[TeddyMichaels]

You can't have an atrl songwriters thread without the one and only wannabe pop star Teddy Michaels lol

[FattMatt]

Could you review mine, i wanna know what people think

[The Original High]

Originally posted by Mezik

Distant Memory

Verse One:
Why did you have to leave
Why did you have to go so far
Why did you have to break me
Why did you have to leave me with this scar

Why did you let me believe,
that my future would involve you
When you knew I'd stay in your past,
there was nothing I could ever do

Chorus:
I let you tear down these walls,
let you see inside these halls
There was nothing that ever stopped us,
from being kings and queens
I gave you my heart
Too young and hopeless from the start
You're not worth haunting me anymore,
You're nothing now, but a distant memory

Verse Two:
No more crying
No more hopeful wishing or trying
May have knocked me down
But you can bet, I'll never stay stuck to the ground

Chorus:
I let you tear down these walls,
let you see inside these halls
There was nothing that ever stopped us,
from being kings and queens
I gave you my heart
Too young and hopeless from the start
You're not worth haunting me anymore,
You're nothing now, but a distant memory

Yeah..

You're nothing now, but a distant memory

Bridge:
I've let go,
I can finally smile
Free of your memory,
you can't torture me now

Chorus:
I let you tear down these walls..
let you see inside these halls..
Everything stopped us,
from being kings and queens
You may have stolen my heart,
but it's finally freed
You're not worth haunting me anymore,
You're nothing now, but a distant memory

I got an Avril vibe from this

[Mezik]

I decided to change this for the second verse..

No more crying
No more hopeful wishing or trying
It's hard to know that the truth,
can so easily break you

It'll shatter you like glass,
catching you off guard
Not about how broken you've become
It's about how fast you can mend the heart

[FattMatt]

OMG THAT IS BEAUTIFUL

[Saint]

I'm laying in bed thinking like
What can I do to make this right
I feel like everything is changing
But I'm the only one complaining

Am I the only one who cares
Or am I the only one who dares
To say what's on their mind
Was this all a lie

I feel like it's caving in
But i'm the only one sitting, here
When it's all set and done
I will be the only one
The life that we built
Can't be rebuilt
As it all falls down
What do we have now

Somehow I knew that it would end
Not in the way that it began
With all the happiness and smiles
But it all ended with me in denial
Of all the warning signs I saw
You had broken all the laws
You led me to believe
That there would always be a you and me

I guess I was the only one who cared
The only one who dared
To see the good in everyone
Even when its all set and done
Should I just have stayed in line
And accepted all your lies

I feel like it's caving in
But i'm the only one sitting, here
When it's all set and done
I will be the only one
The life that we built
Can't be rebuilt
As it all falls down
What do we have now

Now that it's all over
My heart feels so broken
You know it hurts
You left my heart in the dirt
But now I find myself
Climbing up the steps
Getting back on my feet
Trying to see the bright side of things

Tell me what you think...I hope you like it I really want to get into the industry and become a songwriter but idk where to begin

[Buyonce1814]

I write lyrics. I couldn't write a 'song' though - I am not musically gifted . I wish I was.

[Mezik]

Originally posted by BeyNavi

I'm laying in bed thinking like
What can I do to make this right
I feel like everything is changing
But I'm the only one complaining

Am I the only one who cares
Or am I the only one who dares
To say what's on their mind
Was this all a lie

I feel like it's caving in
But i'm the only one sitting, here
When it's all set and done
I will be the only one
The life that we built
Can't be rebuilt
As it all falls down
What do we have now

Somehow I knew that it would end
Not in the way that it began
With all the happiness and smiles
But it all ended with me in denial
Of all the warning signs I saw
You had broken all the laws
You led me to believe
That there would always be a you and me

I guess I was the only one who cared
The only one who dared
To see the good in everyone
Even when its all set and done
Should I just have stayed in line
And accepted all your lies

I feel like it's caving in
But i'm the only one sitting, here
When it's all set and done
I will be the only one
The life that we built
Can't be rebuilt
As it all falls down
What do we have now

Now that it's all over
My heart feels so broken
You know it hurts
You left my heart in the dirt
But now I find myself
Climbing up the steps
Getting back on my feet
Trying to see the bright side of things

Tell me what you think...I hope you like it I really want to get into the industry and become a songwriter but idk where to begin

I love this.

I heard Taylor Swift singing this as I read it, It's so well written and easily relatable.

[Saint]

Originally posted by Mezik

I love this.

I heard Taylor Swift singing this as I read it, It's so well written and easily relatable.

