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Originally posted by AdamAL4
Anyways, I like the lyrics. Some lines might need to be reworked. Like, is this part being sarcastic?
And then I think you could have a different line instead of "not hell". I see a lot of potential in your lyrics, but the only problem is not to really rhyme just for the sake of rhyming. Keep in mind that whatever words rhyme in a song are the words that should be the most important. Since they're rhyming the brain makes them stand out the most to a listener.
But I really like it and I like the idea for the type of music that it would be.
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Thanks! Well no, actually. I wanted to write a violent song for a change, and the tune just came into my head. I wanted to write my own (explicit) version of a girl who is done with love and realises you don't need it to survive in life. Here's one of my better songs...
We Can Go
Imagine a pop-rock vibe for the song. Soft drums in the verses escalating to power-driven pop-rock synths in the choruses...
VERSE 1
Let's go get away, anywhere you want
We can go
I just wanna escape, travel the world with you
We can go
Forget about life, you're most important
We can go
Been waiting this moment for all this time
We can go
PRE-CHORUS
Anywhere we want
Wherever we can live
Just wanna be free
Is something on your mind?
I think now is the time
Let's go live our lives
CHORUS
As long as we're together
We'll stay with each other
Nothing can bring us down
It's a whole new world around
We can breathe, we can run
We can live, we can fight for our lives
We can go now, we can go now
VERSE 2
I wanna go fly with you
We can go
Let's go around and start over
We can go
I wanna wake up every morning with you
We can go
Love me forever and I'll be yours till the end
We can go
PRE-CHORUS
CHORUS
BRIDGE
Pack our bags, take it all
We can leave, on the fall
You don't have to forget them, they'll be there
Till the sun sets and the moon rises
I'll be all yours by your side
You don't have to forget them, they'll be there
CHORUS