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Pears Batch 2
Vermin, all of you
ceremonials & ughgabriel:
Okay, this slayed. I didn't have a problem with the slight wordiness because the meter backed it up and made it still very song-like for me. My problems were moreso that, particularly in the end, the song got a bit extra and over the top. Some of the word choices were a bit too unnatural, such as consecrate, but luckily they didn't impact on my understanding of what was meant.
Auburn & Dylobs:
Lyrically I was slayed, but the story felt a little vague. I think there were a few details missing for me that would've been useful in understanding it more, because I couldn't really get a grip of what the backstory of the relationship between these two characters was supposed to be, but, nevertheless I really enjoyed the spider metaphor throughout.
Moonchild & Aurora:
This read oddly clunky and awkward for the both of you. Usually you both hit the nail on the head but this was not particularly smooth sailing. It feels as though you wrote longer lines originally and then cut them down because some of the cut offs are abrupt and random. I feel like, with the length it's hard to really get a grasp on the story you're trying to tell, and obviously there's the nursery story concept but it seems oddly incorporated and random, it doesn't really make sense with the song's story for me. I think overall, no pun intended, this entry just felt super half baked. I'm a bit shocked cause I feel like the both of you are really good at taking odd or fun concepts and making them well executed and fully fleshed but this was kinda the opposite.
minho & 8thPrince:
The story here was a little abstract, but lyrically I thought the entry was quite strong. Particularly in the third chorus, **** picked up and I was getting a little slayed I must say. I think both of your styles worked quite well together and meshed.
Jackson & Citrus:
Some of the lines were a word or two long but, it didn't really matter cause it was great for the most part. Obviously you went for the jugular with the concept, you bastards. It was nice to see two former winners collab. Oh wait... Well, yes, I enjoyed it anyway.
swiftie13 & Achilles.:
I gave this a 10 and I have nothing else to say.
Gladion & conatus:
When I saw this was a Christmas song I expected some corny trash, but I was actually surprised and enjoyed this! While it's not a conceptual masterpiece, the lyrics were really unexpectedly thoughtful, but were still rather cute. I don't really have much to say about it, ultimately this was just a nice surprise of an entry.
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