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Originally posted by Sam
18. BlueM – Loud, Rihanna
I’ll start by saying some of your word choices could be better. At first I didn’t know what the first line meant, because I misinterpreted “turned on” as “went against”, when you actually mean “engaged”. I also didn’t understand the final line of your pre-chorus at first, but I realised it was in conjunction with the previous lyric, “you might be that one game-changer / I’ll compare everyone (other partners) to [for] my whole life”, whereas just reading “I’ll compare everyone to my whole life” doesn’t make sense. I’m not sure if you can enter a secret. The chorus would have been fine without the (loud) parts. I like the chorus for the most part though. “Smash” is a bit of an awkward word to use in the second verse, but the rest is good. That’s pretty much the tone for the whole song, there’s parts that could do with some editing, but overall it’s good and you made a sex song that could fit into Rihanna’s Loud record well.
Did it fit the challenge?
Yes, it fits well, something like S&M or Only Girl. “Just give it to me hard, and I’ll give it to you loud” is something I can hear Rihanna sing-moaning over a dance-pop beat.
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Well, see you guys next season
I'm really sad about these comments because I was really proud of this song
Turned on my fantasy is a reference to being turned on sexually with a nudge to having a dirty fantasy and/or seeing possibilities in the guy.
Yeah, the last two lines of the pre-chorus have to be read together
Secrets in the chorus is a metaphor for the intimate parts of the girl/woman singing the song, hence the use of enter
These are my comments to your comments.
I’ll be honest and say I haven’t listened to much Cher at all, but I listened to The Music’s No Good Without You and I can see this song fitting into an album with a similar sound, it’s like an opposition to that in a way because she’s with him now. The lyrics are great which is what people need to keep in mind when writing a dance bop, not to sacrifice the lyrical quality. Finding living proof of love being the truth is perhaps an obvious way to use the title, but it works really well so there’s not much of a complaint there at all.
I really, really wanted to use that, though.
) but the reinvention of the old "I feel like I've loved you all my life" idea outweighed it.
