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Tournament: PLATINUM HIT 5 [FINALE] [Looking for new host! App inside!]
Member Since: 7/21/2012
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Can you provide hints then Huga? 
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Member Since: 9/15/2012
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Originally posted by EatmeZayn
Can you provide hints then Huga? |
my gay dad always steals my boyfriend
even though they say they're straight
and they promise that they won't fall for him
but they always do every time
because he's so irresistible
they can't help themselves and i hate it!
This.
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Member Since: 3/6/2014
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You judges are so inconsistent. You whine and cry about the contestants being on time but then they have to wait forever to get results. It's unfair. 
Even though I'm not a contestant. I felt it needed to be said
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Member Since: 9/15/2012
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Originally posted by Kesha Rose
You judges are so inconsistent. You whine and cry about the contestants being on time but then they have to wait forever to get results. It's unfair.
Even though I'm not a contestant. I felt it needed to be said |
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Originally posted by Kesha Rose
You judges are so inconsistent. You whine and cry about the contestants being on time but then they have to wait forever to get results. It's unfair.
Even though I'm not a contestant. I felt it needed to be said |
You are correct. It's very unfair…
The priorities I have outside of ATRL shouldn't interfere with this game. Even if it's a dying great-grandmother, or a project worth half of my grade, I should be more focused on this game than usual. The other contestants probably have to go through things like that as well only through the entire week, while we have the whole weekend to say how we feel, and me to organize it… It's incredibly unfair, even if this is my first time hosting a tournament game, I should be more responsible with the deadlines I set for myself and the judges.
Thank you for the observation, I am a horrible host, but I strive to get better. 
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Member Since: 9/12/2012
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Originally posted by Kesha Rose
You judges are so inconsistent. You whine and cry about the contestants being on time but then they have to wait forever to get results. It's unfair.
Even though I'm not a contestant. I felt it needed to be said |
Clock us.
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Member Since: 7/21/2012
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
You are correct. It's very unfair…
The priorities I have outside of ATRL shouldn't interfere with this game. Even if it's a dying great-grandmother, or a project worth half of my grade, I should be more focused on this game than usual. The other contestants probably have to go through things like that as well only through the entire week, while we have the whole weekend to say how we feel, and me to organize it… It's incredibly unfair, even if this is my first time hosting a tournament game, I should be more responsible with the deadlines I set for myself and the judges.
Thank you for the observation, I am a horrible host, but I strive to get better. |
Very mature Nait 
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Member Since: 8/31/2013
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In case it matters, I'd rather have delayed results if it means getting Jack!'s comments too. I prefer a full judging panel to getting results faster.
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Originally posted by feelslikeadream
In case it matters, I'd rather have delayed results if it means getting Jack!'s comments too. I prefer a full judging panel to getting results faster.
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This definitely. It felt weird not getting a full judging last week. I'd rather the judges be thorough than on time
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Member Since: 3/6/2014
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
You are correct. It's very unfair…
The priorities I have outside of ATRL shouldn't interfere with this game. Even if it's a dying great-grandmother, or a project worth half of my grade, I should be more focused on this game than usual. The other contestants probably have to go through things like that as well only through the entire week, while we have the whole weekend to say how we feel, and me to organize it… It's incredibly unfair, even if this is my first time hosting a tournament game, I should be more responsible with the deadlines I set for myself and the judges.
Thank you for the observation, I am a horrible host, but I strive to get better. |
You get mass respect for that.
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Member Since: 2/18/2012
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I've had a very busy week and just got back from a weekend away and haven't been at a computer at all. If you contestants don't mind waiting until tomorrow (or later if Nait is still busy) for my comments, then I'm okay with that.
I know it's not convenient having us judges be off with times, but it's a stressful period for us all, I think, with assignments being handed in for just about everyone, I assume, and any other family struggles which may be going on. So apologies I've been behind this week, but I have been busy this week.
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Member Since: 10/18/2010
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Originally posted by Jack!
