Discussion: Song Writers Club - Page 2

IREPMINAJ

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Originally posted by rwoznia

I like it.

Did you have a particular instrumental from something else that you wrote this to?

nah i currently write a bunch of lyrics in a notebook...i want to rap them out but some say some of my lyrics can go well with singers but i just don't know i plan on going to a college that is best known in the world for music production so i hope that gives me direction

for now all i do is write lyrics i plan to one day record and make a mixtape

im inspired alot by Kanye and Drake and J Cole

Harajuku

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Originally posted by IREPMINAJ

i just started something i trust none of you wont ' steal it but tell me what you think:

they say darkness makes the artist
and you can only grow after experiencing the hearless
and were doomed to the pain of love regardless
maybe this life is a dream addicted to a life of chaos imma feign
when we open our eyes as inphants we start this
a game called the breath of life in the eyes of the heartless

as i look in the mirror
i realize nuthin is clearer
i see im in a sea full of tears
a young man of hope trapped for years
calls for comfort never reached anyones ears
consumed by my doubts and fears
dont believe their lies i can see right thru you without my eyes
nuthing is sincere
in a land where everything and everybody is colder then winter
a lost student of life w/o his mentor
nothing but painful memories in the center
pushing my mind nearer
to a familiar place where i lost my affection here.....

so what do you think i'm not done with it yet please give me your input guys i want to be a rapper or make songs for singers preferably both

That's actually really good

it gave me illuminati teas but that's okay. Your song writing is similar to mine. Except I write ballads...

rwoznia

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Originally posted by princedonte

I wrote this song when i was 17. It's about cutting. It's not me singing though it's some other dude.

Do you play the instruments? I liked how that sounded but was distracted from the guitar playing.

IREPMINAJ

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Originally posted by FantasySoul

That's actually really good

it gave me illuminati teas but that's okay. Your song writing is similar to mine. Except I write ballads...

lol i swear everytime i write a new song i say to myself after i review like "damn they gone think i'm Illuminati with that line but i realize that no matter what an artist does that's the speculation but really !? let me see ! ..and that's the thing idk wtf that even means lol i wish i could take a song writing class so i could know what it means but i usually love ballads

Harajuku

Here's a verse I wrote out of the nowhere, its a ballad

I'm rotting in a coffin alone and terrified.
my prayers were never answered. "God why did you let me die"?
It was him who said he loved me, was the one who took my life.
He watched my aching heart bleed as I layed down to die

Be gentle

IREPMINAJ

Quote:

Originally posted by FantasySoul

Here's a verse I wrote out of the nowhere, its a ballad

I'm rotting in a coffin alone and terrified.
my prayers were never answered. "God why did you let me die"?
It was him who said he loved me, was the one who took my life.
He watched my aching heart bleed as I layed down to die

Be gentle

trutfully it sounds like the beginning of something great and dark
i could so hear Lady Gaga killing this with her voice and dark swag

Harajuku

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Originally posted by IREPMINAJ

trutfully it sounds like the beginning of something great and dark
i could so hear Lady Gaga killing this with her voice and dark swag

I was inspired by gagas bloody mary song so..

I'm still new to song writing so hopefully I can get better

IREPMINAJ

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Originally posted by FantasySoul

I was inspired by gagas bloody mary song so..

I'm still new to song writing so hopefully I can get better

you're def in the write direction
and lol! but no truthfully i could see the vma performance and music video it fits her very well !

would you sell your songs or sing them yourself ? what direction do you want to go with lyricism

Harajuku

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Originally posted by IREPMINAJ

you're def in the write direction
and lol! but no truthfully i could see the vma performance and music video it fits her very well !

would you sell your songs or sing them yourself ? what direction do you want to go with lyricism

I'm not a very good singer so I hope to one day write songs for mainstream artist.

At this point I don't know where I'm heading with my lyrics but I seem to write way better dark/illuminati songs than anything else

IREPMINAJ

Quote:

Originally posted by FantasySoul

I'm not a very good singer so I hope to one day write songs for mainstream artist.

At this point I don't know where I'm heading with my lyrics but I seem to write way better dark/illuminati songs than anything else

oh i see 1 i just want to be a rapper that can sing their choruses along the lines of drake or nicki or do that wierd thing j cole does in his song when he sings his choruses

but you know ! they say we song writers are influenced by the music we listen to the actions we have experienced in our life !

zach

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Originally posted by ABEL

I suggest this thread not to continue. You don't know who's lurking so you never know if they're going to steal your songs or not. How would you feel about someone making millions off your songs?

