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Now onto the judge critiques:
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**DillonATRL is always an acting substitute for ethan if ethan is away
*DOMINO is our back up judge for ILM3, in this case, for Nasty Nas
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Originally posted by Celebrate
ReachOut: You had pretty much what I wanted to see in the challenge description. This time, I would have liked if you made your entry a bit less of a conversation type entry and more commanding. You were embracing your stats but it was underwhelmed by writting your entry a bit too conversational.
Citrus: I would point out to ReachOut how to make their entry less conversational and more commanding. I got a confident vibe from your entry Citrus, from the inner workings of your team to being confident about your contributions so far in the game. Good.
Bey_RihStan: I think you could have made your entry slightly longer (hopefully you didn't do this all on your phone again  ), because your confidence despite not doing one challenge was nice to see. More is my feedback to you.
GotSkill: I'm appriciative you at least now gave some reasoning to not submitting names for the vault. You know that the Vault voting is part of how the game is structured. Plus by not voting last round, a round you could have been cut from the competition entriely, this feedback is also a warning sign that your not gonna give this competition your 100% effort. Its an odd double edge sword type of situation. I would have liked you to drown out the "not voting against my teammates" with more information about what you did in challenge 1 for example. You are also one of the more active contestants as well, which is good to note.
Bloomers: I liked that you embraced being a team player for the game and worked out what you could in other challenges, more specificcally Challenge 2 when you had by far the highest score of any competitior. I felt I was convinced you want to stay in this competition. Good for refering back to the Midas Touch member title. Nice.
Era: You pretty much stuck with the challenge was in fact looking for in this challenge. You pointed out some good facts about what brought your team good scores and how you showed your best competitior/team player in ILM3. Good.
Element: The title made your entry 503 words  ...anyways. You took us through your head about what you did throughout the competition so far, which is great! Its with that mindset that the judges would then want to root you on knowing how your gonna take the next part of the competition by storm. Great! |
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Originally posted by DillonATRL
Element - You've always been a good writer so it's not surprising you explained yourself well. You did host The Author after all.
Bloomers - Did Element pay you for this plug-in? You have endured but will you survive?  Back to the point: good job mijo.
Citrus - Kinda living for the subtle shade of the flop team. Anyway, well put Citrus. I'm going to go get tested now.
Era - Bey_RihStan has a vagina. You were in the middle for me at least. It was decently explained but others outshined you a bit.
Bey_RihStan - I always want to defend you even in Les ATRLers. Sure, you don't score perfectly but you always seem to care beyond that. And when you do forget about a deadline, it seems genuine and not that you were lurking ATRL for hours ignoring the task.
ReachOut - You added some humor in there which is cute but from what I've seen you have been one of the more absent players regardless of reason. I promo'd for you so do me right if you make it and come harder!
GotSkill - Well I know you're in PH like all day every day so it's hard to sympathize but you ae quite the character so that's always a plus when it comes to casting/branding. A bit on the short side though. |
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Originally posted by Legend E
ReachOut
I remember you were one of the members who impressed me the most since the beginning! You have a positive, yet fun attitude which will always make you win in your life. I am glad you are implicated in the game (or at least you were ), but I was hoping you'd have better reasons for the negative feedback than not knowing your contestants. Take in count their overall devotion and participation in the contest next time.
Citrus
Y'ALL HAVE BEEN PMING JUST 20/50 PEOPLE???????? I think in the last season we did more than that (confirm this to me the rest of the judges ) Anyway, back to your essay, I loved it much more than your first essay of acceptance  . You had funny bits and yet did not drag anybody for no reason. I really liked it  Good luck
Bey_RihStan
I understand what you're saying, but judging by your scores so far you don't seem that implicated either  You need to get over your comfort zone and try to spend a bit more time dedicated to ILM (trust me sis you really need to have time for it  )
GotSkill
You didn't seem to dedicate that much time to this either in the last few challenges. Now, I understand there's Platinum Hit, but what the hell do y'all do there except writing songs? I mean it really seems like you've done you're essay quickly just to get it in.
Bloomers
I think you've done good so far. Nothing to comment about your essay, except the fact that it tends to be a bit...monotone I guess.
Era
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I really like him and he seems to be a good guy
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I think you should have said a few more things about yourself than describing everything that you have done in like every challenge. Tell us a bit about your qualities, but try not to sound too egocentric.
Element
A little bit too much description too, but at least it didn't fill your entire essay  I like that you are confident and you are here to fight and I think you described it really well as everything you say is kinda true. A bit more modest next time, maybe?
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Originally posted by DOMINO
ReachOut
Girl, what the heck makes you think I’m a hole. Not a nice way to start an essay, I have to say. I feel offended. 
Overall I was not impressed (and no I do not say that because you called us holes). It just didn’t convince me and the general tone of it was very messy and not serious. Whenever you’re told to explain to us why you deserve to be here you better be persuasive. On the one hand you’re saying that you’re the most active member in the thread, on the other hand you’re telling me that you couldn’t vote for something because you didn’t have the time. Instead of working with your team you full on drag them. Get it together.
Citrus
I believe you. You not submitting last week is a bit messy, but then again you’re in the finals week and you’re apologizing for it. So it’s fine.
What I loved is how well you spoke about your team. No matter if they lose or win all the time.. you are a team. And you seem to understand that. I was unable to follow this game a lot but slay those rankings, Citrés. All in all impressive. Keep it up.
Bey_Rihstan
Urgh, what am I going to do with you Bey? You seem to join every game with the intention of winning but when I see entries like this I question whether or not you really want it. Yes, you tell me that you want to win and that you have made it possible to get rid of a big competitor, that is all nice but where is the professionalism in your entries? It just seems rushed and not so serious.
GotSkill
Girl bye, I don’t believe the slightest bit that you really are that active if you keep on forgetting to vote. That excuse that you made up ain’t cutting it, henny. Mess at participating in the challenges being a reason that you deserve to stay - is this what we’ve come down to in the games section now?
The entry looks rushed and seems to be done just to be done. It’s very short and uninteresting. I’m not saying you have to write paragraphs over paragraphs but you didn’t really get a valid point across for me.
Bloomers
This entry is cute. I see you put at least some effort in it unless some of the other members (most of them, to be correct). You seem to be the fighter of this game. Keep on battling! You don’t have to be number one all the time, what matters is that you’re number one in the finale. Just like Citrus you seem to be a team player also. That’s always a good thing. One thing that put me a little off is this comment: <<.. much more talented Element, Era and Citrus>>. Now, you should be a team player but saying stuff like this never looks good for you. That gives the impression that you think you don’t deserve to win over them (even if that is not the case). In essays like this you have to be extra careful. You want to convince us that you deserve to be here, not talk highly of others.
Era
Yes, finally someone who is actually doing everything that Celebrate tells you to do. I look past that one time you were late because other than that you seem to be very invested in this game and that’s how it should be. Loved how you explicitly explained what you’ve done in each episode. It wasn’t too long but detailed and you got the point across. I think, judging by what I have read, that you definitely do deserve to be here.
Element
Yes Element yes! Nice to see you being in a game again. This is like the longer and even more detailed version of Era’s essay. I really liked it a lot. You seem to be very active (nothing new since you were active on Les ATRLers Season 2 as well) and working hard. Loved the detailed explanations of what you contributed each challenge. Like a few other you’re a team player and do everything you can to secure your team’s safety. Very commendable.
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