Awe thanks!

[Buyonce1814]

This is something I wrote a while ago. I had an image of Kings of Leon singing it tbh.

The Well

I keep on falling in this pit with no light
It's like I'm pushed; it's not as if the choice is mine
The walls are wet and my hands bleed from the climb
But every time I fall I'm determined to make it out alive

It's a long way way away
Til I can really truly say
That at the end of the day
It was worth all of the pain

Oh this magic well
It's not listening to my wishes
Why won't you ****ing listen to me?
I opened my wallet and threw it all in.
I pushed myself in
And now I'm drowning in a pool of sin.
I threw it all in.
Oh this magic well
Who can I tell?
Who can I tell?
Someone get me out
Get me out
Grab my arm and pull me the **** out.

Everywhere i go
The pain and trouble follows
Surrounded by everything that leads to sorrow
Every road I take has something that makes me break
Something that I cannot take
Something so ****ing fake
Something that'll change my ways
Make me burn instead of pray
Oh my knees ache
From kneeling down and begging
Forehead hurts from the rock
That I bang on as I drop

It's a long way way away
Til I can really truly say
That at the end of the day
It happened my way

Oh this magic well
I thought with it my life'd be so swell
You're supposed to have the answers
But I'm a fish caught in a net
And now I'm drowning in a pool of tears blood and sweat
Oh this magic well
Who can I tell?
Who can I tell?
You're supposed to get me out
Please get me out
Please get me out
Get me the **** out
Grab my arm and pull me the **** out.

Oh it's all a lie
The future is not that bright
It's not like they say
The road is not straight
One bump and you're hurt
Wrong turn and you're lost
Hope is all you've got
They're filling the kids with lies
They'll never make it out here alive
Nobody, not nobody can make it out here alive
Too many bitches, tramps and cries
Why do you lie?
Whyd you fill my head with lies?
All you do is ****ing lie
Why did you have to lie?

Oh this magic well
Who can I tell?
Who can I tell?
Someone get me out
Get me out
Grab my arm and pull me the **** out.
I just want out
I wanna get out
Someone please get me out
Pull the pale and get me out
I just want to get out
Please help me put
Help a brother out
Help a sister out
Help a son out
Help a daughter out
Help a parent out
Help a friend out
Help a stranger out
Help me out
Someone get me out
I just want to get out.

[Karma Chameleon]

Wrote a song about my boyfriend called "Best Friend" the other day:

BEST FRIEND

We've been, we've been together for quite a while now
And though this might not last forever, I'm pretty happy with how it's turning out

Oh we know every little thing about each other
I don't think I could love another like you
And to tell you the truth

CHORUS:
I wouldn't have it any other way
I wanna stay in bed with you all day
There's nowhere else that I would rather be
Than here with you just watching TV
I'm in la la la la love, I'm in la la la la love with my best friend, my best friend

We talk, we talk on facebook every single day
I still, I still can't get enough of feeling this way

Oh we stay up late eating junk food
I don't think I could love another like you
And to tell you the truth

CHORUS

We've had our ups, we've had our downs
But we always work it out
Cos whenever I'm mad
You always make me laugh

You like all the films that I like
You love all the songs that I write
Three years it's been
I wouldn't change a thing

CHORUS

[RidersDX]

Originally posted by Scorpio King

Liberation

[Verse 1]
Let me take you on a journey, through a long, lonely night
Had a bottle of poison in hand, ready to give up the fight
I was so lonely, I didn't think anyone cared.
Felt like the walls were closing in, I was gasping for air

[Pre-Chorus]
I was a child then, I was all alone
You can't imagine, my house never felt like a home
Those four walls that held the structure, couldn't hold me together
I slipped through the cracks

[Chorus]
I, I didn't know how strong I was, until that was my only choice
And that's how I'm here today, I had to find that inner voice
And feeling sorry doesn't help, you've got to learn to love yourself
And the rest will come naturally

[Post-Chorus]
Let all the pain, wash away
and you'll find that you'll be okay
Let all the pain, wash away
and you'll find that you'll be okay
and all those clouds, that filled the sky
will clear and you'll see the sun rise
It may be tough, but don't give up
Cause one day, you will see the light

Edit: If you need explanation, I wrote this song about my attempt at committing suicide.

Don't worry, I've been there too. I loved the powerful imagery, nice job. Really empowering and well written.

