[Stark]

Originally posted by ClarksonSlays

Ugh, I love the imagery, especially the first line, but I think the syllable count and cop-out rhymes hinder you



The last two lines seem like cliché's, and I think TT would be better at explaining stresses because I don't fully understand them, but hollow and go sound awkward together.

I just can't with meter and syllables in ENglish

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by ClarksonSlays

The last two lines seem like cliché's, and I think TT would be better at explaining stresses because I don't fully understand them, but hollow and go sound awkward together.

I can't give that much feedback before the song is submitted.

Luke, I didn't read the spoiler sis, just trust the voice within and the rest of the contestants

[Lukey]

Originally posted by ClarksonSlays

Ugh, I love the imagery, especially the first line, but I think the syllable count and cop-out rhymes hinder you



The last two lines seem like cliché's, and I think TT would be better at explaining stresses because I don't fully understand them, but hollow and go sound awkward together.

Wait what lyrics seem cliche, just so i'm thinking about the right lines

And hmm, okay, thank you.

[Musickid203]

Originally posted by JustLuke

So this is what i have so far, i'm going off my feelings and it's only a draft, so you know, still working on it.

Only got the verses

I give you this final rose
Before I leave you and go
As I'm not the one you chose
And now my heart feels hollow

Yesterday you called and said
You would like to remain friends
But I'm the one you mislead
Could be too late for amends

thoughts :/

The whole last line in the first verse is cheesy.

[Tymps.]

Originally posted by Truth Teller

Tymps. baby, my 5th grade teacher caught me singing Beautiful at the top of my lungs as she was walking past the boys bathroom. If I could live that down, so can you

I don't live down anything. If I ever remember anything embarrassing that happened to me or anything stupid that I did, I get anxious, even if the event was from elementary school.

Originally posted by ClarksonSlays

Oh my god that song is so ****ing aggravating it's making me want to cut my ears off.

Thanks for making me feel less embarrassed bby

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by Sam 

I have no idea what to pick.

All the options are open, but I don't know if that's a good thing or a bad thing

[posh]

Originally posted by dwuw

I just can't with meter and syllables in ENglish

Make every word at the end of a line Spanish - it will be very primer plano.

[Stark]

Stuck in the chorus.

[8thPrince]

Watch your wig, AIWFCIY. AIS is coming for the new seasonal anthem.

[Lukey]

Originally posted by Musickid203

Hoilow doesn't fit in that last line.

Now my heart has vertigo

or no

[Aurora]

I can't do this right now, I'll pick later. Put me down for Flowers atm, I can change my mind later, right?

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by Tymps.

I don't live down anything. If I ever remember anything embarrassing that happened to me or anything stupid that I did, I get anxious, even if the event was from elementary school.



Thanks for making me feel less embarrassed bby

I TOTALLY GET THAT

Everytime I remember something really embarassing, I get this anxiety and then I remember all of my embarassing moments and feel worthless. But I bounce back pretty quickly, I don't know about you

[Stark]

Originally posted by posh

Make every word at the end of a line Spanish - it will be very primer plano.

Esa es una buena idea, pequeño posh.

[Tymps.]

I'm gonna try writing a song for the underwear one later and see how it goes. I was going to do every challenge with the contestants but I totally forgot.

[Temporal]

Originally posted by JustLuke

Wait what lyrics seem cliche, just so i'm thinking about the right lines

And hmm, okay, thank you.

Yesterday you called and said
You would like to remain friends
But I'm the one you mislead
Could be too late for amends

Really this verse is just ridden with clichés. It's just too simple. It needs a layer of complexity to lift it above the line of "okay."

Does anyone else think the last two lines are cheesy or is that just me?

Originally posted by Tymps.

Thanks for making me feel less embarrassed bby

No problem

[■YoungCalifornia■]

I'm almost done with my song!

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by Sam 

I can't do this right now, I'll pick later. Put me down for Flowers atm, I can change my mind later, right?

Sure, you can change your mind. Added you!

[Temporal]

Originally posted by Truth Teller

I TOTALLY GET THAT

Everytime I remember something really embarassing, I get this anxiety and then I remember all of my embarassing moments and feel worthless. But I bounce back pretty quickly, I don't know about you

I'm the same.

[Tymps.]

Originally posted by Truth Teller

I TOTALLY GET THAT

Everytime I remember something really embarassing, I get this anxiety and then I remember all of my embarassing moments and feel worthless. But I bounce back pretty quickly, I don't know about you

I just have to wait until I forget about it again / whenever I stop thinking about it.

Also whenever I think of something embarrassing no matter where I am I start humming / softly singing gibberish for a few seconds (even if I'm in class ).

[Truth Teller]

Originally posted by Tymps.

I just have to wait until I forget about it again / whenever I stop thinking about it.

Also whenever I think of something embarrassing no matter where I am I start humming / softly singing gibberish for a few seconds (even if I'm in class ).

You're so intriguing

I'm surrounded by so many basics irl, I'm so here for someone humming while they're embarassed or stanning for puppies or being not even alive like you