"I like how you didn't really write anymore than you really needed to and I think the economy of your words makes your song more effective. Each part of the verse seemed to lead nicely to the next and I liked the build of the song. That being said, a couple rhymes feel a little forced to me: lines 12 and 16 in particular, especially contrasted with your more organic sounding rhymes throughout the rest of the song (although to be fair, they add a cheeky tone to the song, but that tone does conflict with the seemingly more passionate one of the rest of the song). That being said, all of me likes your song! "
I can't tell if this is positive or mixed...I will say generally positive, not quite universal acclaim.
are you SURE you didn't change your username? I just looked at my 2014 members top 40 chart I used to do and you weren't on it even though you're #15 now
