[Temporal]

All Reviews

1. OreGuy - Platinum Hit
Is it weird that I think this is your best song? This was cute, and I think it fulfilled the challenge for the most part. It was probably a little on the long side (but whatever), and you had some grammar mistakes that served "Would you critic and English paper if you didn't speak English?" with "We got judges who critics / We got host who will pick" (should've been "critiques" and "a host" or something to that effect). I didn't like the "think/week" rhyme and the "We're not golden" refrain was somewhat obtuse. Still, cute song.

2. KeshasFansRose - Platinum Nazis
I screamed at the 8th line Other than that this was kinda disappointing with the ballsy title, and a song that critiques the product instead of promoting it doesn't really work for a jingle, but that's not what you were going for anyways.

3. UFO - Write A Hit (Before You Quit)
I don't know why, but I threw my head back with laughter at the Pure Heroin line I like that you had all of these little nugget references scattered throughout, a true trip down Victory Road, I mean, Memory Lane The song itself was nice, but I don't think that the flow and rhymes were simple and concise enough for it to really work as a jingle.

4. Musickid203 - Introducing Platinum Hit
"Too much of both and you will fail" too much imagery and too much. Charts? You lost me there. I really liked the second stanza, even though it was shady. The chorus() was a really excellent example of a jingle as well. If it weren't for that third stanza, this would've gotten around an 8 for me.

5. Ceremonials - Before Joining Platinum Hit
"And never hold any grudges / Cause they've been there as well" slay that t huntY! This was kinda cute up until you threw it away with the last stanza, despite the opening being somewhat anti-Platinum Hit. Your job is to sell the product, not necessarily to be honest!

6. Truffle. - Flop Me
I love draggings, but again, this is explicitly not the challenge where I can really appreciate those things. Selling a product, not reviewing it; I guess I should've been more explicit about that in the challenge post, but I figured that this was something already understood As for your songs more specifically, the draggings weren't even that good, except for Jackson and I's being somewhat middling. The hook was funny and the second stanza was accurate, though.

7. mxtthewdelrey - A Cry (PH9)
Cute and to the point. The last couplet threw me off, though: I read this from the perspective of someone already in the game telling someone else about it, but the last lines made it seem like the person entering the game was talking there. I get that it could still be taken from the former's view, but the campiness/forcedness there didn't quite work. The title was weird, too.

8. TheCheetahWings
And we saved the best for last! The one thing I didn't like was the "commit/submit" rhyme since it seemed like you had to shoehorn a "submit" rhyme in and it didn't add anything to the song when each line REALLY matters for the format, but I thought this excellently summed up Platinum Hit, and nailed the challenge (even with added shade)!

[Jackson]

Originally posted by Citrus

Sales over quality, like fave like stan

This game judges actual talent and has lasting impact and a growing brand, when will the other games

[Truffle.]

kii i know it was a flop

[Truffle.]

im at 8 wps already tho so even if i do make it ill probably be banned again n

[Temporal]

Originally posted by Truffle.

kii i know it was a flop

#Justice44U

[Buyonce1814]

Here's the song I had started on Monday but never got time to finish. It's very rough and mostly ideas.

flop

Verse 1:
Word's out you don’t know what you’re about
And you’ve spent your life wallowing.
Somehow, bitterness turned paramount
As the trees gained ring after ring.
Your grief manifested into doubt
The birds ran out of songs to sing
*
Verse 2:
Sun’s bright as another day rises
You don’t have to stay in bed all day
Life’s full of draining compromises
Leading your world into disarray
Look out, the Earth is your horizon
All you want can be embraced
*
Pre-Chorus:
Like oil dwells in every seed,
In every bulb a flower.
All you dream can be achieved
All you need is willpower.
*
Chorus:
So get up and don’t give up
Jsjajanensjsn
*
Verse 3:

Pre-chorus:
Inside your smile resides a light
Like chandeliers up in the sky
So on a dark and moonless night
Just look within; be your own guide

Bridge:
*
Chorus:

[KeshasFansRose]

My jingle for anyone who cares. See y'all next season

PLATINUM NAZIS:
Drag me drag me
Judges want a hit but they want it to be fancy
Drag me drag me
We’re ATRL and the platinum Nazis

Platinum bias, bias to win
We’re writing poetry when it’s songwriting
Your challenge this week is to write another hit
One theme, two themes, three themes, four
Using some big words to up up my score
Imma be antidisestablishmentarianism’s w****

Drag me drag me
Platinum Nazis
Drag me drag me
Platinum hits!

