Did that old hag just try and use the word ~hung~ as an insult Elderly people are so out of touch
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Originally posted by Hugamari
I'm not sending until I changed all (or most) of what you suggested. The bridge is what's killing me, but I really liked your idea and i'm determined to make it work.
Hopefully the judges like it or you're gonna hate me 5eva!
Did that old hag just try and use the word ~hung~ as an insult Elderly people are so out of touch
Hopefully the judges like it or you're gonna hate me 5eva!
Honestly, my last bridge was a lazy rehash of my pre-choruses, which weren't all that strong to begin with! Good thing I deleted it for something more interesting!
I've made all the changes you suggested except for the fact that you didn't like my grocery list tea of a first verse, and I kept the line about the cat because I like it. It also makes the mention of alleys in the second verse feel progressive, imo. Should I send you my updated version?
EDIT: Oops, I forgot that I also kept the part that annoyed you most. Let me just not send then.
Well since you just admitted you sent me a Frankenstein's monster of lazy rehashes, maybe think about what you're sending me before you send it
SRS: send it to me whenever but I won't review it for like another few hours! Also enjoy the next 12(?) hours of your birthday
Yeah, there's ~12 hours left in my birthday. I'm gonna send you my changed version then go play Pokemon now that I don't have Platinum guilt lingering over me.
Yeah, there's ~12 hours left in my birthday. I'm gonna send you my changed version then go play Pokemon now that I don't have Platinum guilt lingering over me.
Honestly, I'm blessed that my problem was too many ideas. I thought about making a list of all the ideas I didn't use and posting them here, but that'd defeat the point of the challenge for everyone else.
Elderly people are so out of touch 