Originally posted by Mezik

Distant Memory

Verse One:
Why did you have to leave
Why did you have to go so far
Why did you have to break me
Why did you have to leave me with this scar

Why did you let me believe,
that my future would involve you
When you knew I'd stay in your past,
there was nothing I could ever do

Chorus:
I let you tear down these walls,
let you see inside these halls
There was nothing that ever stopped us,
from being kings and queens
I gave you my heart
Too young and hopeless from the start
You're not worth haunting me anymore,
You're nothing now, but a distant memory

Verse Two:
No more crying
No more hopeful wishing or trying
May have knocked me down
But you can bet, I'll never stay stuck to the ground

Chorus:
I let you tear down these walls,
let you see inside these halls
There was nothing that ever stopped us,
from being kings and queens
I gave you my heart
Too young and hopeless from the start
You're not worth haunting me anymore,
You're nothing now, but a distant memory

Yeah..

You're nothing now, but a distant memory

Bridge:
I've let go,
I can finally smile
Free of your memory,
you can't torture me now

Chorus:
I let you tear down these walls..
let you see inside these halls..
Everything stopped us,
from being kings and queens
You may have stolen my heart,
but it's finally freed
You're not worth haunting me anymore,
You're nothing now, but a distant memory

This had really great flow in my head. These were great empowering lyrics!

Originally posted by BeyNavi

I'm laying in bed thinking like
What can I do to make this right
I feel like everything is changing
But I'm the only one complaining

Am I the only one who cares
Or am I the only one who dares
To say what's on their mind
Was this all a lie

I feel like it's caving in
But i'm the only one sitting, here
When it's all set and done
I will be the only one
The life that we built
Can't be rebuilt
As it all falls down
What do we have now

Somehow I knew that it would end
Not in the way that it began
With all the happiness and smiles
But it all ended with me in denial
Of all the warning signs I saw
You had broken all the laws
You led me to believe
That there would always be a you and me

I guess I was the only one who cared
The only one who dared
To see the good in everyone
Even when its all set and done
Should I just have stayed in line
And accepted all your lies

I feel like it's caving in
But i'm the only one sitting, here
When it's all set and done
I will be the only one
The life that we built
Can't be rebuilt
As it all falls down
What do we have now

Now that it's all over
My heart feels so broken
You know it hurts
You left my heart in the dirt
But now I find myself
Climbing up the steps
Getting back on my feet
Trying to see the bright side of things

Tell me what you think...I hope you like it I really want to get into the industry and become a songwriter but idk where to begin

It's a very honest lyric and I like it! It's well written because it was probably very easy to get overdramatic but it was the right amount.

Originally posted by Buyonce1814

This is something I wrote a while ago. I had an image of Kings of Leon singing it tbh.

The Well

I keep on falling in this pit with no light
It's like I'm pushed; it's not as if the choice is mine
The walls are wet and my hands bleed from the climb
But every time I fall I'm determined to make it out alive

It's a long way way away
Til I can really truly say
That at the end of the day
It was worth all of the pain

Oh this magic well
It's not listening to my wishes
Why won't you ****ing listen to me?
I opened my wallet and threw it all in.
I pushed myself in
And now I'm drowning in a pool of sin.
I threw it all in.
Oh this magic well
Who can I tell?
Who can I tell?
Someone get me out
Get me out
Grab my arm and pull me the **** out.

Everywhere i go
The pain and trouble follows
Surrounded by everything that leads to sorrow
Every road I take has something that makes me break
Something that I cannot take
Something so ****ing fake
Something that'll change my ways
Make me burn instead of pray
Oh my knees ache
From kneeling down and begging
Forehead hurts from the rock
That I bang on as I drop

It's a long way way away
Til I can really truly say
That at the end of the day
It happened my way

Oh this magic well
I thought with it my life'd be so swell
You're supposed to have the answers
But I'm a fish caught in a net
And now I'm drowning in a pool of tears blood and sweat
Oh this magic well
Who can I tell?
Who can I tell?
You're supposed to get me out
Please get me out
Please get me out
Get me the **** out
Grab my arm and pull me the **** out.

Oh it's all a lie
The future is not that bright
It's not like they say
The road is not straight
One bump and you're hurt
Wrong turn and you're lost
Hope is all you've got
They're filling the kids with lies
They'll never make it out here alive
Nobody, not nobody can make it out here alive
Too many bitches, tramps and cries
Why do you lie?
Whyd you fill my head with lies?
All you do is ****ing lie
Why did you have to lie?

Oh this magic well
Who can I tell?
Who can I tell?
Someone get me out
Get me out
Grab my arm and pull me the **** out.
I just want out
I wanna get out
Someone please get me out
Pull the pale and get me out
I just want to get out
Please help me put
Help a brother out
Help a sister out
Help a son out
Help a daughter out
Help a parent out
Help a friend out
Help a stranger out
Help me out
Someone get me out
I just want to get out.

