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10. MattyTacos – Cant Feel Anymore (an oasis, uberty)
I don’t find this to be your strongest entry, lyrically nor thematically. You’ve really been raising the bar lately and this felt like a bit of a decline for me. In saying that, it’s still a competent entry. The pre-chorus is better than the first verse. I’m not a huge fan of the chorus, the “cold like coal” seems like a misplaced comparison, it doesn’t fit in with oasis imagery for me. The second verse is an improvement from the first, but the first line, “Something has got to give you if you want to live” doesn’t make sense to me. If that was an error with an extra “you”, you should proofread better.
Cutting to the bridge, it’s the best part of the song lyrically and it also fits in with the concept. You managed to make the uberty lyric feel natural and one of the best in the song, so congrats on that. You managed to achieve in five lines what the challenge was asking of you, which is incredible, but I really wish that extended to the rest of the song too.
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Mess I didn't even notice the extra you and I sent my song to like 7 people and I'm surprised they didn't notice either.
But yasss you better stan for the bridge, it's my favorite part of my song (usually ALL my bridges are favorite parts).
This challenge was honestly really hard for me and I didn't feel satisfied with my final song so hopefully I manage to scrap by this week so I can return with another banger.
But oh well ShartsonDies can keep panicking 
