WOW! I cannot believe I won. I never expected that.
Well done to all contestants. I thought all the poems were great. You're all so talented! I absolutely love the critics words too. Thank you for judging us honestly and with detail too.
I love how Tigre mentioned Cry. This is the poem I was talking about when i said I think I wrote Cry 2
. The "I should have" originally had "maybe" in front and I was like "Wait hold up...why is this familiar"
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I'm mad Truth didn't win though because I guess now Charmbracelet has to be rated low by ha
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Anyway, due to the 200 word limit I had to edit my poem a lot. Here's the full version of it...which reading now I don't actually like
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We all dream and try to find something to stabilise
The overwhelming actualities life doesn’t advertise
Thoughtlessly I glamorized what we were meant to be
We became a joke and love satirised you and me
Hate what is evil; cling to what is good.
Yet our love was unable to withstand like it should
Love is patient, love is kind, that’s what Corinthian said
Foolishly I walked in blind, rationality fled
Won’t you tell me why you made me cry?
And why every night I want to die?
I long for you to be by my side
Like the night you made me your bride
But every time I think of you
I can still smell her perfume
I thought you were my shy guy
But you turned out to be real sly
Moving on, I try and try
Yet here I am still stuck at why?
Honestly, I can tell you I gave you all I had
Never expected our love to turn sour and go bad
Where did we go wrong or was it that we weren’t ever right?
Two lovers underground our sparks set the cave alight
Was it me? What did I do?
Or were you in the wrong
I don’t understand.
We were so perfect.
We were supposed to be forever strong
Won’t you tell me why you made me cry?
And why every night I want to die?
I long for you to be by my side
Like the night you made me your bride
But every time I think of you
I can still smell her perfume
I thought you were my shy guy
But you turned out to be real sly
Moving on, I try and try
Yet here I am still stuck at why?
Maybe I shouldn't have walked down that altar impetuously
Maybe I shouldn't have said I love you vibrantly
Maybe I shouldn't have forgiven you habitually
Maybe I should have left the first time your eye wandered, aimlessly.
Or maybe I shouldn’t have pissed you off continuously
And maybe I should stop seeking love desperately
Because I always seem to rush into things hedonistically
And become a victim of senseless bastards who are so unworthy of loving me
Won’t you tell me why you made me cry?
And why every night I want to die?
I long for you to be by my side
Like the night you made me your bride
But every time I think of you
I can still smell her perfume
I thought you were my shy guy
But you turned out to be real sly
Moving on, I try and try
Yet here I am still stuck at why?
Won’t you tell me why you made me cry?
And why every night I want to die?
I long for you to be by my side
Like the night you made me your bride
But every time I think of you
I can still smell her perfume
I thought you were my shy guy
But you turned out to be real sly
Moving on, I try and try
Yet here I am still stuck at why?
I understand now, love takes time
So blessed that I am still alive
Now that I know, what you’re truly like
I am free, Mimi’s alright
Fly away, don’t return butterfly
After tonight, smiling all my life
You had your chance, I won’t reply
This joy ride is waving bye, bye
It’s a wrap, I’ll no longer cry
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I think it worlds better as a poem but that's the full version... But when i was singing it to myself it was very...I Only Wanted meets Cry meets Crybaby with a hint of Butterfly lol
and every writer. We should celebrate cuz there are no negative/mixed scores here 
you guys did amazing job, really talented
2nd place! Congrats Buy!
! That's so sweet. Thank you so much. I must admit it was hard writing in the perspective of someone else. I have so much more respect for Mariah as a songwriter. Didn't she say she never really experienced love that much so doesn't know why she wrote so many love songs - it's hard when you haven't experienced it yourself.
