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Tournament: PLΔTINUM HIT • season six
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Keshaspears, I fixed yours
Euphoressay, I can't get through a single essay of yours without bursting out laughing 
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I'm sharing the song I submitted for this round because I took a risk with how everything's structured so, hopefully, y'all can draw whatever inspiration you get from it. That's what each and every artist strives towards, I feel. To be taken seriously and inspire others to create their own lane in the end. 
 Wooden Branches (Where We Begin)
KEY
Female artist
Male artist
Both
VERSE #1
These false promises you gave me
I can’t get through this
Then I ask myself when I'm alone: ‘Am I really worth it?’
Your breath lingers like a vacant stare
Now I feel helpless
If you cut me this far deep, I guess I deserve sh!t
SPOKEN THOUGHT
Let me in, beneath your skin, into your inn, where we begin
Where we begin, in days past ways of wounding each other
Through this empty betrayal
CHORUS
Where do we begin? Are we still pretending?
Cause I really wanna know
Whether you felt the love I wrecked from long ago
But darling, you’re not gonna make me choose
In fear of losing everything else that became true
And all that came between us too/two*
POST-CHORUS/HOOK
We are both just wooden branches
Stumped, with nowhere else to grow
Pathetic twiggy wooden branches
Creating our own shadows
VERSE #2
The longing that has consumed my mind
Infected me like the guilt you designed
I die inside, but you don’t see the blood
So why is it never enough?
We were meant to be fearless
To be everything I'm truly not
I still feel worthless
So why is it never enough?
SPOKEN THOUGHT #2
We’re both just sickly, blasted wooden branches with an urge to reach the end
These leaves of the same seedling planted surround the ashes of our regrets
The parasite that stirs inside all of us smiles in mere upset
CHORUS
Where do we begin? Are we still pretending?
Cause I really wanna know
Whether you felt the love I wrecked from long ago
But darling, you’re not gonna make me choose
In fear of losing everything else that became true
And all that came between us too/two*
POST-CHORUS
We are both just wooden branches
Stumped, with nowhere else to grow
Pathetic twiggy wooden branches
Creating our own shadows
BRIDGE
This was a curse right from the start that’s why we’re drifting so far apart
But I gave you my soul to keep and yet you keep on doubting me
I know you’re (somewhere) over there,
Do you know I’m (living in fear) right here at the brink of despair?
Feeling like it’s what we should be embracing;
The love we grew from this brew of hatred
CHORUS
Where do we begin? Are we still pretending?
Cause I really wanna know
Whether you felt the love I wrecked from long ago
But darling, you’re not gonna make me choose
In fear of losing everything else that became true
And all that came between us too/two*
POST-CHORUS
We are both just wooden branches
Stumped, with nowhere else to grow
But we still never let go
Pathetic twiggy wooden branches
Creating our own shadows
But we still never let go
But we still never let go
*NOTE: This is a double entendre btw.
Quote:
Originally posted by feelslikeadream
Y'all always make me feel bad when you seem upset at the feedback  But I just have to assume I'm helping you in some way with my comments. Plus, some of you that seem worried shouldn't be! If I said something nice in my feedback I probably gave you a 5 or above.
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fffff bitch I can't be too hard on myself now, can I?
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Maybe it's not my place to say this, but this game's contestants react more emotionally to judge feedback than anything else I've ever been in here. Why is that?
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Member Since: 8/31/2013
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Originally posted by ausdaniel
OK! hahah this comforts me so much!  TY |
Oh, I wasn't talking about you.
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Originally posted by GotSkill
Keshaspears, I fixed yours
Euphoressay, I can't get through a single essay of yours without bursting out laughing |
Nnnnnnn; I was actually being serious in that one sis
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Originally posted by Citrus
Maybe it's not my place to say this, but this game's contestants react more emotionally to judge feedback than anything else I've ever been in here. Why is that?
