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TeamAriNikoBradshaw: THANK YOU FOR UNDERLINING THE ALLITERATIONS. It makes it a lot easier for me to see what you did. But onto the actual song.
The song is about a girl who ends up getting pregnant by her boyfriend at a young age, and ends up having to raise the baby herself...right? The verses were really hectic and I couldn't really understand it. Maybe you wanted the lyrics to be purposely hectic to make the feel of the song hectic. (I also see you have The A Team on your NP, and this seems inspired by it)
You used alliteration, so
for that. I just feel like...this wasn't executed to full potential. Considering you seemed to have the #struggle for this challenge, it's a good effort.
VDK: I gave you the hardest letter of the bunch...I'm sorry for that. A lot of the letters assigned were parts of the persons name, and you just so happened to have a V...
Everytime I read your lyrics, I get really strong feelings...for multiple reasons. I always see the little hint of genius in the lyrics, and then I feel so disappointed because you never fully hit the nail on the head.
Before I get to anything else: I love that you went for the theatrical approach. It's not really something any other Platinum HIt contestant has done....ever. It's different, it's unique, and if I were to disregard the challenge theme, outstanding. However...unless the "voodoo, venom" being repeated is your 3 instances of alliteration, which is already a bit lazy, I don't really see the alliteration.
I can't wait to finally see the challenge where everyone gets to see what I see in you...if it ever actually comes.
Midnight: Okay, sex with a painter, I can get into this. "Treacherous, thunderous time" isn't alliteration, though. They don't begin with the same sound. The line before it is a great instance of alliteration, though.
You always have some of the better lyrics, in my opinion. This is an interesting concept with nice execution, and you have some instances of alliteration.
Warrior: Hmmm...
The structure seems odd. I can't tell if you were experimenting, or if you were lost. It seems lost to me. Now if you wanted the lyrics to seem lost to amplify a feeling of loss in the song, good job, I guess?
Also, you got some nice use of alliteration, good good. I just wish this felt more like a whole piece instead of an incomplete jigsaw puzzle.
Remember: You bolded the letters...thanks! It was kinda hard to see, though, since bolding isn't really obvious unless it's a whole word, or the text is really big. That's nothing to do with the entry, I was just pointing it out.
I really like your entry. There seems to be constant improvement from you, in my opinion. This entry feels really bittersweet and melancholic. I can already hear it...
One of my favorites from this round.
Hustler: This is a bit clunky...like, when you get it right, it flows really well and is pretty catchy, but there seems to be some extra words. There would be quite a few words I would omit/change from this if I were to revise it. I am not sure if you had trouble with this at times, but it feels like you did.
ImARudeBoy:
"If I only knew
I would have changed my attitude
If I only knew
I would have known what to do"
I changed your lyric because it was bugging me. "I would finally know" changes the tense of the song, and it feels clunky to me.
Also, the metaphor for eating...sounds more like a metaphor for murder. Is that what you were going for? It seems like you were trying to play off the eating theme, but it sounded more like you were getting stabbed.
I also see *some* alliteration, but not enough for what the challenge was asking for. Hmm...I know you can do better. Maybe next challenge we can see a comeback?
EatmeZayn: Imagery. I'm a huge sucker for imagery. I feel it in this. On that note,
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The thing is, though...this seems a bit choppy to me. Could be how I am reading it? Not sure. Regardless, I only see a few choppy parts, and the metaphorical lines and the imagery definitely save it for me. I like this entry.
Doodledot13: I can see D being used throughout the song. You went the extra step.
I really liked that. I have been saying this a lot for the entries, but it just seems a bit choppy. Hehe, I should try to find something else to critique on.
I see imagery in your lyrics again. Maybe you took notice since I put so high on my list during the themed challenge? I do like the imagery, but...they don't feel as strong to me. Well...it's a nice effort, overall. It's just not the strongest thing you have sent.
I'll make sure to make a more understandable song next week (should I make it), last week was just really busy with projects and tests 
the verses were done A Team style, you're right 