of the song, but I’m a little confused at the father comparisons.
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Hm, OK. Thank you.
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Yes, Fefe felt similarly about the word scar, but my artistic vision led me to that word. I couldn't avoid it.
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Oh good time to come online
Thanks Matty!
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Nnnn mess @ me waking up from my nap at the right time 
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My GRINDRPOP could mean anything.
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I just finished my reviews, but I'm gonna read over everything once more before sending them to TT 
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I thought the first verse was shaky, but you seemed to find your footing by the third line or so, where the song/story really develops and becomes interesting. The pre-chorus is amazing, the vulture line especially. I thought the first half of the chorus was awkward, mainly the tuning out line, it just doesn’t click for me. But, the post-chorus is a step up and is far better. The second verse is amazing, and I do not have a single problem with it unlike your first verse. The bridge is great, except the the road line which is just a weird line, I just don’t really like the word crooked much.
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I thought that the creek line was pretty awkward.
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I just don’t really like the word crooked much.
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The first verse was pretty shaky
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I thought the first verse was shaky
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Coincidence? I think not
Thanks Matty 
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Coincidence? I think not
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Why is this so dead? Thanks for the good review Matty
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Originally posted by Tymps.
Just added Pears (Tangela) to my Pokemon Mystery Dungeon team So far team SUCKmyASS is made up of Tymps. (Torchic), Fefe (Pikachu), GotSkill (Poliwag) and Pears (Tangela no tea no shade).
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Tangela is actually pretty cool so I'm into this
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Originally posted by Tymps.
Just added Pears (Tangela) to my Pokemon Mystery Dungeon team So far team SUCKmyASS is made up of Tymps. (Torchic), Fefe (Pikachu), GotSkill (Poliwag) and Pears (Tangela no tea no shade).
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you better evolve me into the str8 bro Poliwrath and not that twink Politoed 
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I thought my verses would be the most liked part of my song. Thanks for the reviews, Matty!
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so when are the next reviews coming?
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I think I'm going to produce backing tracks to the lyrics I've written for PH and release an album when it's all done.
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I would also, but I still struggle with producing to lyrics and writing to productions. 
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