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Because when some of us write songs, they could be very emotionally draining. We want them to be perceived well. They're very important to us! You do put a lot of hard work on them. Not to mention, those who are able to write lyrics, or poetry, tend to be very emotional people, with the ability to express that through words.
EDIT: and to feelslikeadream , oh.
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Quote:
Originally posted by feelslikeadream
Oh, I wasn't talking about you.
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Member Since: 9/1/2012
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Quote:
Originally posted by Citrus
Maybe it's not my place to say this, but this game's contestants react more emotionally to judge feedback than anything else I've ever been in here. Why is that?
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Take from this what you will but I do feel like people are more defensive over their 'pride' and what they feel dignified by.
In this case, it's something personal to all of us - our lyrics which is an art created that no one ever seems to grasp.
It's the Gaga syndrome, in short.
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OK, serious question. Are Euphorian and I the only ones who not only used different colors to seperate the people singing each part, but also included a key to explain the colors before the song? Cause the telepathic realness being served right now is getting to me
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
OK, serious question. Are Euphorian and I the only ones who not only used different colors to seperate the people singing each part, but also included a key to explain the colors before the song. Cause the telepathic realness being served right now is getting to me
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No, we just don't lack in common sense.
Sorry 'bout it.
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Quote:
Originally posted by Truth Teller
[CENTER]OK, serious question. Are Euphorian and I the only ones who not only used different colors to seperate the people singing each part, but also included a key to explain the colors before the song? Cause the telepathic realness being served right now is getting to me
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No, I did this.
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Member Since: 8/31/2013
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Originally posted by ausdaniel
EDIT: and to feelslikeadream , oh.
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 I'm just kidding  Y'all will get used to my sense of humor eventually. Just remember that when I pretend to drag you, it means I like you. Except for Euphoria, who I drag because he deserves it.
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Quote:
Originally posted by ausdaniel
No, I did this.
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Which colors did you use? I used royal blue, plum and purple 
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Quote:
Originally posted by ausdaniel
No, I did this.
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The force is strong with this one, watch out.
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That moment when you write a song feeling like pop culture is in ART in you and you can't wait for the Applause. Then you read the comments and it ignites flames in your heart. Burns every trace of hope you have left. I was a pyramid, now I'm just a grain of sand. I feel like crap. I feel early 2000's P!nk M!ssundaztood. My songs are just like a pill, instead of making me better they keep making me ill. 
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Member Since: 1/2/2014
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Originally posted by Truth Teller
Which colors did you use? I used royal blue, plum and purple
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Um, red, blue and lime a haha.
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Quote:
Originally posted by feelslikeadream
I'm just kidding Y'all will get used to my sense of humor eventually. Just remember that when I pretend to drag you, it means I like you. Except for Euphoria, who I drag because he deserves it. |
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Originally posted by Kesha Rose
That moment when you write a song feeling like pop culture is in ART in you and you can't wait for the Applause. Then you read the comments and it ignites flames in your heart. Burns every trace of hope you have left. I was a pyramid, now I'm just a grain of sand. I feel like crap. I feel early 2000's P!nk M!ssundaztood. My songs are just like a pill, instead of making me better they keep making me ill. |
Gurl scream @ this groundbreaking monologue Pour your wretched heart the **** out bitch!
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Quote:
Originally posted by Kesha Rose
That moment when you write a song feeling like pop culture is in ART in you and you can't wait for the Applause. Then you read the comments and it ignites flames in your heart. Burns every trace of hope you have left. I was a pyramid, now I'm just a grain of sand. I feel like crap. I feel early 2000's P!nk M!ssundaztood. My songs are just like a pill, instead of making me better they keep making me ill. |
Did you skip my comments or something? 
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Quote:
Originally posted by Truth Teller
Which colors did you use? I used royal blue, plum and purple
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I did a blue and purple combo too!
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Quote:
Originally posted by Element
I did a blue and purple combo too!
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My favorite colors
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