I've had a very busy week and just got back from a weekend away and haven't been at a computer at all. If you contestants don't mind waiting until tomorrow (or later if Nait is still busy) for my comments, then I'm okay with that.
I know it's not convenient having us judges be off with times, but it's a stressful period for us all, I think, with assignments being handed in for just about everyone, I assume, and any other family struggles which may be going on. So apologies I've been behind this week, but I have been busy this week.
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Okay, but can I, at least, get some scores from you? That's all I need to continue…
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Member Since: 5/6/2012
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Wait... so we're getting results tonight? 
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Member Since: 10/18/2010
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^You're getting them now!
Okay, so this time it's me and Huga. Jack will come later…
 Sugar Rush - The Kiss(?)
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Originally posted by Hugamari
shower', 'golden'  Now all I can imagine is you being peed on. It throws off literally everything for me. |
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
I can't believe you started this song with a "golden shower"… I don't think you meant that to mean what we think it means… but, at least you were paying attention to the painting throughout this entire song…
I will not lie; you have been consistent, but all I am asking is that you step it up a level. You don't go for broke in your songs; you just stay in your little safe spot and, for me, that 's the most wrong you've done in this whole competition. There needs to be a pull in your songs but it's always safe, so try to make it memorable. Make lyrics that just catapults you as a great writer.
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PeopleLikeUs - Somebody New
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Originally posted by Hugamari
The first verse was nice...then the song just fell to pieces afterwards.
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
You didn't really link to the painting, you just analyzed how it appears. Art is subjective, I understand that, but for some reason when I look at this painting and at your song, I hardly see a link. The first verse kinda describes your connection to the painting and the rest seems to go on this separate tangent. One of my peeves in songwriting is not staying cohesive; basically just writing what comes into your head onto paper without thinking how it connects to each other. Try to stay connected, otherwise it just seems… messy…
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GotSkill - Into the Stars
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Originally posted by Hugamari
GORL. The stuttering I could've forgave if it was minimal, but I get what you're going for, but it's just obnoxious to read. |
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
Everything but the stuttering hook. It didn't need it. You had very strong verses from the get-go, and that hook just tears it down. It doesn't even feel like it's the same song. You have to keep the strength up even higher in the hook, because without the hook it's a phenomenal match to the painting.
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Alesus - The River
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Originally posted by Hugamari
I like how this is like a folktale, and how it reads like a story. I don't really know what to say besides that the spacing was annoying, but that could've been an issue from copy & pasting?
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I am so glad you got a friend on the inside, because I don't think this competition would be the same without you. You really took the painting and made it yours; it was almost like the painting was constructed to your song. Brilliant job. I really don't know if I can critique anything; it's literally perfect!
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Prometheus. - Girls
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Originally posted by Hugamari
Hmm...hmmmmm...I don't get art vibes from it. I thought that there was an easily-deciphered flow to it, though. Also, the bridge was one of the best-flowing parts imo.
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
You sly, sneaky-ass son-of-a-bitch! You really did know this painting! You made out like you were going to have a tough time, but you really knew exactly how to capture this painting. Your execution, however, could've been better, but you surprised me. I didn't think anyone would put the work in, but I guess a few like you really did take this challenge seriously. BTW, nice touch with the Spanish…
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feelslikeadream - The Gates
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Originally posted by Hugamari
Me. I am Fefe...The Elusive Fallen Angel  Nah, but ty for linking the picture. Always helpful. On that note, can't say much more besides that it fit the picture... |
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
Way to make this song work with the painting. Loved how you constructed the entire song, how you have this concept already on deck. And I love that you've been consistent with pushing that envelope. Always one-to-watch…
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EuphorianSea - Nighthawks
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Originally posted by Hugamari
I love the dark feeling to this. You put the little drum thing in the pre-chorus, and usually I'd say that was an eye-sore, but I felt like it actually added something for once. Now I can imagine these intense drums sounding as if they are approaching you and stalking you throughout the song, and considering the dark context of the lyrics, it fits perfectly.