Wow, this song is crazy! It's very unique and creative I would love to hear it sung. It has a desperate feel to it that not many songwriters tackle, at least from the songs I listen to usually.

Originally posted by Karma Chameleon

Wrote a song about my boyfriend called "Best Friend" the other day:

This song has a nice happy go lucky feeling to it. I don't know if this is your intention but I imagine a nice little ukulele going along with it.

[Buyonce1814]

Originally posted by RidersDX

Wow, this song is crazy! It's very unique and creative I would love to hear it sung. It has a desperate feel to it that not many songwriters tackle, at least from the songs I listen to usually.

Awww thanks for the feedback. I very much appreciate that. When I was writing it I had an image of Kings Of Leon doing it on stage haha.

[Danny789]

SPOILED
Have you ever gave your all to somebody
**** him good, pay his rent, throw a party.
Do anything just to make him happy
Then he turn around and say he dont love me
Oh
**** that I take it all back
But how you so dumb
I'm the hottest like that
the sweetest in the streets
But I'm nasty in the sheets
And when it's my mouth I make it skeet skeet

CHORUS
I get what I want
And you're what I want
I can't help it I'm spoiled
I want it, Want it, want it, want it
I get what I want
And you're what I want
I can't help it I'm spoiled
I want it, Want it, want it, want it

I don't get it you must've bumped your head
Cause I treat you right and at night I tuck you into bed
When you Hungry I'm making sure you getting fed
And you turn around and say we still just friends
Mmmm
I can't co sign that
You a lying ****er
Cause when we Lying in bed
You my only ****er
I'm too hot to be a dine n dash kind of sucker
I don't know why i keep coming back for nucka
I know you say there's nothing more between us
That it is what it is
Its just fun between us
I should get rid chemo the cancer
But I've never been one to take no for an answer

CHORUS
I get what I want
And you're what I want
I can't help it I'm spoiled
I want it, Want it, want it, want it
I get what I want
And you're what I want
I can't help it I'm spoiled
I want it, Want it, want it, want it

I know I should let go
And you're already gone
I talk **** just to cope
With the fact we're done
use to everything handed on a platter
I'm a grown man i should be acting better
I like it when things come on a platter
Handed to me it makes it even better
Ill take a slice of you on a sliver platter
this same ol drama I think it makes it better

Imma brat, Imma A brat
Imma a brat tho
Imma brat, Imma A brat
Imma a brat tho
Imma brat, Imma A brat
Imma a brat tho
I do what I want, I do what I want

[Nait Phoenix]

I'm in love with these new faces! I'm so glad to see there are more songwriters on ATRL… which means I hope y'all will be available at the end of May when I host the new Platinum Hit!

[Buyonce1814]

Originally posted by Nait Phoenix

I'm in love with these new faces! I'm so glad to see there are more songwriters on ATRL… which means I hope y'all will be available at the end of May when I host the new Platinum Hit!

I've loved writing since I was a kid. I just wish I focused for on it rather than allow myself to get distracted.

[Jackson]

Here's another one I wrote about a year ago about parents at a time when they were kind of controlling my choices and I needed to break away from their influence.

THIS TIME

you say my brain is dumb
But maybe that's just because I'm young
I want to my make my own mistakes and learn
But you're no fun
You make me wanna turn away and run
Cause it's impossible to glow unless you burn
You're just a hypocrite stuck in an older skin
I need to live my life die and begin again

Chorus
I'm in the spotlight trying to look out
But I just fall down
Into the sky at least the stars are out
Floating around
This time did I let you down?
This time did I make you proud?

I need a chance to lose
If I'm ever gonna heal this bruise
And I need to do it all on my own
I need a weight to bear
And sometimes I need to just not care
If I'm ever gonna find a way back home
You're just a hypocrite stuck in an older skin
I need to live my life die and begin again

Chorus
I'm in the spotlight trying to look out
But I just fall down
Into the sky at least the stars are out
Floating around
This time did I let you down?
This time did I make you proud?

Bridge
You see the red, the white, and blue
But all I see is red
I need the freedom to choose
So I don't go and lose my head
This time I'm done with all the lies
This time I'm not gonna lose my mind

Chorus
I'm in the spotlight trying to look out
But I just fall down
Into the sky at least the stars are out
Floating around
This time did I let you down?
This time did I make you proud?

