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Discussion: ATRL Songwriter's Thread | Jacktrus gain dual #1
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51st page!
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Originally posted by DripDrip
I wrote something cute at 4AM today
X-Mas
Lick my north pole up down south
Santa Clause called me a **** (CUNxTuesday)
Told me hoe hoe hoe pull another stunt
For Christmas he gave me two blunts
He got lit up and busted a nut
Jingled his bells all over my butt
Oh what fun it was to ride on that one horse open sleigh
He comes down my chimney every night to play
With a real big sack just ready to unload
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And you said the younguns today are perverted
Anyways, you'e a bit late with the Christmas songs
ButI still like it
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Think we can make 10,000 hits by in the next 2 days?
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Quote:
Originally posted by AdamAL4
Think we can make 10,000 hits by in the next 2 days?
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Yes
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Quote:
Originally posted by AdamAL4
And you said the younguns today are perverted
Anyways, you'e a bit late with the Christmas songs
ButI still like it
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I can't be responsible for what goes on in my head at that hour
But thanks
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I can't at this thread smashing.
If it was someone else who opened it, it would've been even expired by now.
Adam.
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Originally posted by Bahjat
I can't at this thread smashing.
If it was someone else who opened it, it would've been even expired by now.
Adam.
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The only reason that this thread is still going on is because of you guys, so
None of the credit really should go to me here
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Originally posted by theoyella jukebox
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I took that part out, actually.
Fantasy
I touch your soft lips
I feel your sweatiness
I taste your loveliness
I hear your moaning and
Inject your poison in my mouth
I love the tastes inside me
You're a masterpiece, only for my eyes to see
Cause your body's like a paradise
Don't ever want to leave
But when I open my eyes, after a sexual scene, and realize it's all gone, realize it was just a dream.
Chorus
A fantasy, fantasy, But you're just a fantasy, fantasy, never gonna **** like we do in my dreams, never gonna **** like we do in my dreams.
And thought it may not be real, there's something inside of me, something that I feel.
Being with you, makes me feel brand new.
The stars are out tonight, and there's only one thing I want to do.
I wanna have a*
Fantasy, fantasy. But you're just a fantasy, fantasy. Never gonna **** like we do in my dreams.
Fantasy, fantasy. But you're just a fantasy, fantasy. Never gonna **** like we do in my dreams, never gonna **** like we do in my dreams.
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Wrote this last night, so yeah.
Better Off Alone
Better Off Alone
Sometimes I think I'm happier when I'm alone.*The ridicules and jokes, the ones they said wouldn't break my bones.*Being alone doesn't make me lonely. But letting out your insecurities on me just makes you phony. You could be such a great person, but you'd rather sin.*Because at the end of the day, I don't try to be like everyone else, so I win.
Chorus*
Because this life is not that easy but I'm Better Off Alone, no one to hear my complaints, no one to complain when I cry and moan.
Because people often say that I try to shut them out, but there's only one reason for that, I'm better off alone. So stop trying to text my phone. You know that I won't reply, unless you want me to pretend I'm happy and lie.
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I want to participate in this thread but I'm hesitant to share because I don't think they're very good. I just mess around most of the time I've read all 51 pages in the past 2 days and all of your lyrics you guys are great
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only we would know
the wind in our hair
the way they would stare
the beach after twelve
as the ocean would swell
nails painted gold and my hands you would hold
sand between our toes
only we would know...
but I didn't know it then, your heart was only on lend
and now I see the life that couldn't include me
it was you that i came to
it was you that i thought i knew
it was your dreams that came true
and it was me that you paid adieu, yeah it was me that you paid adieu...
those bright red cheeks against my crisp white sheets
the way we breathed and your arms around me
skin on skin, the way we could have been, only us
now the tears fall from my eyes because i should've realized
yeah i should've realized...
but I didn't know it then, your heart was only on lend
and it was me who could never see, that we just couldn't ever be
it was you that i came to
it was you that i thought i knew
it was your dreams that came true
and it was me that you paid adieu, yeah it was me that you paid adieu..
it not's done, it's barely even structured right but i wrote it after a dream i had where i was in a relationship where the girl wasn't out so it was a secret and then her dreams came true (like some job or w/e ) and she dumped me
constructive criticism please, this is the first time I'm sharing something I've written
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Originally posted by AdamAL4
The only reason that this thread is still going on is because of you guys, so
None of the credit really should go to me here
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Aww.
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Originally posted by briannaisboss
I want to participate in this thread but I'm hesitant to share because I don't think they're very good. I just mess around most of the time I 've read all 51 pages in the past 2 days and all of your lyrics you guys are great
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Omg I saw you browsing around in here for extended periods of time but not posting anything and now I know why
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Adam, you're on the front page, get that hit thread sis
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Originally posted by DripDrip
Adam, you're on the front page, get that hit thread sis
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6th biggest thread of the week BITCH
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Originally posted by AdamAL4
6th biggest thread of the week BITCH
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Finally you have something that's big
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Quote:
Originally posted by DripDrip
Finally you have something that's big
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Quote:
Originally posted by briannaisboss
only we would know
the wind in our hair
the way they would stare
the beach after twelve
as the ocean would swell
nails painted gold and my hands you would hold
sand between our toes
only we would know...
but I didn't know it then, your heart was only on lend
and now I see the life that couldn't include me
it was you that i came to
it was you that i thought i knew
it was your dreams that came true
and it was me that you paid adieu, yeah it was me that you paid adieu...
those bright red cheeks against my crisp white sheets
the way we breathed and your arms around me
skin on skin, the way we could have been, only us
now the tears fall from my eyes because i should've realized
yeah i should've realized...
but I didn't know it then, your heart was only on lend
and it was me who could never see, that we just couldn't ever be
it was you that i came to
it was you that i thought i knew
it was your dreams that came true
and it was me that you paid adieu, yeah it was me that you paid adieu..
it not's done, it's barely even structured right but i wrote it after a dream i had where i was in a relationship where the girl wasn't out so it was a secret and then her dreams came true (like some job or w/e ) and she dumped me
constructive criticism please, this is the first time I'm sharing something I've written
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I love the imagery
I feel like the song should be left how it is but...
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It's a wonder we haven't been reported for off-topic yet
Quickly, someone post their song!
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So much pressure!!!1
Not exactly a song, but I was thinking of writing a song sampling the hook of Britney's "Circus" as a bridge because I think it would slay as a bridge.
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