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I love that you took a literal and non-literal take at the term "nighthawks", but I think I was expecting more with your pre-chorus. It seems more of a "set-up" kind of thing and not a "literary" kind of thing (as in, really doesn't help if I can't hear the song). It would've been more had the "drums" meant something to the song, but it looks like it doesn't… But this was nice work, regardless.
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Tymps. - My Gaze
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Originally posted by Hugamari
You should've done a rap like Boss Ass Bitch for this because this gorl clearly don't give a **** right now. She is serving #face and #rag right now. She's #fierce.
Nah, but ty for linking your art piece. It gave me a better idea of what your song was like (Spoiler: I didn't go back and look at the individual paintings for the contestants)
Your structure is intriguing, too. The empty feeling at the end of the song gives me an empty feeling when I look at your art piece now. Kudos on that part.
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
You brought out more than I could ever imagine from your art; you told a story many would not be able to see. And I'm floored by how you've made the age of the painting and how it appears on canvas a part of this! Very, very immaculate work!
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EatmeZayn - Body Parts
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Originally posted by Hugamari
I imagined a sarcastic-sounding /bored tone through the song and I don't know why. Like, I'm sure the song would be fast-paced, but the person singing it would just sound so bored. That's not saying your lyrics are boring, but it's not the most exciting thing you've sent, either.
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
Like I said, art is subjective and we interpret it different ways. Judging by how you see it, you made what looked like a strong character into one that is willing to give it all up very quickly. So, maybe I don't see it the way you see it, but I can't deny your lyrics are on-point for the artwork and theme you see…
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Scorpio King - Patient 02956126
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Originally posted by Hugamari
Now bitch...what is that avi? That has nothing to do with your song, but it's a damn mess.  Speaking of messes...the title is interesting. I guess the same thing goes for the lyrics. I'm not all too sure if I understand what's going on, but art can be that way? Hmm... |
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You're a twisted, demented, little soul, aren't you? Well, while I can't abide at suicide, I'm very glad you took me on this ride. Your story is strong, and it's kinda explicit in detail. Now, I don't want to tell you "stop writing about suicide and death and be happy", I would like for you to try and butter it up while still being your "suicide-y" self… |
Lucky#17 - Wine.
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Originally posted by Hugamari
I wish I knew what was going on in the chorus, because one second the first verse was all artsy, then suddenly confused is me. It's not a bad entry, though.
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Once again, I find myself loving your verse, but not understanding your hook. Without it, this song speaks for itself; the hook is pretty much unneeded… You don't have to follow the rules of "pop songwriting 101" to a "T"; you can bend the rules a little whenever you want to make the message stronger.
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Member Since: 2/18/2012
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Originally posted by Nait Phoenix
Okay, but can I, at least, get some scores from you? That's all I need to continue… |
Yeah, sure, hang on.
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Member Since: 9/15/2012
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Yay, positive comments 
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Member Since: 7/21/2012
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Oh...my comments didn't really help me tbh.
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Be glad I didn't include all the stuttering parts. There were more
I really wish you could've heard the melody though, the stuttering is really what brought the song together if you could hear the whole thing. I don't think I would've changed anything.
Also from the other peoples songs I read this week I disagree a bit with the judges in some, but I guess to each his own.
I knew I wouldn't be getting first this round but I felt like I needed to show this side of me. Next week I'm coming for weaves though. Get ready.
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Member Since: 5/6/2012
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As long as my entry wasn't bad I'm okay with that, I just hope I don't go back to the bottom this time
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Member Since: 9/12/2012
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Originally posted by GotSkill
Be glad I didn't include all the stuttering parts. There were more
I really wish you could've heard the melody though, the stuttering is really what brought the song together if you could hear the whole thing. I don't think I would've changed anything.
Also from the other peoples songs I read this week I disagree a bit with the judges in some, but I guess to each his own.
I knew I wouldn't be getting first this round but I felt like I needed to show this side of me. Next week I'm coming for weaves though. Get ready. |
If it's any consolation, this week has been my favorite of your entries. I'd love to hear it as a song.
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