Just food for though, don't report please.

I came in here to say this.

Harajuku

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Originally posted by IREPMINAJ

oh i see 1 i just want to be a rapper that can sing their choruses along the lines of drake or nicki or do that wierd thing j cole does in his song when he sings his choruses

but you know ! they say we song writers are influenced by the music we listen to the actions we have experienced in our life !

Oh thats neat, Maybe you could work with nicki or drake one day

Well, the verse I wrote was about a woman who was killed by her lover and I just wrote it out of the nowhere honestly but I've recently started writing a song about my parents divorce so I do believe that

ABEL-o-matic

Ooh,
I surrender thee
to the summer night.
I succumb thee
to my slumber now.

I close my eyes
blink by blink
oh the worlds so slow.

as reality flies
drifting away
drifting away
oh where shall
my dreams take me

take me..,,

good night guys

I'm soo sleepy

Nait Phoenix

I wrote this to a chiptune beat I made, so keep that in mind:

There's a glitch in our love
It doesn't have to do with you or our User above
There's a glitch in my heart
And I'm afraid it's gonna tear us apart

I love metaphors...

Harajuku

Quote:

Originally posted by Nait Phoenix

I wrote this to a chiptune beat I made, so keep that in mind:

There's a glitch in our love
It doesn't have to do with you or our User above
There's a glitch in my heart
And I'm afraid it's gonna tear us apart

I love metaphors...

I love metaphors to!

I like your lyrics, it kind of sounds like a david guetta smash if that's what your going for

Nait Phoenix

Quote:

Originally posted by FantasySoul

I love metaphors to!

I like your lyrics, it kind of sounds like a david guetta smash if that's what your going for

Oh, you know it.

IREPMINAJ

0_o i finished the song and it's two pages front and back on each ...do you think yall can handle that cause ik from experience long post scare people away lmao

i gotta go over it and remaster it and everybody's sleepy now including me so i'll just remaster and review it tomorrow and then i'll post a thread on to see what the hole atrl community lol there good for criticism

it'll be the only song i post on the net because i dont wanna make it a habit but

the title for the song is: realization through destruction

ANTICIPATE IT TOMORROW GUYS SLEEP WELL AND THANK YOU FOR THE SUPPORT

brIt-()nstar

Quote:

Originally posted by IREPMINAJ

i just started something i trust none of you wont ' steal it but tell me what you think:

they say darkness makes the artist
and you can only grow after experiencing the hearless
and were doomed to the pain of love regardless
maybe this life is a dream addicted to a life of chaos imma feign
when we open our eyes as inphants we start this
a game called the breath of life in the eyes of the heartless

as i look in the mirror
i realize nuthin is clearer
i see im in a sea full of tears
a young man of hope trapped for years
calls for comfort never reached anyones ears
consumed by my doubts and fears
dont believe their lies i can see right thru you without my eyes
nuthing is sincere
in a land where everything and everybody is colder then winter
a lost student of life w/o his mentor
nothing but painful memories in the center
pushing my mind nearer
to a familiar place where i lost my affection here.....

so what do you think i'm not done with it yet please give me your input guys i want to be a rapper or make songs for singers preferably both

I think you should refine your ideas more. You need to have some kind of measurement so you could work on the beat. Try stanzas so it could look a bit more representable and some of the words are sort of repetitive and unclear so it's great thing if you have a pocket dictionary+thesaurus with you or if not a mobile app for that work.

EDIT: That's a rap song? That's actually pretty good.

Patricia

I'm an amateur lyricist, but I'm trying to improve, and spend more time on writing lyrics than writing poems, I'm better at writing songs in Spanish than I am in English, so bare with me.
I just made this up right now:
I can't ignore it, I can't forget it, I found you and I lost you. I remember when we would think of all the places we would go. Time didn't seem to exist, I would stay with you until the moonlight would shine bright. It was only me and you, and no one else. I didn't want to let you go, but I had to. The days seemed endless, this love seemed eternal.

IREPMINAJ

lol yeah i change my mind on the making a song thread because this song is just too good and i dont feel comfortable posing it on the world wide web because god knows ill be pissed if someone takes it