Jackson, Jackson
Writing like he’s Lukasz, end up in a courtoom
Tempor-oral
Running his mouth like I’m spitting in the bedroom
Swiftie thirteen
Stanning for the lord and saviour deity
8 hit, 8th prince
Judging so hard I’m debuting at sixty

Drag me drag me
Platinum Nazis
Drag me drag me
Platinum hits!


http://vocaroo.com/i/s0mtYDHoYx1H

[Truffle.]

I liked my 8th drag but I feel like it needed to be worded better? idk

[Truffle.]

[Temporal]

Originally posted by Truffle.

I liked my 8th drag but I feel like it needed to be worded better? idk

[insert K-Pop shade here] did it better

[Truffle.]

Originally posted by Temporal

[insert K-Pop shade here] did it better

Delirium still flopped, bitch.

[Truffle.]

Originally posted by Citrus

Sorry, I normally only follow ATRL Game Award-winning tournaments

Coincidentally, I happen to bring this up in my song, Flop Me, now available on iTunes!

[TheCheetahwings]

8. TheCheetahWings
And we saved the best for last! The one thing I didn't like was the "commit/submit" rhyme since it seemed like you had to shoehorn a "submit" rhyme in and it didn't add anything to the song when each line REALLY matters for the format, but I thought this excellently summed up Platinum Hit, and nailed the challenge (even with added shade)!

Omg I legitimately thought I was gonna flop HARD this week so I'm glad you liked it.

[Gladion]

Was UFO's pure heroine line about my iconic mess up?

[Temporal]

Originally posted by Truffle.

Delirium still flopped, bitch.

Delirium was global

Originally posted by HausofNiko

Was UFO's pure heroine line about my iconic mess up?

Of course

[Temporal]

Originally posted by TheCheetahwings

Omg I legitimately thought I was gonna flop HARD this week so I'm glad you liked it.

I think simplicity works and you didn't overthink it, so it worked!

[Tylerbv]

Originally posted by Truffle.

im at 8 wps already tho so even if i do make it ill probably be banned again n

fff how do you get banned so much

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idk what i think of my song this week

[Truffle.]

Shoulda Submitted This, Kii

Platinum Hit, Platinum Hit
Platinum Hit rocks
Platinum Hit slay in Platinum Hit bay
Getting silver and gold don't mean ****
If you can't get a platinum hit
Platinum this, Platinum that
Sign up now fat!
If you don't win join the comeback,
Flop like Truffle and you will see
Platinum Hit will bring you crushed dreams

It should've been us.

[Truffle.]

Originally posted by Tylerbv

fff how do you get banned so much

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idk what i think of my song this week

I get reported for the dumbest things omg.
The Little Monsters stay PERCHED on the report button.

Also, Xtina shade here and there, kii!

[Jackson]

Well I started doing reviews for the comeback round but I didn't have much to say so lemme just leak them as hints

I kii’d a little. Love how this was different than your usual style but still screamed you.
8


It wasn’t bad until the judge lines.
5

I guess this was OK. Not too much to look at here other than the second BA cameo appearance.
5.5

This was probably the most jingle-y song and it wasn’t bad either.
7.5

This was pretty cheesy. Suck up.
6

Putting me first Some of the better drags and I liked the cameos
5

Well the 2 lines weren’t that bad
5

You’re not American, are you? The only line I really liked was the rap one.
4