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CountryBritney – Georgie
I wish your first and second verses followed the same flow, because I loved the way your first verse flowed and the longer line at the end. I’m not sure if the name you chose is of any significance to you, but without any context it’s an odd name to choose and looks a bit odd in the song. The verses and chorus are passable for the most part, but I didn’t like the postchorus, specifically the luminescent/antidepressant lines. The bridge was basically entirely filler, filled with clichés and familiar language. You managed to pull off a classic feeling song which I enjoyed, but I’m not sure how well it fit the label.
Buyonce1814 – Jimmy
You did a great job of setting up the atmosphere of the song. I felt fully immersed in the storyline by about the third line. The song definitely fit the label in every way as well. Much like I said in the review above, the whole name thing felt a little extra and gimmicky rather than adding a personal layer to the song. Much like in writing a paper or a story, it’s a good idea to not repeat a word too many times. There were a few too many “Jimmy”s that could have been replaced by more descriptive words that gave us a better insight into his life. There were a few little lines I didn’t like (the lagoon and rogue lines for example). I appreciate the research than went into this and it had a fun setting.
Tylerbv – You and I
You chose an interesting subject matter because I work at a bank and I’ve been robbed at gunpoint before at work, so I was kinda getting some anxiety while reading this  . At face level this was a lot like your past songs. You tackled a big storyline and it often felt like you were cramming words together which made the song lack cohesion at times. There were really no standout lines and just as many awkward lines as usual, but together it worked as a story. The one thing you did better, though, was provide an interesting and unexpected plot twist towards the end of the song that drew my interest (although I could have done without the last line, as it was implied and was stronger without it).
Jaxswim – If You Can’t Take the Heat
You realize that tsunamis are waves of water and would put out fires right? Remember that all we see is lyrics and we can’t hear your melodies, so putting something like (two gunshots) in your chorus probably isn’t the best idea. I liked the first and last two lines of the chorus, especially “If you can’t take the heat/get out of the desert” but the rest was filler. Strife is on the list of words I would describe as almost always filler. You did I great job fulfilling the theme and capturing the essence of my artist, but it appears this week as if your biggest downfall was failing to translate what you heard in your head into convincing lyrics.
MattyTacos – Head Over Heart
I haven’t read the other judge’s comments but I already know they’re gonna say something stupid about this, but this was actually really good and by far your best song this season. You finally got the flow down this week and the lyrics were great. You used fairly simple words but succeeded in portraying an emotional, authentic feeling message. There were a ton of clever lines as well, like “sipping on our history, guess I’ll have another drink”, “I hope now you make promises/You don’t intent to break” and the title line.
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