I'm gonna take a chance
If it means I'll lose all I have
Cause this time I think it's my turn to win

[Buyonce1814]

Originally posted by GotSkill

Here's another one I wrote about a year ago about parents at a time when they were kind of controlling my choices and I needed to break away from their influence.

THIS TIME

you say my brain is dumb
But maybe that's just because I'm young
I want to my make my own mistakes and learn
But you're no fun
You make me wanna turn away and run
Cause it's impossible to glow unless you burn
You're just a hypocrite stuck in an older skin
I need to live my life die and begin again

Chorus
I'm in the spotlight trying to look out
But I just fall down
Into the sky at least the stars are out
Floating around
This time did I let you down?
This time did I make you proud?

I need a chance to lose
If I'm ever gonna heal this bruise
And I need to do it all on my own
I need a weight to bear
And sometimes I need to just not care
If I'm ever gonna find a way back home
You're just a hypocrite stuck in an older skin
I need to live my life die and begin again

Chorus
I'm in the spotlight trying to look out
But I just fall down
Into the sky at least the stars are out
Floating around
This time did I let you down?
This time did I make you proud?

Bridge
You see the red, the white, and blue
But all I see is red
I need the freedom to choose
So I don't go and lose my head
This time I'm done with all the lies
This time I'm not gonna lose my mind

Chorus
I'm in the spotlight trying to look out
But I just fall down
Into the sky at least the stars are out
Floating around
This time did I let you down?
This time did I make you proud?

I'm gonna take a chance
If it means I'll lose all I have
Cause this time I think it's my turn to win

I think you perched into my life. This was beautiful

[Karma Chameleon]

I'm not sure if I ever posted this song in here. I wrote it late last year about one of my close friends, she comes from a rich background and she often gets pre-judged by people because of it and people always think she has everything she could ever want and her life was perfect but as I got to know her I soon learned that there were things she wished she could have that money couldn't buy. Anyway here it is:

ONE OF THOSE GIRLS

Verse 1:
Her daddy left when she was one
He packed up then he was gone
Still a stranger to her now, 18 years on

She grew up in a real big house
She never saw mum, she was never around
Cause she worked all day and spent all night on the town

But all that people say is "that rich kid, she's got it made"

CHORUS:
Oh everybody thinks she's one of those girls, one of those girls, one of those girls
That can have everything that they want in this world, want in this world, want in this world

But they don't see
She's just like you and me
And she just needs somebody
To see underneath
The diamonds and pearls, she's not one of those girls

Verse 2:
Her brother's six feet under the ground
He got himself caught up in the wrong crowd
Her only one wish is to have him still around

Well buying things is her escape
But she never really forgets the pain
She just covers it up with make up on her face

But all that people say is "that rich kid, she's got it made"

CHORUS

There is a bridge, but it's sorta just "she's not one of those girls" repeated a few times and I can't be bothered typing that out

[PeopleLikeUs]

Well, I tried to write a sexy song yesterday... this is what I've got

JUMP

I jump, you jump
I jump, you jump

Back flip, what kind of position that you want it?
I've bet that you want to taste it
Don't tell me wrong 'cause I'm not
I'm here for your love and your body and your soul

Baby you got me back
You always have my back
Literally, I'm speaking
You've be my king, I'm the queen of fantasy

I jump, you jump
I can do what I want
I wanna do
I jump, you jump
Can we ride this thing out?
We don't give a ****
I guess I'm kind of that lady

I jump, you jump

Spin me around, high above, I'm dizzy
Bring on the protection, I want it
I create the magic so you can lick it
Baby it's your love that I want more and more and more and more and more

Baby you got me back
You always have my back
Literally, I'm speaking
You've be my king, I'm the queen of fantasy

I jump, you jump
I can do what I want
I wanna do
I jump, you jump
Can we ride this thing out?
We don't give a ****
I guess I'm kind of that lady

I jump, you jump
I jump, you jump
I jump, you jump

How to work this thing out, baby?
Can you make me feel, pretty?
Push it hard on me like I want it
Ah, ah, ah, ah

Can we ruin this bed, my baby?
Can we shut the lights down, baby?
You can do anything on me
I will go like ah, ah, ah, ah

Ah, ah... ah, ah... ah, ah
Ah, ah... ah, ah... ah, ah
Ah, ah... ah, ah... ah, ah
Ah, ah... ah, ah... ah, ah

Try to mixed Rihanna's Jump with Beyonce's Partition then this song are created. I'm not copy but it's more to inspiration. I'm writing it from girl's POV because it's more easy that way.